零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答内容较丰富，但句子较长且有重复表达，建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，使表达更自然流畅。

示例: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed, especially before final exams. Eating snacks helps me relax and feel better.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，建议注意语法准确性，并用更恰当的词汇表达观点。

示例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many of them are fried and contain unhealthy ingredients. However, it's hard to stop because they make me feel happy and satisfied.

建议: 回答中出现了词汇错误（steaks应为snacks），且句子结构不够清晰，建议注意词汇准确性并简化句子。

示例: No, I didn't eat many snacks as a child because my parents didn't allow it. Maybe that's why I like snacks so much now.

建议: 回答内容具体，但句子较长且有语法错误，建议简化句子并注意语法一致性。

示例: I like sweet snacks with a lot of sugar, especially chocolate bars, biscuits, cakes, and ice cream. Eating them makes me happier and less stressed.

× Well, to be honest, I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed or anxious and it usually happens before the final exams when I was preparing for the examinations and I could get really really stressed.

✓ Well, to be honest, I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed or anxious and it usually happens before the final exams when I am preparing for the examinations and I can get really really stressed.

这里的时间是现在的习惯和状态，应该用现在时态。原句中使用了过去时态“was preparing”和“could”，与前面的现在时态“usually eat”不一致，导致时态错误。建议保持时态一致，使用现在时态。

× Definitely not, I clearly know that snacks are bad for my healthy since lots of snacks that I ate are fried and with a bad ingredients.

✓ Definitely not, I clearly know that snacks are bad for my health since lots of snacks that I eat are fried and have bad ingredients.

“healthy”是形容词，表示健康的；这里需要名词“health”表示健康状况。并且“with a bad ingredients”中“a”与复数“ingredients”不匹配，应去掉“a”，且动词“are”应改为“have”表示“含有”。

× So I know it's healthy but it's really difficult to stop eating it because it can makes you feel more happy and satisfied.

✓ So I know it's unhealthy but it's really difficult to stop eating it because it can make you feel happier and more satisfied.

“can”后面动词应为原形，故“makes”应改为“make”。“more happy”应改为“happier”使用比较级。并且前文说零食不健康，应使用“unhealthy”而非“healthy”。

× Well, no, when I was a kid I wasn't allowed to eat lots of snacks and I guess that's why I'm kind of obsessed with these steaks now since I don't have much opportunities to try it when I was a kid, and that's mainly to today's obsession.

✓ Well, no, when I was a kid I wasn't allowed to eat lots of snacks and I guess that's why I'm kind of obsessed with these snacks now since I didn't have many opportunities to try them when I was a kid, and that's mainly the reason for today's obsession.

“steaks”应为“snacks”，语义错误。过去时态“don't have”应改为“didn't have”与“when I was a kid”时间一致。“much opportunities”应改为“many opportunities”，因为“opportunities”是可数名词。代词“it”应改为“them”指代复数。最后“that's mainly to today's obsession”表达不清，应改为“that's mainly the reason for today's obsession”。

× Well, I like to eat something that's sweet and have excessive sugar and especially those snacks that I wasn't allowed to eat when I was a child such as chocolate bar biscuits, cakes, ice creams and eating them makes me feel much happier and less stressed.

✓ Well, I like to eat something that's sweet and has excessive sugar, especially those snacks that I wasn't allowed to eat when I was a child such as chocolate bars, biscuits, cakes, and ice cream, and eating them makes me feel much happier and less stressed.

“have”应改为“has”，因为主语是单数“something”。“chocolate bar biscuits”应分开为“chocolate bars, biscuits”。“ice creams”通常不可数，改为“ice cream”。句子中缺少逗号，添加逗号使句子更清晰。