机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid grammatical errors and use more natural expressions. For example, say "it saves me time cleaning a lot of dishes after meals" instead of "save time from clean bunches of dishes". Also, use adverbs correctly, e.g., "quickly" instead of "fastly". Keep your answer concise and clear.

示例: My favourite machine at home is the dishwasher because it saves me a lot of time cleaning dishes after meals. It works quickly and efficiently, leaving everything spotless.

建议: Focus on clearer sentence structure and avoid redundancy. For example, instead of "really fast-paced work and really intense daily routine," say "a fast-paced and busy daily routine." Also, use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I think washing machines and vacuum cleaners are very important because we have a fast-paced and busy daily routine. They save us time and help keep our homes clean.

建议: Try to use more formal language and avoid contractions like "gonna to." Also, improve sentence flow by using linking words such as "however" or "but." For example, "I usually don't read instructions for simple machines like washing machines or microwaves because they are easy to use. However, for more complex devices like cleaning robots, I definitely read the instructions to avoid damaging them."

示例: I usually don't read the instructions for simple machines like washing machines or microwaves because they are easy to use. However, for more complex devices like cleaning robots, I definitely read the instructions to avoid damaging them.

建议: Work on grammar and clarity. For example, say "people often use machines incorrectly, which can damage them" instead of "people usually just use it in the way they prefer, but not the right one." Also, use linking words like "therefore" to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I think it's important to read instructions because people often use machines incorrectly, which can damage them. Therefore, reading the instructions helps us use machines properly and efficiently.

× Also it's can do his work cleanly, nicely and fastly.

✓ Also it can do its work cleanly, nicely and quickly.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'it's' (it is) followed by 'can', which is grammatically incorrect. Also, 'his' is an incorrect pronoun for a machine; the correct possessive pronoun is 'its'. Additionally, 'fastly' is not a proper adverb; the correct adverb form is 'quickly'. The corrected sentence uses 'it can' and 'its' appropriately and replaces 'fastly' with 'quickly'.

× It can help me to save time from clean bunches of dishes after meals.

✓ It can help me save time cleaning bunches of dishes after meals.

The phrase 'save time from clean' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'save time' followed by a gerund to indicate the activity saved. Also, 'help me to save' can be simplified to 'help me save'. The corrected sentence uses 'save time cleaning' which is grammatically correct.

× By the help with them, they save our time and just help us to keep our house.

✓ With their help, they save us time and help us keep our house.

The phrase 'By the help with them' is incorrect. The correct prepositional phrase is 'With their help'. Also, 'save our time' should be 'save us time' to indicate the benefit to the speaker. The phrase 'help us to keep' can be simplified to 'help us keep'. The corrected sentence uses proper prepositions and pronouns.

× I'm not gonna to read the instruction because it's easy to handle.

✓ I'm not going to read the instructions because they're easy to handle.

The phrase 'gonna to' is incorrect; 'gonna' is an informal contraction of 'going to' and should not be followed by 'to'. Also, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as machines usually have multiple instructions. The corrected sentence uses 'going to' properly and pluralises 'instructions'.

× But if I need to use some more complex one like the cleaning machine or other robots, I would definitely read the instruction in case I break it.

✓ But if I need to use a more complex one like a cleaning machine or other robots, I would definitely read the instructions in case I break it.

The article 'some' is incorrectly used before 'more complex one'; it should be 'a more complex one'. Also, 'the cleaning machine' should be 'a cleaning machine' as it is not a specific known machine. 'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as machines have multiple instructions. The corrected sentence uses articles and plural forms correctly.

× people usually just use it in the way they prefer, but not the right one which can easily damage the machine or other drivers.

✓ people usually just use it in the way they prefer, but not the right way which can easily damage the machine or other devices.

The phrase 'not the right one' is unclear and incorrect; it should be 'not the right way' to refer to the manner of use. Also, 'drivers' is incorrect in this context; the intended word is likely 'devices'. The corrected sentence clarifies the pronouns and word choice.