机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时句子结构不够清晰，表达有些重复和冗长。建议简化句子，明确表达观点，并使用连接词使内容更连贯。

示例: My favourite machine at home is the fridge, especially in summer. It keeps my food fresh, which is very convenient when I want a quick breakfast or lunch.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和表达不够流畅，建议使用更准确的句子结构，并用连接词使内容更连贯。

示例: Yes, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are very important. They make housework easier and faster, especially for busy people. For example, washing machines save us from washing clothes by hand, and sweeping machines help clean the floor quickly.

建议: 回答表达不够清晰，存在语法错误和逻辑混乱。建议理清思路，使用正确的时态和句型，避免重复。

示例: When I get a new machine, I usually read the instructions because I want to know how to use it properly. However, if the machine is easy to use, I might skip the long instructions and try it myself.

建议: 回答中有语法错误，表达不够自然。建议使用更准确的表达方式，并注意句子连贯性。

示例: Yes, I think reading instructions is very important. They help us use machines correctly and safely. If we skip them, we might waste time learning by trial and error, which can be unsafe.

× Well, my favorite machine, my home is the fridge, especially in the summertime because they can contain the food for me to keep it fresh and I will store many food in the fridge for sometimes very convenient for me to have a break, have a quick breakfast or lunch.

✓ Well, my favorite machine in my home is the fridge, especially in the summertime because it can contain food for me to keep it fresh and I will store much food in the fridge sometimes. It's very convenient for me to have a break, have a quick breakfast or lunch.

这里“they”指代单数的“fridge”，应使用单数代词“it”。“food”是不可数名词，前面不应使用“many”，应使用“much”。此外，句子结构混乱，调整后更通顺。

× Well, my favorite machine, my home is the fridge, especially in the summertime because they can contain the food for me to keep it fresh and I will store many food in the fridge for sometimes very convenient for me to have a break, have a quick breakfast or lunch.

✓ Well, my favorite machine in my home is the fridge, especially in the summertime because it can contain food for me to keep it fresh and I will store much food in the fridge sometimes. It's very convenient for me to have a break, have a quick breakfast or lunch.

“in my home”表示“在我家”，应使用介词“in”而非逗号分隔。

× And this makes our lives, especially some busy people, are more convenient and more quickly to do the housework.

✓ And this makes our lives, especially for some busy people, more convenient and quicker to do the housework.

“more quickly”应改为形容词“quicker”修饰“to do the housework”，且“are”多余，应删除。

× For example, washing machines can help to wash the clothes rather than do it by ourselves.

✓ For example, washing machines can help to wash clothes rather than doing it by ourselves.

“the clothes”中“the”不必要，且“do it”应改为动名词形式“doing it”以保持结构一致。

× And sweeping machines really save time. We do.

✓ And sweeping machines really save time, and we do too.

“We do.”句子不完整，需与前句连接，表达“我们确实如此”。

× Well, actually when the machine comes to my home, I really read the instructions because the machines I buy were very easy to use and I have know how to use it.

✓ Well, actually when the machine comes to my home, I really read the instructions because the machines I buy are very easy to use and I know how to use them.

“buy”应使用现在时“buy”，因为是一般事实；“have know”错误，应为“know”；“it”指代复数“machines”，应改为“them”。

× So I will not just to read the long and difficult instructions, umm I just do it myself and need to use it.

✓ So I will not just read the long and difficult instructions, umm I just do it myself and need to use it.

“will not just to read”中“to”多余，应去掉。

× So I will not just to read the long and difficult instructions, umm I just do it myself and need to use it.

✓ So I will not just read the long and difficult instructions, umm I just do it myself and need to use it.

“need to use it”中“it”指代不明确，建议明确指代或改为“need to use them”如果指多个机器。

× Sure, it's really important. The instructions clearly let us know how to properly use the different machines.

✓ Sure, it's really important. The instructions clearly let us know how to properly use different machines.

“the different machines”中“the”不必要，去掉更自然。

× And if we skip so long instructions, we need to just learn doing it by ourselves.

✓ And if we skip such long instructions, we need to just learn to do it by ourselves.

“so long instructions”应为“such long instructions”；“learn doing”错误，应为“learn to do”。

× It's maybe a waste of time and not so safely.

✓ It may be a waste of time and not so safe.

“maybe”用法错误，应为“may be”；“safely”是副词，应改为形容词“safe”修饰“not so”。