机器— Part 1 评分报告

建议: La tua risposta contiene ripetizioni e frasi incomplete che rendono il discorso poco naturale e poco chiaro. Cerca di evitare ripetizioni inutili e di unire le frasi in modo più fluido, mantenendo la risposta entro cinque frasi. Usa parole di collegamento per rendere il discorso più coerente.

示例: My favourite machine at home is the new microwave, which my dad bought last month as a gift. I find it very useful because I had requested it for a long time. It helps me heat food quickly and saves a lot of time in the kitchen.

建议: La risposta è un po' confusa e manca di coesione. Usa parole di collegamento per rendere il discorso più fluido e specifica meglio le tue idee. Evita frasi incomplete e cerca di spiegare perché queste macchine sono importanti con esempi o motivazioni.

示例: Yes, I think both washing machines and sweeping machines are very important. I have both at home, and they make household chores much easier. For example, the washing machine speeds up laundry, saving time and effort.

建议: La risposta è poco chiara e contiene errori grammaticali e ripetizioni. Cerca di esprimere le tue idee in modo più semplice e diretto, evitando ripetizioni e usando frasi complete. Spiega chiaramente il motivo per cui non leggi le istruzioni.

示例: No, I usually don't read the instructions before using a machine. Although I know it might be helpful, I prefer to learn by trying it myself because I get tired of reading long manuals.

建议: La risposta è poco chiara e contiene errori grammaticali e frasi incomplete. Cerca di esprimere le tue idee in modo più chiaro e coerente, usando frasi complete e collegamenti logici. Spiega meglio il tuo punto di vista con esempi o motivazioni.

示例: Yes, I think reading instructions is important to use machines correctly. However, I usually don't do it because I prefer to learn by experimenting and figuring out how the machine works on my own.

× My favorite machine at OMA is the new microwave. Which is a a new gift that my dad bought last month.

✓ My favorite machine at OMA is the new microwave, which is a new gift that my dad bought last month.

The sentence 'Which is a a new gift that my dad bought last month.' is a fragment and cannot stand alone. It should be connected to the previous sentence with a comma to form a relative clause, making the sentence complete and grammatically correct.

× And I think that's very. Useful because it it it was something that I had requested very much.

✓ And I think that's very useful because it was something that I had requested very much.

The period after 'very' is incorrect and breaks the sentence unnecessarily. Also, the repetition of 'it' is a mistake. Removing the extra words and punctuation makes the sentence clear and grammatically correct.

× But I also know people that in their house don't have it and I recognize that is. A very powerful machine, in particular washing machine, accelerated the process.

✓ But I also know people who don't have them in their house, and I recognize that they are very powerful machines, in particular the washing machine, which accelerates the process.

The pronouns 'that' and 'it' are incorrectly used here. 'People' should be referred to as 'who', and 'machines' as 'them' and 'they'. Also, the sentence structure is fragmented and needs correction for clarity and agreement.

× Well, no, I don't. I know that this might be a better way to learn how to use a machine instead of just click everything that's only display or try to figure out in the process, but I got I get usually tired of reading.

✓ Well, no, I don't. I know that this might be a better way to learn how to use a machine instead of just clicking everything that's on display or trying to figure it out in the process, but I usually get tired of reading.

The verb forms after 'instead of' should be gerunds ('clicking', 'trying'). Also, 'that's only display' is incorrect; it should be 'that's on display'. The phrase 'I got I get usually tired' is ungrammatical and should be 'I usually get tired'.

× Yes, I think it's important, but if I have to be honest, I never do this thing because I'm the kind of person that likes. Trying to figure out in the process out our machine works and then I know that it's not the clay.

✓ Yes, I think it's important, but if I have to be honest, I never do this because I'm the kind of person who likes trying to figure out in the process how our machine works, and then I know that it's not the way.

The sentence has pronoun errors: 'that' should be 'who' when referring to a person. The phrase 'do this thing' is awkward; 'do this' is better. 'Trying' should not be separated by a period. 'Out our machine works' is incorrect; it should be 'how our machine works'. 'It's not the clay' seems to be a mishearing or typo; 'it's not the way' makes more sense.