耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by correcting grammar and avoiding redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically. For example, instead of 'Sometimes it depends on my mode,' say 'It depends on my mood sometimes.' Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

示例: I am generally a patient person, but it depends on my mood. Sometimes I get angry and lose my patience. However, I like to take my time to understand any topic thoroughly, whether I am reading or listening. This helps me stay calm and focused.

建议: Improve clarity and grammar by rephrasing your answer. Use linking words to explain the cause and effect clearly. For example, say 'My inner anger issues sometimes cause me to lose patience and hurt others' feelings.' Avoid vague phrases like 'blow my mind.'

示例: I feel impatient when my inner anger takes over. Sometimes, this makes me say things that hurt the person I am talking with, which I regret later.

建议: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and avoiding repetition. Correct grammar mistakes and keep sentences concise. For example, say 'I feel bored when I do something I dislike for a long time, such as studying. However, playing video games for a long time makes me happy because I enjoy it.'

示例: I usually feel bored if I have to do something I don't like for a long time, like studying. However, if I play video games for a long time, it makes me happy because I enjoy the activity.

建议: Clarify your ideas and correct grammar. Explain why patience might affect your studies. Use linking words to connect your thoughts logically. For example, say 'As a student, my job does not usually require patience. In fact, if I become too patient, I might be less careful and not succeed in my exams.'

示例: As a student, my job does not usually require me to be patient. Actually, if I become too patient, I might not focus enough on my studies and could fail my exams.

建议: Improve sentence structure and clarity. Use linking words to compare past and present. For example, say 'Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. In the past, I used to rush to solve problems, but now I take time to understand and handle them carefully.'

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. Previously, I would rush to solve problems, but now I take my time to understand the situation before acting.

× But generally I am an patient person.

✓ But generally I am a patient person.

The article 'an' is used before words starting with a vowel sound. 'Patient' starts with a consonant sound 'p', so the correct article is 'a'. This is a common article error in English.

× because sometimes I lost my mind, my mood, become very angry.

✓ because sometimes I lose my mind, my mood, become very angry.

The sentence is describing a habitual action, so the present tense 'lose' should be used instead of the past tense 'lost'. Using past tense here is incorrect for habitual actions.

× That's the make me quite feel impatient.

✓ That makes me feel quite impatient.

The phrase 'That's the make me' is incorrect. The correct form is 'That makes me'. Also, 'quite feel impatient' is awkward; 'feel quite impatient' is the correct word order.

× sometimes I blow my mind and hurt the person I'm talking with.

✓ sometimes I lose my temper and hurt the person I'm talking with.

The phrase 'blow my mind' is incorrect in this context; the correct idiom is 'lose my temper' to express anger. This is a misuse of idiomatic expression, which is a type of pronoun/phrase misuse.

× If I if I become a patient person I will be less careful with my studies and probably I can could not succeed in my exams.

✓ If I become a patient person, I will be less careful with my studies and probably I will not succeed in my exams.

The phrase 'I can could not succeed' is incorrect. The correct modal verb phrase is 'I will not succeed'. Also, the sentence has a repeated 'If I' which should be corrected.

× With patients, sometimes I rush, but yes, I am more patient than my childhood.

✓ With patience, sometimes I rush, but yes, I am more patient than in my childhood.

'Patients' is plural meaning people, but the intended word is 'patience' (the quality). Also, 'than my childhood' should be 'than in my childhood' for correct comparison.