零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答较长且有些重复，建议简洁表达，避免冗余，同时注意语法时态一致。

示例: I usually eat snacks before dinner because my parents come home late from work, and I feel hungry and tired after cooking.

建议: 回答中出现了矛盾（称不健康的零食为健康），词汇使用不准确，建议用更准确的词汇表达并避免矛盾。

示例: I think eating snacks can be healthy if I choose options like vegetable chips or nuts instead of sweets or fried snacks.

建议: 回答内容较完整，但句子结构稍显重复，建议使用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: I rarely ate snacks as a child because my parents, who are doctors, strictly controlled my diet. However, they became less strict when I grew up.

建议: 回答中出现了重复和错误词汇（如festival stickers），建议使用准确词汇并避免重复。

示例: I enjoy eating chocolate occasionally, about once every two weeks, and I also like salty snacks like potato chips.

× I usually eat snacks before having dinner because my parents came back from work quite late so after I cooked the meal I felt exhausted and hungry so I was craving for food and I took snacks as an alternative.

✓ I usually eat snacks before having dinner because my parents come back from work quite late, so after I cook the meal I feel exhausted and hungry, so I crave food and take snacks as an alternative.

句子中描述的是习惯性动作，应该使用一般现在时，而不是过去时。将“came back”“cooked”“felt”“was craving”“took”改为一般现在时的“come back”“cook”“feel”“crave”“take”更符合语境。

× I think it's healthy for me to eat snacks because I only pick unhealthy snacks such as vegetable crabs, crunches.

✓ I think it's healthy for me to eat snacks because I only pick healthy snacks such as vegetable crisps, crunches.

原句中“unhealthy”与后文表达的健康观点矛盾，应为“healthy”。另外，“vegetable crabs”应为“vegetable crisps”，是拼写错误。

× I didn't often eat snacks when I was young because my parents are doctors.

✓ I didn't often eat snacks when I was young because my parents were doctors.

描述过去的情况时，主句和从句的时态应保持一致，父母当时是医生，应该用过去时“were”。

× I was never allowed to eat any snacks when I was little and only when I grow up.

✓ I was never allowed to eat any snacks when I was little and only when I grew up.

“grow up”描述过去的动作，应使用过去时“grew up”。

× As an adult, they didn't care about that.

✓ As an adult, they don't care about that.

“As an adult”表示现在的状态，后句应使用一般现在时“don't care”。

× Well, I like eating chocolates, but I'm on a diet, so I only eat a small bar like every two weeks.

✓ Well, I like eating chocolate, but I'm on a diet, so I only eat a small bar about every two weeks.

“chocolates”应为不可数名词“chocolate”，表示巧克力。副词“like”用法不当，应改为“about”表示大约。

× And also I like eating something salty, like festival stickers, potatoes, stickers, potato chips.

✓ And also I like eating something salty, like festival stickers, potatoes, crackers, potato chips.

“stickers”应为“crackers”，拼写错误，且“festival stickers”可能是“festival crackers”的误写。