机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中表达了观点，但语言不够自然，句子结构重复且有语法错误。建议简化句子，避免重复，并使用更准确的表达。

示例: My favourite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because we have a cat, and its hair is everywhere. Therefore, the vacuum helps us keep the house clean.

建议: 回答中表达了观点，但句子结构混乱，语法错误较多，表达不够清晰。建议使用更简洁的句子，注意语法和逻辑连贯。

示例: Yes, I think both washing machines and vacuum cleaners are important. For instance, I often wash my clothes late at night because I don't want to spend time washing by hand, so the washing machine helps me a lot.

建议: 回答表达不清晰，语法和用词错误较多，影响理解。建议简化表达，明确说明观点，并使用正确的语法。

示例: It depends. If the machine is easy to use, I usually don't read the instructions and just try it. But if it's complicated, I read the instructions carefully before using it.

建议: 回答重复且表达混乱，语法错误较多。建议直接表达观点，避免重复，并使用简洁明了的句子。

示例: I think reading instructions is not always necessary. It depends on the machine. For simple machines, I don't read them, but for complex ones, I do.

× Well my favorite machine in my home is a vacuum machine because we have a cat in our home, his hair is everywhere.

✓ Well, my favorite machine in my home is a vacuum cleaner because we have a cat in our home, and its hair is everywhere.

这里“vacuum machine”应改为“vacuum cleaner”，因为英语中常用“vacuum cleaner”表示吸尘器。'his hair'指代猫，应使用物主代词“its”而非“his”。

× So we need a vacuum machine to clean the hair to clean his hair like.

✓ So we need a vacuum cleaner to clean the hair, to clean its hair.

句中“to clean his hair like”结构不正确，去掉“like”使句子更通顺。

× For example, I always will wash my dirty clothes in very late night, but actually I don't want to wash my clothes, it's very it bother me and I want to sleep so I can ask my washing machine for help.

✓ For example, I always wash my dirty clothes very late at night, but actually I don't want to wash my clothes; it really bothers me and I want to sleep, so I can ask my washing machine for help.

“always will wash”时态和语序不当，应改为“always wash”。“in very late night”应为“very late at night”。“it's very it bother me”语法错误，应为“it really bothers me”。

× If the machine is very handy, I don't think I will read the instruction or just fiddle around it and it's but is.

✓ If the machine is very handy, I don't think I will read the instructions or just fiddle around with it, but if it isn't,

“read the instruction”应为复数“read the instructions”。“fiddle around it”缺少介词“with”。“it's but is”语序错误，应改为“but if it isn't”。

× If it is not very a user friendly, I think I will change it very carefully.

✓ If it is not very user-friendly, I think I will change it very carefully.

“very a user friendly”中冠词和形容词顺序错误，应为“very user-friendly”。

× Yeah, as I mentioned above, there is different situations for me to change if it is necessary to read the instruction, but I think the instruction read the instruction is not very necessary or it's not a necessity to read it before use the machine.

✓ Yeah, as I mentioned above, there are different situations for me to decide if it is necessary to read the instructions, but I think reading the instructions is not very necessary or it's not a necessity to read them before using the machine.

“there is different situations”主谓不一致，应为“there are different situations”。“read the instruction”应为复数“read the instructions”。“before use the machine”应为“before using the machine”。