机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语言较为口语化且有语法不完整的句子，建议避免断句不完整，表达更自然流畅。同时，内容可以更具体，增加细节描述。

示例: My favourite machine at home is definitely the refrigerator because I love delicious food. It helps me store leftovers and fresh ingredients. Especially at midnight, when I feel hungry, I can easily find something to eat in it.

建议: 回答内容具体且有逻辑，但部分表达略显口语化，建议使用更正式的表达方式，并注意时态一致。

示例: Yes, I believe washing machines and sweeping machines are essential, especially in my home. Since I have two border collies that shed fur daily, I use sweeping machines to keep the floor clean. Moreover, washing machines save me a lot of time and effort when cleaning their bedding and my clothes.

建议: 回答结构清晰，但有重复词汇和语法小错误，建议注意语言准确性和流畅性，避免重复。

示例: It depends on the machine's complexity. For simple machines, I usually skip the instructions and learn by using them. However, for complicated machines, I always read the instructions carefully.

建议: 回答内容完整且有逻辑，但表达稍显重复，建议使用更多连接词和多样化表达，使语言更自然。

示例: Yes, I believe reading instructions is very important because it helps us avoid mistakes. Furthermore, it ensures our safety since many electronic devices can be dangerous if not used properly.

× I just. I'm a big fan of delicious foods and whenever I wanna store anything I have to use the refrigerator.

✓ I just am. I'm a big fan of delicious foods and whenever I want to store anything I have to use the refrigerator.

这里“wanna”是口语缩写形式，正式书面语应使用“want to”。此外，“I just.”是一个不完整的句子，应补充完整。

× And especially in midnight when I feel a little hungry, I'll just go and find something to eat.

✓ And especially at midnight when I feel a little hungry, I'll just go and find something to eat.

介词“in midnight”应改为“at midnight”，因为表示具体时间点用“at”。

× I have two border collies and they shed a lot of fur every day, so I rely on sweeping machines to keep the floor clean.

✓ I have two border collies and they shed a lot of fur every day, so I rely on vacuum cleaners to keep the floor clean.

“sweeping machines”用词不准确，正确表达应为“vacuum cleaners”（吸尘器）。

× Additionally, washing machines saved me a lot of time and effort when cleaning their bedding and my clothes 'cause I'm quite lazy.

✓ Additionally, washing machines save me a lot of time and effort when cleaning their bedding and my clothes because I'm quite lazy.

此处描述的是习惯性动作，应使用一般现在时“save”，而非过去时“saved”。“'cause”应改为正式的“because”。

× If the machine is quite simple, I think I'll just skip the instructions and and find the way of using it when I'm using it.

✓ If the machine is quite simple, I think I'll just skip the instructions and find the way to use it when I'm using it.

“and and”重复，应删去一个。“find the way of using it”表达不自然，改为“find the way to use it”。

× And also it's very important to keep us safe because there are many electronic devices that might hurt ourselves without reading the instructions when using them.

✓ And also it's very important to keep us safe because there are many electronic devices that might hurt us if we don't read the instructions when using them.

“hurt ourselves”用法不当，应为“hurt us”。句子结构不清晰，改为“if we don't read the instructions”更通顺。