耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors such as 'I have a patience' and 'get temper quickly'. Try to use simpler, correct sentences and avoid redundancy. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details using linking words like 'but' or 'however'.

示例: I am usually a patient person, but I lose my patience when someone teases me repeatedly. For example, if someone pulls my leg, I get angry quickly, which affects me negatively.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is repetitive. Use correct verb forms and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas clearly.

示例: Small things make me impatient, especially when someone teases me or says something wrong about me. In such situations, I tend to get angry quickly.

建议: Your answer is a bit confusing and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly and clearly, and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid irrelevant details and focus on the question.

示例: It depends on the activity. For example, last week I was very excited to drive a car after two years. I felt good because I enjoyed the experience.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and is unclear in parts. Use correct sentence structures and clarify your points. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: I am a student, so patience is important to complete my tasks. For instance, when teachers say something unfair in front of others, I try to stay patient and control my anger.

建议: Your answer is too long and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to use shorter, clearer sentences and link your ideas logically. Also, focus on specific reasons and effects.

示例: I was less patient as a child because I did not understand right from wrong. Now, I know the consequences of my actions, so I try to be patient, which helps me build good relationships with others.

× It's many times when I have a patience but if the front person tease me and pulling my legs then I get temper quickly and oh on that time I lost my patience and that lead to negative effect.

✓ There are many times when I have patience, but if the person in front teases me and pulls my leg, then I lose my temper quickly and at that time I lose my patience and that leads to negative effects.

The phrase 'It's many times' is incorrect; 'There are many times' is appropriate to indicate frequency. 'A patience' is incorrect because 'patience' is an uncountable noun and does not take an article. 'Front person' should be 'person in front' for clarity. 'Tease me and pulling my legs' should be parallel in tense: 'teases me and pulls my leg'. 'Get temper' should be 'lose my temper'. 'Oh on that time I lost my patience' should be 'at that time I lose my patience' to maintain present tense consistency. 'That lead to negative effect' should be 'that leads to negative effects' to agree in number and tense.

× Well the small things like when someone try to tease this or me then I get impatient quickly and I lose my patient or it's many times in front person say something wrong to me then I get angry quick.

✓ Well, small things like when someone tries to tease me, then I get impatient quickly and I lose my patience. Many times, when the person in front says something wrong to me, I get angry quickly.

'Someone try' should be 'someone tries' to agree with third person singular. 'Tease this or me' is incorrect; 'tease me' is correct. 'Lose my patient' should be 'lose my patience' as 'patience' is the correct noun. 'It's many times in front person say' is incorrect; it should be 'Many times, when the person in front says'. 'Get angry quick' should be 'get angry quickly' to use the correct adverb form.

× As far as I can remember, it was the talk of last week when I get drive to car after two years that was I really excited to drive a car and I feel very good after driving the car.

✓ As far as I can remember, it was last week when I drove a car after two years. I was really excited to drive a car and I felt very good after driving the car.

'Get drive to car' is incorrect; the past tense 'drove a car' is needed. 'That was I really excited' should be 'I was really excited' to correct word order and tense. 'I feel very good' should be 'I felt very good' to maintain past tense consistency.

× Well, I am a student and it is important to me patient in my life to complete my task and it is important when teachers say something to me that is unfold unfair or wrong in the front of other child's on that time.

✓ Well, I am a student and it is important for me to be patient in my life to complete my tasks. It is also important when teachers say something to me that is unfair or wrong in front of other children; at that time, I try to keep patient and control my anger.

'Important to me patient' should be 'important for me to be patient'. 'Complete my task' should be plural 'tasks' to indicate multiple tasks. 'Unfold unfair or wrong' is incorrect; 'is unfair or wrong' is correct. 'In the front of other child's' should be 'in front of other children' to correct preposition and plural noun. 'On that time' should be 'at that time'. 'Try to keep patient' should be 'try to keep patient' or better 'try to be patient'.

× Well, in my childhood I have a not patient because on that time I have not matured about the wrong or right things but now I have know about the result of unusual things or unusual activity that I try to keep patient in my life that help me to make good relationship with my friends or others.

✓ Well, in my childhood I was not patient because at that time I had not matured about the wrong or right things, but now I know about the results of unusual things or unusual activities. I try to keep patient in my life, which helps me to make good relationships with my friends and others.

'I have a not patient' is incorrect; it should be 'I was not patient'. 'On that time' should be 'at that time'. 'I have not matured' should be 'I had not matured' to maintain past perfect tense. 'I have know' should be 'I know'. 'Result' should be plural 'results' to agree with 'things'. 'Unusual activity' should be plural 'unusual activities'. 'That help me' should be 'which helps me' to agree with singular subject. 'Good relationship' should be plural 'good relationships' to indicate multiple relationships.