机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to improve grammatical accuracy and avoid filler words like 'umm'. Also, use more precise vocabulary and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words for coherence.

示例: My favourite machine at home is the fridge because it plays a vital role in preserving my food. For example, it keeps perishable items cool, which helps prevent spoilage and reduces food waste. Therefore, I can store leftovers and use them the next day, making it very convenient.

建议: Focus on clarity and correct word choice (e.g., 'sweeping machines' instead of 'shipping machines'). Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are very important. They assist people who may find these chores difficult to do manually. Moreover, older adults can use these machines daily, which makes household tasks easier and more convenient for them.

建议: Work on sentence fluency and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Avoid redundancy and clarify your points with precise language.

示例: Yes, I always read the instructions when I first start using a machine because it can be confusing to know which buttons control which functions. However, once I become familiar with it, I don't need to read the instructions regularly. This helps me avoid damaging the machine.

建议: Improve sentence structure and grammar. Use linking words to make your answer more coherent. Be more specific and concise in your explanation.

示例: Yes, I think reading the instructions is very important because it helps prevent damage to the machine. Additionally, instructions provide guidance on how to use and clean the device properly, such as washing clothes or cleaning floors effectively.

× My favorite machine in my home is fridge because I think it's play vital role in my life to keep my eating things cool as well as umm.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the fridge because I think it plays a vital role in my life to keep my food cool as well as, umm,

The verb 'play' should be in the third person singular present tense 'plays' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. Also, 'fridge' needs the definite article 'the' before it. 'Eating things' is better expressed as 'food' for clarity.

× My favorite machine in my home is fridge because I think it's play vital role in my life to keep my eating things cool as well as umm.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the fridge because I think it plays a vital role in my life to keep my food cool as well as, umm,

The phrase 'vital role' requires the article 'a' before it because 'role' is a singular countable noun. Also, 'eating things' is incorrect; 'food' is the correct plural noun to use here.

× My favorite machine in my home is fridge because I think it's play vital role in my life to keep my eating things cool as well as umm.

✓ My favorite machine in my home is the fridge because I think it plays a vital role in my life to keep my food cool as well as, umm,

The noun 'fridge' requires the definite article 'the' because it refers to a specific item in the home.

× It saves the waste of the thing because I can keep them in the fridge and use them next day so it's really helpful.

✓ It prevents waste because I can keep things in the fridge and use them the next day, so it's really helpful.

The phrase 'saves the waste of the thing' is incorrect; 'prevents waste' is the correct expression. 'Them' is used incorrectly for 'thing'; 'things' or 'food' is more appropriate. Also, 'next day' should be 'the next day'.

× Yeah, definitely washing machines and shipping machines are necessary because some people can't do that task by own by own.

✓ Yeah, definitely washing machines and sweeping machines are necessary because some people can't do that task on their own.

The word 'shipping' is a mispronunciation or typo for 'sweeping'. The phrase 'by own by own' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'on their own'.

× So I think the washing machine and sweeping machine help them to do their task easily and conveniently.

✓ So I think washing machines and sweeping machines help them to do their tasks easily and conveniently.

When speaking generally about categories, plural nouns without 'the' are used. Also, 'task' should be plural 'tasks' to match 'them'.

× And older people can use them on their daily, daily basis without any hesitation.

✓ And older people can use them on a daily basis without any hesitation.

The phrase 'on their daily, daily basis' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'on a daily basis'.

× Yeah, sure, I read the instructions before using a machine whenever I started initially, but not on my regular basis, because in the starting time it's really difficult for us to know about which button will work for which item.

✓ Yeah, sure, I read the instructions before using a machine whenever I start initially, but not on a regular basis, because at the beginning it's really difficult for us to know which button works for which item.

The verb tense should be present simple 'start' to match habitual action. 'On my regular basis' should be 'on a regular basis'. 'In the starting time' is incorrect; 'at the beginning' is correct. 'Will work' should be 'works' to match present tense and subject-verb agreement.

× Yeah, sure, I read the instructions before using a machine whenever I started initially, but not on my regular basis, because in the starting time it's really difficult for us to know about which button will work for which item.

✓ Yeah, sure, I read the instructions before using a machine whenever I start initially, but not on a regular basis, because at the beginning it's really difficult for us to know which button works for which item.

'The instructions' is correct as it refers to specific instructions. 'A machine' is correct as it refers to any machine.

× So I prefer to read the instructions and so I can't destroy the machine.

✓ So I prefer to read the instructions so that I don't destroy the machine.

The phrase 'and so I can't destroy' is incorrect; 'so that I don't destroy' is the correct expression to indicate purpose.

× Yeah, definitely it's vital to read the instructions because it prevents the potential damage to the device as well as it can give the information to the person who using the machine how to use it in appropriate way or how to clean your like clothes and floor in appropriate manner.

✓ Yeah, definitely it's vital to read the instructions because it prevents potential damage to the device and can provide information to the person using the machine on how to use it appropriately or how to clean clothes and floors properly.

The phrase 'the potential damage' should be 'potential damage' without 'the'. 'It can give the information to the person who using' is incorrect; it should be 'can provide information to the person using'. 'In appropriate way' should be 'appropriately'. 'Your like clothes and floor' is incorrect; it should be 'clothes and floors'. 'In appropriate manner' should be 'properly' or 'in an appropriate manner'.