机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is understandable but has grammatical errors and some redundancy. Try to start directly with your favorite machine, avoid repeating phrases, and use correct grammar. Also, provide a bit more specific detail about why you like the blender.

示例: My favorite machine at home is the blender. It makes preparing meals much easier and faster, especially when making smoothies or sauces. My mom also enjoys using it because it saves a lot of time in the kitchen.

建议: Your answer has some unclear phrases and grammar mistakes. Avoid saying 'sleeping machine' instead of 'sweeping machine'. Also, clarify your points with better sentence structure and linking words to improve coherence.

示例: Yes, I think both washing machines and sweeping machines are important. However, the washing machine is especially useful in our home because it helps reduce physical strain. For example, my mom had back pain, so using the washing machine makes laundry much easier for her.

建议: Your answer is mostly clear but ends abruptly and lacks explanation. Try to complete your thoughts and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, I always read the instructions before using a machine. However, I have noticed that some people skip this step, which is not a good idea because it can lead to mistakes or damage to the machine.

建议: Your answer has good points but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentences and correct grammar, and provide specific reasons why reading instructions is important.

示例: Yes, I believe it is very important to read the instructions. When people buy a new machine, they may not know all the details, such as how to use it safely or its power requirements. Therefore, reading the instructions helps prevent accidents and ensures proper use.

× And the same in your home.

✓ The same in your home?

The original sentence uses 'And' incorrectly at the beginning and lacks clarity. Changing it to a question form 'The same in your home?' makes it appropriate as a response to the examiner's question.

× My in my home, my favorite machine is blender machine.

✓ In my home, my favorite machine is the blender.

The phrase 'My in my home' is incorrect and redundant. Also, 'blender machine' is awkward; 'blender' suffices. Adding 'the' before 'blender' is necessary as it refers to a specific machine.

× It's makes our kitchen work more convenient and our day-to-day life becomes more easier.

✓ It makes our kitchen work more convenient and our day-to-day life easier.

'It's makes' is incorrect; 'It makes' is correct for third person singular. Also, 'more easier' is redundant; 'easier' alone is correct.

× And my mom likes it very much.

✓ My mom likes it very much.

Starting the sentence with 'And' is unnecessary and informal. Removing it improves clarity and formality.

× Oh, I think washing machine and sleeping machine are important.

✓ Oh, I think washing machines and sweeping machines are important.

The original sentence uses singular forms 'washing machine' and 'sleeping machine' when plural is appropriate. Also, 'sleeping machine' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'sweeping machine'.

× But in my convenience, washing machine is very much important for our home.

✓ But for my convenience, the washing machine is very important for our home.

'In my convenience' is incorrect; 'for my convenience' is correct. Also, 'washing machine' needs the definite article 'the' as it refers to a specific machine.

× As my mom say, had a bad pain, had a back pain.

✓ As my mom says, she had bad back pain.

'Say' should be 'says' for third person singular. The sentence lacks a subject for 'had a bad pain'; adding 'she' clarifies the meaning. 'Had a back pain' is better expressed as 'had bad back pain'.

× So washing machine is very important for us.

✓ So the washing machine is very important for us.

Adding 'the' before 'washing machine' is necessary to specify the machine being referred to.

× Yes, I read the instructions provided with the machine before using it.

✓ Yes, I read the instructions provided with the machine before using it.

This sentence is correct as it is; no correction needed.

× But sometimes I see people don't read the instructions.

✓ But sometimes I see that people don't read the instructions.

Adding 'that' after 'see' improves sentence clarity and correctness.

× Usually that's not a very good deal because by this.

✓ Usually, that's not a very good idea because of this.

'Good deal' is incorrect in this context; 'good idea' is appropriate. 'Because by this' is incomplete and unclear; 'because of this' correctly expresses the reason.

× Yes, I think it's very important to read the instruction.

✓ Yes, I think it's very important to read the instructions.

'Instruction' should be plural 'instructions' as it refers to multiple guidelines.

× And when people who buy a new machine, they don't know every details of that machine as they even required electricity.

✓ And when people buy a new machine, they don't know every detail of that machine, such as whether it requires electricity.

The phrase 'people who buy' is awkward; 'when people buy' is better. 'Every details' should be 'every detail' (singular). The clause 'as they even required electricity' is unclear; rephrasing to 'such as whether it requires electricity' clarifies the meaning.

× So it's very crucial to read the instruction.

✓ So it's very crucial to read the instructions.

Again, 'instruction' should be plural 'instructions'.