记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 문장을 완성하고, 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 세부사항을 포함하세요. 예를 들어, 'I am good at memorizing people's birthdays and their MBTI types because I find personality tests interesting.'처럼 말할 수 있습니다.

示例: I am quite good at memorizing certain things, especially people's birthdays and their MBTI personality types, because I find personality tests fascinating and it helps me understand them better.

建议: 답변이 중복되고 문장이 끊겨서 이해하기 어렵습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 이유, 결과를 포함한 구체적인 세부사항을 연결어와 함께 사용하세요. 예를 들어, 'Yes, I once forgot my best friend's birthday because I was very busy, which made her disappointed, but she understood.'

示例: Yes, I once forgot my best friend's birthday because I was very busy at that time. As a result, she was disappointed, but fortunately, she understood my situation.

建议: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 끊겨서 자연스럽지 않습니다. 주제 문장을 명확히 하고, 구체적인 예시와 이유를 연결어와 함께 제시하세요. 예를 들어, 'In my daily life, I need to remember many simple but important tasks, especially when I close the shop, because missing one can cause problems.'

示例: In my daily life, I need to remember many simple but important tasks, especially when I close the shop. For example, I have to check if all the lights are off and the doors are locked, because missing one task can cause problems later.

建议: 답변이 불완전하고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 명확한 주제 문장과 구체적인 방법을 설명하며, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 완성하세요. 예를 들어, 'I usually write important things on my phone so that when I see the notes, I am reminded easily.'

示例: When I need to remember something important, I usually write it down on my phone. This way, whenever I check my phone, the notes remind me, which I think is the best method for me.

× Not for everything, but I'm good at.

✓ Not for everything, but I'm good at it.

The phrase 'good at' requires an object to complete the meaning. In this case, 'it' refers to the implied object, so it should be added for grammatical correctness.

× Memorizing other persons. Birthday and their MBTI which is 1 of. Personality test.

✓ Memorizing other people's birthdays and their MBTI, which is one of the personality tests.

'Other persons' is unnatural; 'other people' is more appropriate. 'Birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to match 'people'. Also, the sentence is fragmented and needs to be combined properly. '1 of' should be 'one of' and 'personality test' should be plural 'personality tests'.

× Yes I have. I've forgotten my best friends first date.

✓ Yes, I have. I've forgotten my best friend's first date.

The possessive form 'best friend's' requires an apostrophe to indicate possession. Also, a comma after 'Yes' improves clarity.

× I don't know why but at that time I was very busy so I. I have. I don't know what day is today so I just forgot her birthday and then she was very disappointed but she understood me.

✓ I don't know why, but at that time I was very busy, so I forgot. I didn't know what day it was, so I just forgot her birthday. She was very disappointed, but she understood me.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incomplete sentences. It needs to be restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness. 'I have' is incomplete and should be removed or completed. 'What day is today' should be 'what day it was' for correct indirect question form.

× In my daily life I need to remember many simple but important thing is specially when I close the shop.

✓ In my daily life, I need to remember many simple but important things, especially when I close the shop.

'Thing' should be plural 'things' to agree with 'many'. 'Specially' is incorrect; the correct word is 'especially'. Commas are added for clarity.

× When I close the shop I need to do. Many simple things so it's easy to miss 1 so I need to try to remember everything.

✓ When I close the shop, I need to do many simple things, so it's easy to miss one. Therefore, I need to try to remember everything.

The sentence is fragmented and needs to be combined properly. '1' should be spelled out as 'one' in formal writing. Commas improve readability.

× If I need to remember something important, I used to write on my. **** so it will remind me when I see the poem.

✓ If I need to remember something important, I write it down on my **** so it will remind me when I see the note.

'Used to write' implies a past habit, but the context suggests a current habit, so 'write' is more appropriate. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; 'poem' seems incorrect and is replaced with 'note' for logical sense.