耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and incomplete, which affects the natural flow and effectiveness. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons or examples, using linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I don't get easily upset by difficult situations. For example, when things don't go as planned, I stay calm and think carefully before reacting.

建议: Your answer has good content but is repetitive and lacks clarity. Use linking words to organize your ideas and avoid repeating phrases. Also, try to use more precise vocabulary to express your feelings.

示例: I feel impatient when my hard work doesn't lead to good results. For instance, if I study a lot but still get a low score, I become frustrated because my effort seems wasted.

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: When I have to work on something for a long time, I sometimes get distracted and feel disappointed. However, I remind myself that the goal is close, so I try to stay focused and keep working hard.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words and correct grammar to make your answer more natural and effective.

示例: Yes, my job as a student requires patience. Since my main responsibility is to study and achieve high marks, I need to be patient and persistent when revising and preparing for exams.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary, and organize your answer with linking words for better coherence.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. This is because I have experienced many exams and school tests, which taught me to be patient. Also, dealing with friends and meeting new people has helped me improve my patience.

× I think I am a patient person because I always have.

✓ I think I am a patient person because I always am.

The original sentence ends abruptly and lacks a complete predicate. The phrase 'I always have' is incomplete and unclear. The correction completes the sentence by using 'I always am' to express a continuous state of being patient.

× I'm not easily affected by something bad or emotional because and I can always keep my mind that.

✓ I'm not easily affected by something bad or emotional, and I can always keep that in my mind.

The original sentence has an incorrect conjunction 'because and' and an awkward phrase 'keep my mind that'. The correction removes the incorrect conjunction and rephrases to 'keep that in my mind' for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think that when the result doesn't come out equally with my effort would make me feel impatient, because I think that I have contribute a lot and however it doesn't it doesn't give me a really good result, so that I may feel very upset and impatient that I have already.

✓ I think that when the result doesn't match my effort, it makes me feel impatient because I think I have contributed a lot, but it doesn't give me a really good result, so I may feel very upset and impatient.

The original sentence has multiple structural issues including awkward phrasing, repetition, and incorrect verb forms. The correction clarifies the meaning, fixes verb tense ('contribute' to 'contributed'), removes repetition, and improves sentence flow.

× I would easily be distracted and always feel. Disappointed when I have to chasing for a goal for a long time because I always have to keep on my mind that the result is just in front of myself, but I have to give more effort on it.

✓ I would easily be distracted and always feel disappointed when I have to chase a goal for a long time because I always keep in mind that the result is just ahead, but I have to put more effort into it.

The original sentence has punctuation errors, incorrect verb form 'chasing' instead of 'chase', awkward phrases like 'keep on my mind' and 'in front of myself'. The correction fixes these issues for grammatical accuracy and clarity.

× Yes, as a student, being patient is a key point to success because as students our biggest responsibility is to study well and get as high mark in the exam as I can.

✓ Yes, as a student, being patient is a key point to success because as students our biggest responsibility is to study well and get as high a mark in the exam as I can.

The phrase 'as high mark' is missing the article 'a' before 'mark'. The correction adds 'a' to correctly quantify 'mark'.

× Therefore, being patient and persistence on doing revision and study is a main.

✓ Therefore, being patient and persistent in doing revision and study is important.

The original sentence misuses the noun 'persistence' where the adjective 'persistent' is needed, and ends abruptly with 'is a main' which is incomplete. The correction uses 'persistent' and completes the sentence with 'is important' for clarity.

× Yes, my patients have built up when I grow up because I have already undergone a lot of public exams and school tests that make me be more patient and also handling with the interpersonal relationship like hanging out with friends and meeting some new string.

✓ Yes, my patience has built up as I have grown up because I have already undergone a lot of public exams and school tests that have made me more patient and also handled interpersonal relationships like hanging out with friends and meeting some new people.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'patients' instead of 'patience' and has tense inconsistency ('grow up' instead of 'have grown up'). It also uses 'handling with' incorrectly and 'string' instead of 'people'. The correction fixes these errors for grammatical correctness and clarity.