耐心— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is quite short and has some grammatical errors. Instead of saying 'carry out anger', you can say 'manage my anger'. Try to give a clear topic sentence and then support it with a reason or example. Also, avoid redundancy and keep it natural.

示例: Yes, I consider myself a patient person because I can manage my anger calmly even in difficult situations. For example, when someone makes a mistake, I try to understand rather than getting upset.

建议: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is unclear. Instead of 'like a hygiene', say 'I like cleanliness'. Also, avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I like cleanliness, so whenever I see something dirty, I feel quite impatient and overwhelmed because I prefer things to be tidy and organised.

建议: Your answer is confusing and contains incorrect phrases like 'my mind get so a disease'. Try to express your feelings clearly and use correct grammar. Also, keep your answer relevant and coherent.

示例: When I have to do something for a long time, I sometimes feel tired and bored, but I try to stay focused to complete the task successfully.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'good. Be checked'. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' properly.

示例: Currently, I am not working, but I believe that patience is important in any job because every job has its ups and downs. A patient person can handle challenges better and succeed in their career.

建议: Your answer is quite unclear and contains many grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas clearly and logically. Use past and present tenses correctly and avoid unnecessary repetition.

示例: Yes, I am more patient now than when I was a child. I used to be stubborn and get angry easily, but over time, I have learned to control my emotions and adapt better to different situations.

× I usually carry out anger very peacefully.

✓ I usually control my anger very peacefully.

The phrase 'carry out anger' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'control anger' or 'manage anger'. 'Carry out' is used with actions or tasks, not emotions.

× I'm a kind of person who like a hygiene, so whenever I see something dirty I feel so an impatient and I feel. Over. Overwhelmed with it?

✓ I'm the kind of person who likes hygiene, so whenever I see something dirty I feel very impatient and overwhelmed by it.

The pronoun 'who like a hygiene' is incorrect; it should be 'who likes hygiene' to agree with singular subject. Also, 'an impatient' is incorrect; 'impatient' is an adjective and does not take 'an'. The phrase 'feel so an impatient' is wrong. 'Overwhelmed with it' is better than 'overwhelmed by it' but both are acceptable; here 'by' is more common.

× Like whenever I have to do a work for a long time it feels like so happy and my mind get so a disease due to it and.

✓ Whenever I have to do work for a long time, it feels tiring and my mind gets affected because of it.

The article 'a' before 'work' is incorrect because 'work' is an uncountable noun here. Also, 'it feels like so happy' is incorrect; 'happy' does not fit the context. 'My mind get so a disease' is incorrect; 'get' should be 'gets' for subject-verb agreement and 'so a disease' is incorrect usage.

× Currently I'm not doing any kind of job but according to me in the job there should be a patient employed becauses every job contains a ups and downs so if a person is patient then they can get a good. Be checked in future from their current job.

✓ Currently, I'm not doing any kind of job but in my opinion, a patient person should be employed because every job has its ups and downs. If a person is patient, they can get a good position in the future from their current job.

The phrase 'a patient employed' is incorrect; it should be 'a patient person employed'. 'Becauses' is a misspelling of 'because'. 'A ups and downs' is incorrect; 'ups and downs' is plural and does not take 'a'. The phrase 'get a good. Be checked' is unclear and incorrect; it is corrected to 'get a good position'.

× Yes, from my childhood I have changed myself a lot like when I was a child, I am so stubborn and I have to do something very angrily and that's a reason nowadays I changed myself because as I'm not going also so that's why I have to change myself so can I can adjust in the whole error.

✓ Yes, since my childhood I have changed a lot. When I was a child, I was very stubborn and used to do things angrily. That's why nowadays I have changed myself so that I can adjust in every situation.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. 'I am so stubborn' should be 'I was very stubborn' to match past time. 'I have to do something very angrily' is incorrect; 'used to do things angrily' is better. 'I changed myself' should be 'I have changed myself' for present perfect. The phrase 'so can I can adjust in the whole error' is unclear and corrected to 'so that I can adjust in every situation'.