耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more concise and clear. Avoid repeating words and focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence. For example, start with a direct statement about your patience, then briefly explain with specific details.

示例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I have faced many challenges in life without giving up. For instance, I have learned to stay calm and wait for good opportunities despite difficulties.

建议: Avoid repeating the same idea and incomplete sentences. Provide a clear reason and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I feel impatient when I have to wait a long time for something I really want, such as a promotion at work, because I am eager to achieve my goals quickly.

建议: Try to complete your sentences and use linking words properly to make your answer coherent. Also, give a specific example to support your feelings.

示例: When I have to do something for a long time, I initially feel frustrated; however, I try to understand the reasons behind the delay and then continue working patiently. For example, I once waited several months for a job application result but kept improving my skills during that time.

建议: Good answer but avoid repeating words and try to use more varied vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: Yes, my job definitely requires a great deal of patience because I work with patients who are often unwell and may express their discomfort in different ways. Therefore, I need to remain calm and understanding to support them effectively.

建议: Try to avoid hesitations and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to compare your past and present behavior clearly and provide specific examples.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child because I used to cry and get angry when I didn't get what I wanted. However, as an adult, I have learned to control my emotions and wait calmly for things to happen.

× I think I am because as I as I look back into my life, I think I was very patient to the to everything that has that has come to us.

✓ I think I am because as I look back into my life, I think I have been very patient with everything that has come to us.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'was' instead of the present perfect 'have been' to describe a continuing state from the past to the present. Also, 'patient to' should be 'patient with'. Use present perfect to express experience or states continuing to now.

× I think I was very patient to the to everything that has that has come to us.

✓ I think I was very patient with everything that has come to us.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect after 'patient'. The correct preposition is 'with'. Also, the repeated phrase 'to the to' is redundant and should be removed.

× There are times that I was very impatient for the things that I really wanted and it doesn't come or it doesn't arrive very soon.

✓ There were times when I was very impatient for the things that I really wanted and they didn't come or arrive very soon.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time referred to is in the past, use past tense consistently: 'were' instead of 'are', 'didn't' instead of 'doesn't', and 'they' to agree with plural 'things'.

× There are times that I was very impatient for the things that I really wanted and it doesn't come or it doesn't arrive very soon.

✓ There were times when I was very impatient for the things that I really wanted and they didn't come or arrive very soon.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to plural 'things'. Use 'they' to agree in number with 'things'.

× I will feel very frustrated at first, but then I will analyze why things don't come along my way but and after that I will move on.

✓ I will feel very frustrated at first, but then I will analyze why things don't come along my way, and after that I will move on.

The conjunctions 'but' and 'and' are incorrectly combined as 'but and'. Use only one conjunction to connect clauses properly.

× I will feel very frustrated at first, but then I will analyze why things don't come along my way but and after that I will move on.

✓ I will feel very frustrated at first, but then I will analyze why things don't come my way, and after that I will move on.

The phrase 'come along my way' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'come my way' meaning 'happen as I expect'.

× My job requires a lot, a lot of patience because you are dealing with the patients who are not in good shape, who who are not feeling well.

✓ My job requires a lot of patience because you are dealing with patients who are not in good shape and who are not feeling well.

The article 'the' before 'patients' is unnecessary when speaking generally. Also, repeated 'who' should be corrected to a single 'who' and conjunction 'and' used instead of comma for clarity.

× My job requires a lot, a lot of patience because you are dealing with the patients who are not in good shape, who who are not feeling well.

✓ My job requires a lot of patience because you are dealing with patients who are not in good shape and who are not feeling well.

The pronoun 'you' is used generally here, which is acceptable, but the repeated 'who' is an error and should be corrected to a single 'who' with proper conjunction.

× Umm I think so because when I was a child I when I don't when I didn't have what I wanted, I will cry easily and even burst out in anger.

✓ Umm I think so because when I was a child, when I didn't have what I wanted, I would cry easily and even burst out in anger.

The sentence incorrectly mixes present tense 'don't' and future tense 'will' with past context. Use past tense 'didn't' and conditional 'would' to describe habitual past actions.

× Umm I think so because when I was a child I when I don't when I didn't have what I wanted, I will cry easily and even burst out in anger.

✓ Umm I think so because when I was a child, if I didn't have what I wanted, I would cry easily and even burst out in anger.

The sentence has redundant and confusing phrases 'I when I don't when I didn't'. Simplify to 'if I didn't' to express conditional past habit clearly.