耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, structure your answer clearly by stating your main idea first, then supporting it with reasons. For example, say 'I am usually patient, but sometimes deadlines make me less patient.'

示例: I am usually a patient person because I try to stay calm in most situations. However, when I face many challenges and tight deadlines daily, I sometimes find it hard to remain patient. So, it really depends on the situation.

建议: Improve your sentence structure and grammar for clarity. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'such as' correctly to list reasons. Also, be specific about why these things make you impatient.

示例: Several things make me feel impatient, such as traffic jams, poor network connections, and waiting for flights. These situations are tough because they delay me from finishing my work on time, which makes me feel anxious.

建议: Your answer is good but could be more concise and natural. Use linking words like 'however' to connect ideas and correct grammar such as 'refreshes me'.

示例: Doing something for a long time can be difficult because I sometimes get distracted and lose interest. However, to avoid this, I prefer to take short breaks and listen to music, which refreshes me and helps me start working again.

建议: Focus on clear sentence structure and correct grammar. Avoid repetition and explain your ideas logically using linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

示例: My job requires a lot of patience because there is a lot of work pressure and sometimes we have to do overtime. This can be stressful, so staying calm is important to manage the pressure and complete the work.

建议: Improve grammar and sentence flow. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however' to connect ideas clearly. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'Is make a person'.

示例: I was very carefree as a child because there were no deadlines or work pressure. However, nowadays, with many deadlines to meet, I find myself more impatient and anxious.

× Yes, most of the time I tried to stay calm, but uh, sometimes things get uh, opposite because, uh, there are so many challenges and deadlines for daily basis it to make me patient.

✓ Yes, most of the time I try to stay calm, but sometimes things get opposite because there are so many challenges and deadlines on a daily basis that make it hard for me to be patient.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'tried' when the present tense 'try' is appropriate to describe a habitual action. Also, 'for daily basis' should be 'on a daily basis' to use the correct preposition and article. The phrase 'it to make me patient' is awkward and corrected to 'make it hard for me to be patient' for clarity.

× there are so many challenges and deadlines for daily basis it to make me patient.

✓ there are so many challenges and deadlines on a daily basis that make it hard for me to be patient.

The phrase 'for daily basis' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'on' as in 'on a daily basis'. Also, the sentence structure is improved by adding 'that make it hard for me to be patient' for clarity.

× so that's why it's depend on the situation for me.

✓ so that's why it depends on the situation for me.

The verb 'depend' must agree with the singular subject 'it', so it should be 'depends'. The pronoun 'it's' (it is) is correct but the verb form following it was incorrect.

× There are plenty of things so such as traffic jams, so poor network connection and waiting for flight.

✓ There are plenty of things such as traffic jams, poor network connection, and waiting for flights.

The phrase 'so such as' is redundant; 'such as' alone is correct. 'Waiting for flight' should be plural 'waiting for flights' to match the plural context. Also, commas are added for clarity.

× It's make me feel anxious.

✓ It makes me feel anxious.

The subject 'It' is singular and requires the verb 'makes' in third person singular form, not 'make'.

× Doing something for a long period is quite difficult and we feel sometimes distracted and we lose interest in that.

✓ Doing something for a long period is quite difficult and sometimes we feel distracted and lose interest in it.

The pronoun 'that' is better replaced with 'it' to refer back to the activity. Also, 'we feel sometimes distracted' is better as 'sometimes we feel distracted' for natural word order.

× To avoid this situation, I prefer to take a short break and listen to music that refresh me and I start my work again.

✓ To avoid this situation, I prefer to take a short break and listen to music that refreshes me, and then I start my work again.

The verb 'refresh' must agree with the singular subject 'music', so it should be 'refreshes'. Also, adding 'then' improves sentence flow.

× This make me sometime pressurize and we have to do so.

✓ This makes me sometimes feel pressured and we have to do so.

The singular subject 'This' requires the verb 'makes' in third person singular. 'Sometime' should be 'sometimes' as an adverb. 'Pressurize' is a verb; the correct adjective is 'feel pressured'.

× Being calm is keep stressed before finish the work.

✓ Being calm helps keep stress away before finishing the work.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. 'Being calm is keep stressed' is incorrect; it is corrected to 'Being calm helps keep stress away'. Also, 'before finish the work' should be 'before finishing the work' to use the gerund form after 'before'.

× I was very carefree in my childhood because there is no deadlines, no work pressure.

✓ I was very carefree in my childhood because there were no deadlines and no work pressure.

The past tense 'was' requires 'there were' (past plural) instead of 'there is'. Also, 'no deadlines, no work pressure' is better connected with 'and'.

× Is make a person more impatient and anxious.

✓ It makes a person more impatient and anxious.

The sentence lacks a subject; 'Is' should be 'It'. The verb 'makes' agrees with the singular subject 'It'.