记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Та илүү тодорхой, энгийн бөгөөд логик холбоос үг ашиглан хариултаа сайжруулах хэрэгтэй. Жишээ нь, эхлээд шууд асуултад хариулах, дараа нь тодруулга өгөх. Мөн үг, өгүүлбэрийн дүрмийн алдааг засах шаардлагатай.

示例: I'm not very good at memorising everything. However, if something makes me feel happy or emotional, I can remember it for a long time. Also, when something is repeated many times, I tend to memorise it easily.

建议: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик дарааллаар өгч, холбоос үг ашиглах хэрэгтэй. Мөн дүрмийн алдааг засаж, илүү энгийн, ойлгомжтой хэллэг ашиглахыг зөвлөж байна.

示例: Yes, once my mom asked me to bring her computer to her work. However, when I arrived at her office, I realized that I had forgotten it. I felt very embarrassed because that was the main reason I went there.

建议: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик холбоос үг ашиглан, өгүүлбэрүүдийг зөв бүтэцтэй болгох хэрэгтэй. Мөн үгсийн сонголтод анхаарал хандуулж, илүү тодорхой тайлбар өгөхийг зөвлөж байна.

示例: In my daily life, I try to stay positive. Every morning, I practice gratitude to start my day feeling relaxed and happy.

建议: Хариултаа илүү тодорхой, логик холбоос үг ашиглан, дүрмийн алдааг засах хэрэгтэй. Мөн илүү өргөн цар хүрээтэй үгс ашиглахыг зөвлөж байна.

示例: When I need to remember something important, I remind myself several times not to forget it. Also, I write it down on my phone or iPad so I can check it later.

× But we did has gave me such a feelings like if it made me feel really happy or emotional then I could memorize it for a long time.

✓ But we did have such feelings like if it made me feel really happy or emotional then I could memorize it for a long time.

The phrase 'did has gave' is incorrect because 'did' requires the base form of the verb. The correct form is 'did have'. Also, 'feelings' should be plural without 'a' before it. Use 'such feelings' instead of 'such a feelings'. In English, when using 'did' for past tense emphasis, the main verb should be in base form, not past tense or past participle.

× But we did has gave me such a feelings like if it made me feel really happy or emotional then I could memorize it for a long time.

✓ But we did have such feelings like if it made me feel really happy or emotional then I could memorize it for a long time.

The word 'feelings' is plural, so it should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. The correct phrase is 'such feelings'. In English, articles must agree with the number of the noun they modify.

× Or when something that has repeated many many times then I also memorize it.

✓ Or when something has been repeated many many times, then I also memorize it.

The phrase 'has repeated' is incorrect here because 'something' is the object being repeated, so the passive form 'has been repeated' is appropriate. In English, to express that an action has happened to the subject multiple times, the present perfect passive form is used.

× Yes, once my mom told me to bring her computer to her work and I came to the her office without bringing the computer and when I got there I realized that I have forgotten it and the reason why I go there was that.

✓ Yes, once my mom told me to bring her computer to her work and I came to her office without bringing the computer, and when I got there I realized that I had forgotten it and the reason why I went there was that.

The phrase 'the her office' is incorrect; 'the' should be removed before 'her office'. Also, 'I have forgotten' should be 'I had forgotten' to maintain past perfect tense for an action completed before another past action. 'I go there' should be 'I went there' to match past tense. In English, possessive pronouns like 'her' do not need 'the' before them. Also, verb tenses must be consistent and appropriate for the time frame.

× Yes, once my mom told me to bring her computer to her work and I came to the her office without bringing the computer and when I got there I realized that I have forgotten it and the reason why I go there was that.

✓ Yes, once my mom told me to bring her computer to her work and I came to her office without bringing the computer, and when I got there I realized that I had forgotten it and the reason why I went there was that.

The sentence describes past events, so the verbs should be in past tense. 'I have forgotten' should be 'I had forgotten' to indicate an action completed before another past action. 'I go there' should be 'I went there' to maintain past tense. In English, past perfect tense is used to show an action completed before another past action.

× In my daily life, I always try to be positive. Every morning I do some graduate. Gratitude to start my day more. Relaxed and in the happy way.

✓ In my daily life, I always try to be positive. Every morning I practice some gratitude to start my day more relaxed and in a happy way.

The word 'graduate' is incorrect here; the intended word is 'gratitude'. Also, 'some gratitude' is a correct quantifier. The phrase 'start my day more. Relaxed and in the happy way.' is fragmented and should be combined into one sentence for clarity. In English, correct word choice and sentence structure are important for clear communication.

× Every morning I do some graduate. Gratitude to start my day more. Relaxed and in the happy way.

✓ Every morning I practice some gratitude to start my day more relaxed and in a happy way.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper structure. Combining them into one sentence improves clarity and flow. In English, sentences should be complete with subject and predicate to convey clear meaning.

× Then I keep telling myself to not forget, or I write it down on my phone or in my iPad to check it back.

✓ Then I keep telling myself not to forget, or I write it down on my phone or my iPad to check it later.

The phrase 'to not forget' is better expressed as 'not to forget' for natural English word order. Also, 'in my iPad' should be 'on my iPad' because we use 'on' for devices. 'Check it back' is unnatural; 'check it later' is more appropriate. In English, prepositions and word order affect the naturalness and correctness of expressions.