机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to use correct grammar and more natural expressions. For example, say "Air Fryer" instead of "Air Flyer" and use "healthier" correctly. Also, avoid redundancy and make your answer clearer by structuring it well.

示例: My favorite appliance at home is the air fryer because it allows me to cook a variety of healthy meals quickly. I think it's a great choice for anyone who wants to eat healthier without spending too much time cooking.

建议: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, use "especially for people who have busy work schedules" and avoid awkward phrasing.

示例: Yes, I believe washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important, especially for people with busy work schedules. They save time and energy by helping with household chores efficiently.

建议: Focus on grammar and sentence clarity. Use plural forms correctly and add linking words for coherence. For example, say "I always read the instructions before using a machine because different companies have different buttons."

示例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a new machine because different brands have different controls. This helps me understand how to operate it properly and avoid mistakes.

建议: Work on grammar and clarity. Use linking words and complete sentences. For example, say "It's definitely very important because it helps us use the machine smoothly and prevents damage."

示例: Yes, I think reading the instructions is very important because it helps us use the machine correctly and avoid damaging it, especially when it's new.

× My favorite appliance at home would be Air Flyer because it can cook anything that I love with being healthy too, so I think it is the best option for someone who want to be more healthier.

✓ My favorite appliance at home would be the Air Fryer because it can cook anything that I love while being healthy too, so I think it is the best option for someone who wants to be healthier.

The phrase 'with being healthy too' is incorrect; 'while being healthy too' is better to express simultaneous actions. 'Air Flyer' is likely a typo for 'Air Fryer' and needs the definite article 'the'. 'Someone who want' should be 'someone who wants' to agree in number and person. 'More healthier' is incorrect because 'healthier' already implies comparison; 'more' is redundant.

× I think having them are quite convenient for people who don't have a lot of time, especially a work that has quite busy schedule, so you don't have any energy left to do those chores.

✓ I think having them is quite convenient for people who don't have a lot of time, especially workers who have quite busy schedules, so you don't have any energy left to do those chores.

The subject 'having them' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. 'A work' is incorrect; 'work' is uncountable or should be 'a job' or 'workers'. 'Has quite busy schedule' should be 'have quite busy schedules' to agree in number with plural 'workers'.

× Of course I would read instruction before because different company provide different buttons so it's really hard to know what to do first when you buy a new machine.

✓ Of course I would read the instructions before because different companies provide different buttons, so it's really hard to know what to do first when you buy a new machine.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' because it refers to multiple steps. 'Different company' should be 'different companies' to match plural subject with plural verb 'provide'.

× I think study the instruction before is really important.

✓ I think studying the instructions beforehand is really important.

The verb 'study' should be in gerund form 'studying' to act as a noun. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions'. 'Before' as an adverb is better replaced with 'beforehand' for clarity.

× It's definitely very important it's help us process with the machined smoothly without breaking down the newly bought machines because every machine has its own difficult to.

✓ It's definitely very important because it helps us operate the machine smoothly without breaking down the newly bought machines, as every machine has its own difficulties.

'It's help' should be 'it helps' for subject-verb agreement. 'Process with the machined' is incorrect; 'operate the machine' is clearer. 'Difficult' should be plural 'difficulties' and 'has its own difficult to' is ungrammatical; 'has its own difficulties' is correct.