记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and provide specific supporting details using linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things. For example, during my medical studies, I practiced a lot which helped me remember important information and succeed in exams.

建议: Your answer needs clearer structure and more natural language. Start with a direct response, then explain with specific details using linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, once I forgot my date of birth because I had just woken up and was still confused. Although it is something I should always remember, this moment was very surprising and upsetting for me.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant or confusing information. Focus on answering directly with clear, specific details and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: In my daily life, I need to remember my schedule and important tasks. For instance, I plan my day carefully to ensure I complete all my work and appointments on time.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Provide a direct response, use linking words, and give specific examples to make your answer more natural and effective.

示例: I remember important things by associating them with my close friends and family, such as their birthdays. Additionally, I use mental maps to recall directions to my workplace.

× Yes, I would like to see him very good at memorizing things.

✓ Yes, I would like to say I am very good at memorizing things.

The phrase 'very good' is an adjective phrase that should describe a subject. 'See him very good' is incorrect because 'see' is not the right verb here and 'him' is the wrong pronoun. The student likely meant to say 'I am very good' to describe themselves. The correction uses 'say' and 'I am' to properly express the intended meaning.

× Back in school.

✓ Back in school,

'Back in school.' is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and subject. It should be connected to the previous or next sentence to form a complete sentence. Adding a comma connects it properly.

× It helped me become a good medical doctor and shaped my life around exams and a lot of practice of equally helped me as well.

✓ It helped me become a good medical doctor and shaped my life around exams and a lot of practice, which also helped me as well.

The original sentence is confusing and lacks clarity. The phrase 'practice of equally helped me as well' is ungrammatical. Adding 'which also helped me as well' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× Set an Lee one time.

✓ Once, I forgot once.

The original sentence 'Set an Lee one time.' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo. Assuming the student meant to say 'Once, I forgot once.' or 'One time, I forgot.' The correction uses past tense to match the context of a past event.

× I've just woken up and even though it's supposed to be a memory there supposed to stick with for the rest of your life.

✓ I've just woken up and even though it's supposed to be a memory that is supposed to stick with you for the rest of your life.

The pronoun 'there' is incorrectly used instead of 'that is' or 'which is'. Also, 'your' is inconsistent with the first person narrative. Changing to 'you' is acceptable in general statements, but 'your' is fine if addressing the listener. The correction clarifies the relative clause and pronoun usage.

× I forgot this and it was a very devastating time for me.

✓ I forgot this and it was a very devastating time for me.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× Every day I need to remember my name, ** **** so bad when I walk and when my routine is for the whole day.

✓ Every day I need to remember my name, and I feel so bad when I walk and when I think about my routine for the whole day.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear, with missing words and awkward phrasing. Adding 'and I feel' and 'I think about' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× This is because this has come to become part of me, despite the fact that memorizing them took a whole lot of time.

✓ This is because it has become part of me, despite the fact that memorizing it took a whole lot of time.

The pronoun 'this' should be replaced with 'it' for clarity and consistency. Also, 'them' is incorrect if referring to a singular concept; 'it' is appropriate.

× Yes, I do remember so many important things going from my own petty close friends and family spent the dates.

✓ Yes, I do remember so many important things, including dates from my close friends and family.

The original sentence is confusing and contains unclear phrases like 'petty close friends' and 'spent the dates'. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× I also remember directions to my place of work and.

✓ I also remember directions to my place of work.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' which is incomplete. Removing 'and.' completes the sentence properly.