耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons using correct grammar. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

示例: I am not a very patient person, but I have learned that patience is important for success. For example, in my career, being patient helps me make better decisions and avoid mistakes.

建议: Your answer is confusing and has many grammatical mistakes. Try to express your feelings clearly and use linking words to connect ideas logically. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and keep your sentences complete.

示例: I feel impatient when I face frustrating situations or when I hesitate to make decisions. This sometimes causes me to lose control and make wrong choices.

建议: Your answer has some good points but needs better sentence structure and linking words. Try to express your feelings clearly and explain why you need to be patient, using correct grammar and vocabulary.

示例: I feel frustrated when I have to do the same task for a long time. However, I understand that being patient is important because it helps me make better decisions and achieve good results.

建议: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but you can improve by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

示例: Yes, my job as a pharmacist requires a lot of patience. I need to carefully listen to patients and provide proper treatment, which ensures they recover well.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear comparison between past and present, using linking words and correct sentence structure to express your ideas effectively.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. As a child, I was impatient and wanted things immediately, but as I have grown up, I have learned to wait and be more patient.

× But however I've taught in my life, when you have no patience will get nothing.

✓ But however I've thought in my life, when you have no patience, you will get nothing.

The original sentence misuses 'taught' instead of 'thought'. 'Taught' is the past tense of 'teach', while 'thought' is the past tense of 'think'. Also, the sentence lacks the subject 'you' before 'will get nothing'. The correction adds 'you' to complete the sentence and corrects the verb.

× So Bing patients and to sometimes stop in your life.

✓ So being patient and sometimes stopping in your life.

The phrase 'Bing patients' is incorrect; it should be 'being patient'. Also, 'to sometimes stop' is awkward; 'sometimes stopping' fits better. The correction fixes the spelling and adjusts the verb forms to gerunds to fit the sentence structure.

× It will be a great for your career.

✓ It will be great for your career.

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'great', which is an adjective. The phrase 'a great' requires a noun after it. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence structure.

× when I'm in hesitation of frustration, I lose my anger, I lose my control.

✓ when I'm in hesitation or frustration, I lose my temper, I lose my control.

The phrase 'in hesitation of frustration' is incorrect; 'in hesitation or frustration' is more appropriate. Also, 'lose my anger' is not idiomatic; 'lose my temper' is the correct expression.

× So I'll. Phil impatient and two wrong things took take wrong steps in my life.

✓ So I feel impatient and sometimes take wrong steps in my life.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'I'll. Phil' is likely a typo for 'I feel'; 'two wrong things took take' is confusing and incorrect. The correction simplifies and clarifies the intended meaning.

× I feel very frustrating when I have to do one thing for a long period of time.

✓ I feel very frustrated when I have to do one thing for a long period of time.

'Frustrating' describes something that causes frustration, while 'frustrated' describes a feeling. Since the speaker is describing their feeling, 'frustrated' is correct.

× It just took my temper of but at the end I have to be patient.

✓ It just takes my temper off but at the end I have to be patient.

The phrase 'took my temper of' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'takes my temper off', meaning it causes loss of temper. Also, tense is adjusted to present to match context.

× I have to wait for it for a better decision that will. Result. In a good way.

✓ I have to wait for it for a better decision that will result in a good way.

The original sentence has unnecessary periods breaking the sentence. The correction removes these and connects the sentence properly.

× Yes, as I'm a pharmacist, I have to be very patient in my job to treat a patient and other ill people in the proper way so that they get a good treatment from me.

✓ Yes, as I'm a pharmacist, I have to be very patient in my job to treat patients and other ill people properly so that they get good treatment from me.

'A patient' should be plural 'patients' to refer generally. 'In the proper way' is better expressed as 'properly'. Also, 'a good treatment' is better as 'good treatment' without article.

× Yes, a little change have outcome till today.

✓ Yes, a little change has occurred till today.

'Change' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Also, 'have outcome' is incorrect; 'has occurred' or 'has happened' is appropriate.

× When I was a child, I was literally. A very notorious scared who just want or if I have stuck to one thing, I want that particular thing at that moment.

✓ When I was a child, I was literally a very notorious scared child who just wanted, or if I was stuck to one thing, I wanted that particular thing at that moment.

The sentence has misplaced periods and incorrect verb forms. 'Want' should be 'wanted' to match past tense. 'If I have stuck' should be 'if I was stuck'. The correction fixes punctuation and verb tense.

× But as growing up I'm very patient.

✓ But as I grow up, I'm very patient.

The phrase 'as growing up' is incorrect. It should be 'as I grow up' to indicate the process. Present tense 'grow' fits better here.