零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中存在语法错误，如“I'm seldom eat”应为“I seldom eat”，并且表达不够自然。建议注意动词时态和主谓一致，同时简洁表达观点。

示例: I seldom eat snacks now because I think they are unhealthy. However, when I feel tired from work, I sometimes have a small snack to refresh myself.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和词汇使用错误，如“it have”应为“they have”，“snake”应为“snack”。建议加强语法基础，使用准确词汇，并且表达更清晰。

示例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many snacks contain a lot of sugar and harmful chemicals that can damage our body.

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，如“eat”应为“ate”，“enjoying”应为“enjoy”，“IA way to intake such a sugary”表达不清。建议注意时态变化和句子结构，表达更连贯。

示例: When I was young, I often ate snacks like candy because I enjoyed their sweet taste. However, as I grew up, I became more concerned about my health and tried to reduce sugary foods.

建议: 回答中存在语法和表达不自然的问题，如“it takes very sweet”应为“it is very sweet”，“my mom always love”应为“my mom always loves”。建议注意动词形式和表达自然流畅。

示例: I love chocolate because it is very sweet and has a special flavor. I often buy chocolates when I go shopping, and my mom also likes to buy them for me.

× Well I'm seldom eat snacks now because I think it's unhealthy, but when I tire about my work I will have some snacks.

✓ Well, I seldom eat snacks now because I think it's unhealthy, but when I tire from my work I will have some snacks.

这里的 'I'm seldom eat' 是时态错误，应该用一般现在时 'I seldom eat'。此外，'tire about my work' 应改为 'tire from my work'，介词使用错误。

× Well I'm seldom eat snacks now because I think it's unhealthy, but when I tire about my work I will have some snacks.

✓ Well, I seldom eat snacks now because I think it's unhealthy, but when I tire from my work I will have some snacks.

动词 'tire' 后面应接介词 'from' 表示原因，'about' 用法错误。

× Well, I don't think it's healthy for our body because it have a lot of candy in the snake and I think it's harmful for our body such as some chemical.

✓ Well, I don't think it's healthy for our body because it has a lot of candy in the snack and I think it's harmful for our body, such as some chemicals.

主语 'it' 是单数，谓语动词应为 'has' 而非 'have'。'snake' 应为 'snack'。'chemical' 应用复数 'chemicals'，因为指的是多种化学物质。

× Well, I don't think it's healthy for our body because it have a lot of candy in the snake and I think it's harmful for our body such as some chemical.

✓ Well, I don't think it's healthy for our body because it has a lot of candy in the snack and I think it's harmful for our body, such as some chemicals.

'in the snake' 应为 'in the snack'，这里是拼写错误。

× When I was young I often eat snake like candy or other sweet treats because I really enjoying their sweet taste and children usually love sugary food.

✓ When I was young I often ate snacks like candy or other sweet treats because I really enjoyed their sweet taste and children usually love sugary food.

描述过去习惯动作时，动词应使用一般过去时，'eat' 应改为 'ate'，'enjoying' 应改为 'enjoyed'。

× When I was young I often eat snake like candy or other sweet treats because I really enjoying their sweet taste and children usually love sugary food.

✓ When I was young I often ate snacks like candy or other sweet treats because I really enjoyed their sweet taste and children usually love sugary food.

'snake' 应为复数形式 'snacks'，表示零食的总称。

× However, as I grow up I become more and more care about my body health and IA way to intake such a sugary.

✓ However, as I grow up I become more and more careful about my body health and I avoid intake of such sugary foods.

'care' 应用形容词 'careful' 修饰，'IA way to intake such a sugary' 语法错误，改为 'I avoid intake of such sugary foods' 更通顺。

× However, as I grow up I become more and more care about my body health and IA way to intake such a sugary.

✓ However, as I grow up I become more and more careful about my body health and I avoid intake of such sugary foods.

'care' 是动词，句中应使用形容词 'careful' 来修饰主语。

× However, as I grow up I become more and more care about my body health and IA way to intake such a sugary.

✓ However, as I grow up I become more and more careful about my body health and I avoid intake of such sugary foods.

'sugary' 后应接复数名词 'foods'，表示多种含糖食品。

× I love chocolate very much because it takes very sweet and it has a special flavor, so I often buy chocolates when I go to shopping and my mom always love to buy it for me.

✓ I love chocolate very much because it tastes very sweet and it has a special flavor, so I often buy chocolates when I go shopping and my mom always loves to buy it for me.

'takes very sweet' 应为 'tastes very sweet'，动词错误。'go to shopping' 应为 'go shopping'，介词使用错误。

× I love chocolate very much because it takes very sweet and it has a special flavor, so I often buy chocolates when I go to shopping and my mom always love to buy it for me.

✓ I love chocolate very much because it tastes very sweet and it has a special flavor, so I often buy chocolates when I go shopping and my mom always loves to buy it for me.

主语 'my mom' 是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加 's'，'love' 应改为 'loves'。