机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer lacks fluency and clarity. Try to form complete sentences and avoid unnecessary pauses. Also, use correct grammar and spelling, for example, 'machines' instead of 'machine' and 'because' instead of 'becauses'. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details. For example, explain why the vacuum cleaner is important to you.

示例: My favourite machine at home is the vacuum cleaner because it helps me keep my house clean by sucking up dust and cockroaches efficiently. It saves me a lot of time and effort compared to cleaning manually.

建议: Your answer is somewhat relevant but lacks coherence and detail. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to provide your opinion clearly and support it with reasons or examples. Avoid spelling mistakes like 'swiping' instead of 'sweeping'.

示例: I think washing machines are very important because they save time and make clothes very clean. However, I don't have a sweeping machine, so I cannot say much about its usefulness.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Avoid irrelevant or exaggerated statements like 'I can fly jet'. Instead, answer directly and clearly whether you read instructions or not, and explain why. Keep your sentences complete and coherent.

示例: Usually, I do not read the instructions because I am familiar with most machines and can operate them easily. However, if the machine is new or complicated, I prefer to read the manual to avoid mistakes.

建议: Your answer is too brief and lacks explanation. Use correct expressions like 'It depends on the person'. Also, provide reasons why reading instructions might be important or not. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: I think it depends on the person. Some people may need to read instructions to understand how to use a machine properly, but I usually do not because I learn quickly and prefer to try it myself first.

× Well, there are so many machine in my home.

✓ Well, there are so many machines in my home.

The word 'machine' should be plural 'machines' because it refers to more than one item. In English, countable nouns must agree in number with their quantifiers; 'many' requires a plural noun.

× Which I like to use but.

✓ Which I like to use.

The sentence fragment 'Which I like to use but.' is incomplete and incorrectly structured. Removing 'but' completes the sentence properly. Fragments should be avoided for clarity.

× The. Vacuum cleaner is. Most important machine that I have in my home becauses it sucks all cockroaches and.

✓ The vacuum cleaner is the most important machine that I have in my home because it sucks all cockroaches.

The sentence had unnecessary periods and missing articles. 'Machine' is singular and correctly used here. 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. The sentence was corrected for proper article use and spelling.

× Actually, I don't have these sweeping machine, but I have washing machine and it's washing all my dirty clothes.

✓ Actually, I don't have a sweeping machine, but I have a washing machine and it washes all my dirty clothes.

'Sweeping machine' and 'washing machine' are singular countable nouns and require the article 'a'. Also, 'it's washing' is changed to 'it washes' to correctly express habitual action.

× So it is a good machine and I don't have any thought or a review about this swiping machine actually.

✓ So it is a good machine and I don't have any thoughts or reviews about this sweeping machine actually.

'Thought' and 'review' should be plural to match 'any'. Also, 'swiping' is corrected to 'sweeping'. The preposition 'about' is correctly used here.

× Actually no, because 'cause I'm so lit rate than I have lot of knowledge about everything.

✓ Actually no, because I'm so literate that I have a lot of knowledge about everything.

'Lit rate' is a misspelling of 'literate'. 'Than' is incorrectly used; 'that' is correct here to introduce a result clause. 'Lot' needs the article 'a' before it.

× So basically I don't need any instruction.

✓ So basically, I don't need any instructions.

'Instruction' is usually uncountable or plural when referring to multiple guidelines, so 'instructions' is more appropriate. A comma after 'basically' improves readability.

× Special I know how to update every machine even I can fly jet.

✓ Especially, I know how to update every machine; I can even fly a jet.

'Special' should be 'Especially'. The sentence is a run-on and is corrected with proper punctuation and word order. 'Fly jet' requires the article 'a' before 'jet'.

× Depend on person to person, but.

✓ It depends on the person.

The original is a fragment and incorrectly structured. The corrected sentence is complete and grammatically correct.

× I don't think I need any instruction.

✓ I don't think I need any instructions.

'Instruction' is better used in plural form 'instructions' when referring to guidelines or directions.

× If I want to do anything, I do perfectly.

✓ If I want to do anything, I do it perfectly.

The pronoun 'it' is necessary to complete the sentence and clarify what is done perfectly.