耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, tetapi Anda perlu memperbaiki tata bahasa dan membuat kalimat lebih alami. Misalnya, gunakan 'manage my emotions better' bukan 'manage my emotion better'. Selain itu, tambahkan kalimat topik yang jelas dan hindari kalimat yang terlalu panjang.

示例: I used to be an impatient person because I would get angry easily over small things. However, recently I have learned to manage my emotions better and stay calm in difficult situations.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kata yang tepat, misalnya 'the reality of the situation' dan 'someone's behavior'. Gunakan juga kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

示例: I often feel impatient when the reality of a situation or someone's behavior does not match my expectations. This mismatch can really irritate me and make me angry.

建议: Jawaban sudah cukup baik dan jelas. Namun, perbaiki tata bahasa seperti 'stay motivated' bukan 'stay focused and motivate'. Gunakan juga kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide dengan lebih baik.

示例: I often feel bored when I have to do something for a long time because repeating the same tasks can be tiring and monotonous. For example, when I study for hours without a break, I find it hard to stay focused and motivated.

建议: Jawaban kurang jelas dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Perbaiki kalimat agar lebih natural dan lengkap. Jelaskan peran Anda dengan lebih spesifik dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk kelancaran jawaban.

示例: Yes, my job in human resources requires a lot of patience because I work with many people. Sometimes, their behavior can be unpredictable, so I need to support them to become the best versions of themselves.

建议: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami. Misalnya, gunakan 'could get angry' bukan 'can get angry'. Jelaskan dengan lebih spesifik bagaimana Anda mengelola emosi.

示例: Of course, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to get angry easily when I didn't get what I wanted. However, now I understand that we cannot have everything, and I manage my anger by practicing breathing exercises and attending yoga classes.

× I wasn't a very patient person before because I used to get mad at simple things easily.

✓ I wasn't a very patient person before because I used to get mad at simple things easily.

This sentence is correct in past tense usage; no correction needed.

× However, I have recently managed my emotion better.

✓ However, I have recently managed my emotions better.

The word 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' because it refers to feelings in general, not a single emotion.

× Most of the time it's because the reality of situation or someone behavior is not match with my expectation.

✓ Most of the time it's because the reality of the situation or someone's behavior does not match my expectations.

'The situation' requires the definite article 'the'. 'Someone behavior' should be 'someone's behavior' to show possession. 'Is not match' is incorrect; it should be 'does not match' for subject-verb agreement. 'Expectation' should be plural 'expectations' to match the context.

× It can irate me a lot and make me mad.

✓ It can irritate me a lot and make me mad.

The verb 'irate' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'irritate' meaning to annoy. The sentence structure is otherwise correct.

× I often feel bored when I have to do something for a long time because repeating the same tasks over and over again can be very tiring and monotonous.

✓ I often feel bored when I have to do something for a long time because repeating the same task over and over again can be very tiring and monotonous.

'Tasks' should be singular 'task' because the phrase 'repeating the same task' is more natural and accurate.

× For example, when I study for hours without a break, I find it hard to stay focused and motivate.

✓ For example, when I study for hours without a break, I find it hard to stay focused and motivated.

'Motivate' is a verb; the correct adjective form here is 'motivated' to describe the state of the subject.

× Yes, because as a human resources we have too many people.

✓ Yes, because as human resources, we have too many people.

'Human resources' is a plural noun and should not have the article 'a'. Also, 'as human resources' is the correct phrase.

× We working with the company and sometimes people can get very dynamic.

✓ We work with the company and sometimes people can be very dynamic.

'We working' is incorrect; it should be 'We work' for present simple tense. 'Can get very dynamic' is better expressed as 'can be very dynamic'.

× I have to make sure I can accompany them to be the best person of themselves and also.

✓ I have to make sure I can support them to be the best versions of themselves.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Accompany' is not the best verb here; 'support' fits better. 'Best person of themselves' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'best versions of themselves'.

× Of course, because when I was a child I can get angry easily when I don't get what I want.

✓ Of course, because when I was a child I could get angry easily when I didn't get what I wanted.

The sentence refers to past habits, so past tense 'could', 'didn't', and 'wanted' should be used instead of present tense.

× But right now I understand that not everything in this world we can get.

✓ But right now I understand that we cannot get everything in this world.

The sentence structure is awkward; moving 'we' before 'cannot get' improves clarity and correctness.

× And I try to manage my anger temper too, by breathing exercise, some yoga class.

✓ And I try to manage my anger and temper too, by doing breathing exercises and attending some yoga classes.

'Anger temper' is incorrect; 'anger and temper' is correct. 'Breathing exercise' and 'some yoga class' should be plural and preceded by appropriate verbs for clarity.