记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误，如'memories things'应为'memorising things'，'can't even hardly'为双重否定，应改为'can hardly'。句子结构不够自然，且缺少连接词使表达不连贯。建议使用简单正确的句式，并适当添加连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: Actually, I'm not very good at memorising things because I can hardly remember what happened when I was a child.

建议: 回答中信息混乱且有语法错误，如'117 years old'与上下文不符，'finished the eating and 1000'表达不清。句子缺少连贯性和逻辑性。建议回答时注意时间和事件的逻辑顺序，使用正确的时态和表达方式。

示例: Yes, once I lost my mobile phone in a restaurant after finishing my meal. Fortunately, someone found it and returned it to me.

建议: 回答中词汇使用不准确，如'privacy things'应为'personal items'，句子结构混乱，语法错误较多。建议使用更准确的词汇，简洁表达，并注意主谓一致和句子完整。

示例: I need to remember personal items like my mobile phone, wallet, computer, and keys because forgetting them can cause a lot of trouble.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，如'send messages to myself'应为'send messages to myself', 'check them several times to amber'表达不明。建议使用简单清晰的句子，正确表达记忆方法。

示例: I usually write notes or send messages to myself on my mobile phone and check them several times to make sure I don't forget important things.

× Actually, I'm not very good at memories things.

✓ Actually, I'm not very good at memorising things.

这里动词短语 'good at' 后面应该接动名词形式，'memories' 是名词，正确形式是 'memorising'。

× I can't even hardly remember what happened while I'm child.

✓ I can hardly remember what happened when I was a child.

'can't even hardly' 是双重否定，应改为 'can hardly'。'while I'm child' 中 'while' 用法不当，且 'I'm child' 主语和表语不匹配，应改为 'when I was a child'。

× Yes, 117 years old, I lost my mobile phone in a restaurant.

✓ Yes, when I was 17 years old, I lost my mobile phone in a restaurant.

句子结构混乱，'117 years old' 应为 'when I was 17 years old'，表示年龄。

× I finished the eating and 1000 so I forgot my mobile phone.

✓ I finished eating and then I forgot my mobile phone.

'finished the eating' 中 'the' 不应出现，'eating' 应为动名词形式。'and 1000' 无意义，应改为 'and then'。

× Fortunately someone find my phone and come back to me.

✓ Fortunately, someone found my phone and came back to me.

时态错误，描述过去事件应使用过去式 'found' 和 'came'。

× I think I need to remember some privacy things like mobile phone, words, computer and the key.

✓ I think I need to remember some personal things like my mobile phone, passwords, computer, and keys.

'privacy things' 用词不当，应为 'personal things'。'words' 应为 'passwords' 更合适。名词前缺少冠词或复数形式。

× Those things are not very important since, but is necessary.

✓ Those things are not very important, but they are necessary.

'since' 用法错误，且句子缺少主语和谓语，需改为 'but they are necessary'。

× If I forget it is make me troublesome.

✓ If I forget them, it makes me troubled.

句子结构错误，主谓不一致，'is make' 应改为 'makes'，'troublesome' 用词不当，应为 'troubled'。

× I always read them on note of send messages to myself on my mobile phone.

✓ I always write them on notes or send messages to myself on my mobile phone.

'read them on note of send messages' 结构混乱，应改为 'write them on notes or send messages'。

× And check them several times to amber.

✓ And check them several times to remember.

'amber' 用词错误，应为 'remember'。

× I don't to forget them.

✓ I don't want to forget them.

'don't to forget' 结构错误，应为 'don't want to forget'。