机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be more concise, correct grammar, avoid fillers and repetition, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two supporting details linked with a connector.

示例: My favourite machine at home is the washing machine. It saves me a lot of time because I no longer have to wash clothes by hand, and many models also dry clothes quickly. For example, I can finish washing and drying a load in under two hours, which is very useful on busy weekdays.

建议: Improve grammar and clarity, remove vague words, and use linking words to connect ideas. Give a clear reason and one specific example of how these machines help.

示例: Yes, I think both washing machines and vacuum cleaners play a vital role in modern homes because they save time for people who work full-time. For example, a vacuum cleaner can clean my apartment in 20 minutes compared with an hour of manual sweeping, so I can spend that saved time on other tasks.

建议: Good habit—make sentences grammatically correct and avoid repetition. Use precise vocabulary (instructions, operate, troubleshoot) and link reasons with connectors.

示例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine because the manual explains how to operate it safely and troubleshoot common issues. For instance, the washing machine manual showed me how to clear a clogged filter, which prevented a costly repair.

建议: Clarify and correct grammar, avoid vague phrasing, and give a clear consequence or example. Start with a direct statement, then support it with a specific reason and example using linking words.

示例: Yes, it is important to read the instructions because they ensure user safety and help prevent damage to the product. For example, the manual for my blender warned against filling it above the max line, which avoided motor overload and extended its lifespan.

× I like washing machine very much because I can easily wash my uh, dress and I can dry it effortlessly.

✓ I like the washing machine very much because I can easily wash my clothes and dry them effortlessly.

Singular/plural errors: 'washing machine' needs 'the' (article error) but main issue is 'dress' used for clothing in general; use plural 'clothes'. Also pronoun 'it' referring to 'clothes' should be plural 'them'. Use of definite article corrected to match reference to a specific appliance. Suggestions: use 'the washing machine' when referring to the household appliance and 'clothes' for garments; match pronouns in number with their antecedents.

× Before we used to wash dress by our hand and it was quite difficult and it took long time to dry it.

✓ Before, we used to wash clothes by hand and it was quite difficult, and it took a long time for them to dry.

Tense/wording: 'used to' is fine but 'wash dress by our hand' is incorrect: use plural 'clothes', idiomatic 'by hand' (not 'by our hand'). 'It took long time' needs 'a long time' and 'it' (singular) should match 'clothes' so use 'them' or rephrase 'for them to dry'. Suggestions: say 'used to wash clothes by hand' and include 'a' before 'long time' and match pronouns to plural nouns.

× So after that washing machine and machine, umm, it changed a lot.

✓ So after we got a washing machine, things changed a lot.

Sentence structure/word choice: 'washing machine and machine' is redundant and ungrammatical. 'It changed a lot' lacks a clear subject; better to say 'things changed a lot' or 'my life changed a lot'. Suggestions: be concise and provide a clear subject, e.g., 'after we got a washing machine, things changed a lot.'

× Yes, I think both washing machine and sweeping machines placing any vital role in our homes, especially those who are working, they won't get enough time to do everything.

✓ Yes, I think both washing machines and sweeping machines play a vital role in our homes, especially for people who are working; they don't have enough time to do everything.

Plural and verb form: 'both washing machine and sweeping machines' mixes singular and plural; make both plural or singular consistently. 'placing any vital role' is incorrect verb choice and form; use 'play a vital role'. 'those who are working' better as 'people who are working'. 'they won't get enough time' should be 'they don't have enough time' for present general truth. Suggestions: match plurality, use 'play a vital role', and use present simple 'don't have' for habitual facts.

× But with this missions can reduce our workload and uh, it can make everything clean quickly than human beings.

✓ But these machines can reduce our workload, and they can make everything cleaner more quickly than people can.

Pronoun and word choice: 'this missions' mixes singular demonstrative with plural noun; use 'these machines'. 'It' should match plural 'machines' so use 'they'. Comparative structure 'clean quickly than human beings' is ungrammatical: use comparative adverb 'more quickly' and 'people' instead of 'human beings' here; include 'can' for comparison 'more quickly than people can'. Suggestions: ensure demonstratives match number, match pronouns to antecedents, and use correct comparative forms.

× Yes, I do. Insertions are very helpful because we can know how to operate this and if it's something happened, the instruction help us to solve the problem quickly.

✓ Yes, I do. Instructions are very helpful because they tell us how to operate something, and if something happens, the instructions help us solve the problem quickly.

Article and word choice: 'Insertions' is a misspelling of 'instructions'. 'we can know how to operate this' is awkward; use 'they tell us how to operate something' or 'the appliance'. 'if it's something happened' is incorrect structure; use 'if something happens'. 'the instruction help us' needs plural agreement 'instructions help us'. Suggestions: correct to 'instructions', use present simple 'tell/ help', and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× So most of the time I read instruction before the before I use the machine.

✓ So most of the time I read the instructions before I use the machine.

Tense/wording and article: 'read' in present simple is acceptable for habitual action. Main errors: missing article 'the' before 'instructions' and redundant words 'before the before'. Suggestions: use 'the instructions' and remove repetition.

× Instructions are provided to ensures people safety because some product may danger, some products may not, but it is a safer side to reel the instruction and use the product.

✓ Instructions are provided to ensure people's safety because some products may be dangerous and some may not, but it is safer to read the instructions before using the product.

Quantifier/articles and word forms: 'ensures people safety' should be 'ensure people's safety' (verb form and possessive). 'some product may danger' is wrong: use 'some products may be dangerous'. 'safer side to reel the instruction' has multiple errors: 'safer to read the instructions' and 'before using the product' clarifies the idea. Suggestions: use plural 'products', correct adjective 'dangerous', use possessive 'people's safety', and 'read the instructions'.

× By that it again helps to easily use the product and it can reduce the damage also.

✓ This also helps you use the product more easily and can reduce damage.

Word order and redundancy: 'By that it again helps to easily use the product' is awkward and splits infinitive unnecessarily; prefer 'helps you use the product more easily'. 'reduce the damage also' is better as 'reduce damage' without 'the' or 'also'. Suggestions: use clear subject ('this' or 'it'), place adverbs after the verb or use 'more easily', and avoid unnecessary articles.