耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Essayez d'utiliser des mots plus variés et d'améliorer la fluidité en reliant vos idées avec des mots de liaison. Par exemple, au lieu de dire "I believe that I am a patient person because I really don't like to be angry", vous pouvez dire "I consider myself a patient person since I prefer to stay calm rather than get angry."

示例: I consider myself a patient person since I prefer to stay calm rather than get angry. For instance, when conflicts arise with someone, I immediately try to discuss the issue to resolve it peacefully.

建议: Faites attention à la grammaire et à la clarté. Utilisez des mots de liaison pour structurer votre réponse et évitez les répétitions. Par exemple, vous pouvez dire "What makes me feel really impatient are technical problems with my computer, especially when I need to do research for my studies."

示例: What makes me feel really impatient are technical problems with my computer, especially when I need to do research for my studies. These issues disrupt my workflow and cause frustration.

建议: Essayez d'utiliser des mots de liaison pour rendre votre réponse plus fluide et ajoutez un peu plus de détails spécifiques. Par exemple, vous pouvez dire "My feelings depend on the task; I enjoy reading and can spend hours on it, but I find chores like cleaning tiring and hard to endure for long periods."

示例: My feelings depend on the task; I enjoy reading and can spend hours on it, but I find chores like cleaning tiring and hard to endure for long periods.

建议: Améliorez la structure de votre réponse en utilisant des phrases plus claires et des mots de liaison. Par exemple, vous pouvez dire "Although I don't have a job currently, I believe my future job will require patience because it involves interacting with many people who have different paces."

示例: Although I don't have a job currently, I believe my future job will require patience because it involves interacting with many people who have different paces.

建议: Utilisez des mots de liaison pour améliorer la cohérence et évitez les répétitions. Par exemple, vous pouvez dire "Yes, I am much more patient now than when I was a child because I used to want things instantly, but now I have learned to wait calmly."

示例: Yes, I am much more patient now than when I was a child because I used to want things instantly, but now I have learned to wait calmly.

× What is what make me feel really impatient is the issues that I have when I am on my computer, especially when I need to do some research for my studies and there are issues with them.

✓ What makes me feel really impatient are the issues that I have when I am on my computer, especially when I need to do some research for my studies and there are issues with them.

The subject 'What' is singular, so the verb should be 'makes' instead of 'make'. Also, 'the issues' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. This ensures subject-verb agreement.

× For example, when there are some issues with someone, I like to talk immediately with this person.

✓ For example, when there are some issues with someone, I like to talk immediately with that person.

The demonstrative pronoun 'this' is used for something close to the speaker, but here 'that' is more appropriate to refer to a person not immediately present.

× ...and there are issues with them.

✓ ...and there are issues with it.

The pronoun 'them' refers to plural, but 'issues' here relate to 'my computer' which is singular, so 'it' is the correct pronoun.

× The feeling is different between what I like to do and what I hate to do.

✓ The feeling is different from what I like to do and what I hate to do.

The correct preposition to express difference is 'different from' rather than 'different between'.

× ...but my future job I think I will require to be patient because we need to talk with many people and we need to be patient with each other since no one have the same rhythm.

✓ ...but my future job I think will require me to be patient because we need to talk with many people and we need to be patient with each other since no one has the same rhythm.

'Require' needs an object, so 'me' is added. Also, 'no one' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'.

× Yes, I'm really more patient now that when I was a child, because when I was a child I was really impatient.

✓ Yes, I'm really more patient now than when I was a child, because when I was a child I was really impatient.

The correct conjunction to compare is 'than' not 'that'.