记忆— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Improve sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use clearer linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, say: "Yes, I am quite good at memorising things because I can easily recall numbers and dates. I especially remember special dates like birthdays, including my own, my daughter's, and my husband's, as these are connected with my love and help improve my memory."

示例: Yes, I am quite good at memorising things because I can easily recall numbers and dates. I especially remember special dates like birthdays, including my own, my daughter's, and my husband's, as these are connected with my love and help improve my memory.

建议: Focus on clarity and grammar. Use linking words to explain feelings and reasons. For example: "Yes, I have definitely forgotten something important. Recently, I forgot my best friend's birthday, which made me feel very sad because she is very close to me. I apologized sincerely because I love her a lot."

示例: Yes, I have definitely forgotten something important. Recently, I forgot my best friend's birthday, which made me feel very sad because she is very close to me. I apologized sincerely because I love her a lot.

建议: Use clearer sentence structure and avoid redundancy. Use linking words to organize ideas. For example: "In daily life, I need to remember personal appointments, such as visits to doctors and dentists. Also, I remember special occasions like my own birthday and my husband's, which are very important to me."

示例: In daily life, I need to remember personal appointments, such as visits to doctors and dentists. Also, I remember special occasions like my own birthday and my husband's, which are very important to me.

建议: Improve fluency and grammar. Use linking words to explain methods clearly. For example: "Although I am generally good at memorising, sometimes I forget important things. Therefore, I write them down in my personal diary. For example, I set alarms on my phone and use the calendar app to remind me. These methods are very important for me."

示例: Although I am generally good at memorising, sometimes I forget important things. Therefore, I write them down in my personal diary. For example, I set alarms on my phone and use the calendar app to remind me. These methods are very important for me.

× Yes I am pretty good memorizing things becauses I I can easily recall number and date and I remember special dates like birthday and my own birthday, my daughter, my husband because it can be connected with my love and improve my memory.

✓ Yes, I am pretty good at memorizing things because I can easily recall numbers and dates, and I remember special dates like birthdays, my own birthday, my daughter's, and my husband's because they are connected with my love and improve my memory.

The phrase 'good memorizing things' is incorrect; the correct form is 'good at memorizing things' because 'good at' is the proper collocation. Also, 'becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'Number and date' should be pluralized to 'numbers and dates' to match the context. The sentence was also run-on and needed commas for clarity.

× Yes definitely I have for forgetting.

✓ Yes, definitely I have forgotten.

The phrase 'I have for forgetting' is incorrect. The correct past participle form 'forgotten' should be used with 'have' to form the present perfect tense: 'I have forgotten'.

× Recently I was forgetting my best friend birthday and that time I felt very sad because she's a very close to me and I really apologize.

✓ Recently, I forgot my best friend's birthday and at that time I felt very sad because she is very close to me and I really apologized.

The past continuous 'was forgetting' is incorrect here; simple past 'forgot' is appropriate for a completed action. 'My best friend birthday' needs possessive form: 'my best friend's birthday'. 'She's a very close to me' should be 'she is very close to me' without 'a'. 'I really apologize' should be past tense 'I really apologized' to match the past context.

× I heard becauses she's my best friend Anna I love her.

✓ I said because she's my best friend Anna and I love her.

The word 'heard' is incorrect in this context; likely the speaker meant 'said'. Also, 'becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. The sentence needed conjunction 'and' to connect the clauses properly.

× That time I felt very sad for him for her.

✓ At that time, I felt very sad for her.

The phrase 'for him for her' is confusing and redundant. Since the friend is female, 'for her' is correct. 'At that time' is a better temporal phrase.

× Well, according to me, remember in our daily life like you remember personal, personal appointments with the any doctors and dentists and mostly you remember your special occasion dates like about their my own birthday, my husband and some love.

✓ Well, according to me, in our daily life, we remember personal appointments with doctors and dentists, and mostly we remember special occasion dates like my own birthday, my husband's, and some loved ones'.

The phrase 'according to me' is awkward; better to say 'in my opinion' but kept as is per instruction. 'Remember in our daily life like you remember' is redundant; simplified to 'in our daily life, we remember'. 'With the any doctors' is incorrect; 'with doctors' is correct. 'Like about their my own birthday' is incorrect; corrected to 'like my own birthday'. 'Some love' is unclear; changed to 'some loved ones' to make sense.

× Well, well, a best basically, I'm a good memorizing thing, but some sometime I forgot so that I'm I'm in some important things right down on my personal diary.

✓ Well, basically, I'm good at memorizing things, but sometimes I forget, so I write down some important things in my personal diary.

'I'm a good memorizing thing' is incorrect; correct form is 'I'm good at memorizing things'. 'Some sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'I'm I'm in some important things right down' is incorrect; corrected to 'I write down some important things'. 'Right down' is replaced with 'write down' which is the correct phrasal verb.

× And for example, sometime I said the alarm in my phone and in the calendar.

✓ And for example, sometimes I set the alarm on my phone and in the calendar.

'Said the alarm' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'set the alarm'. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes'. The preposition 'in my phone' should be 'on my phone'.