零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，例如“snakes”应为“snacks”，句子结构不够清晰。建议使用简单且正确的句子结构，避免拼写错误，并且回答要更自然流畅。

示例: I usually eat snacks when I feel stressed or tired after going out. For example, I might order some takeaway snacks to help me relax.

建议: 回答中表达了观点，但重复使用“it's bad”显得冗余，且句子不够连贯。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并丰富细节说明为什么不健康。

示例: No, I don't think snacks are healthy because they usually contain a lot of oil and sugar, which can harm our health. However, eating them sometimes can make us feel happier.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清的问题，如“child food”不明确，句子结构混乱。建议使用正确的时态和清晰的表达，避免语法错误。

示例: Yes, I often ate snacks like chips and candies when I was a child. My mother would reward me with these treats when I did well at school.

建议: 回答中表达不够自然，“tear up from my depressed time”表达不准确。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并且丰富细节说明喜欢的零食及原因。

示例: I like to eat chocolates, chips, and other sweet snacks because their taste helps me feel better when I'm feeling down.

× When I was just out and I feeling depressed I always take some take away and order some snakes to let us chill out.

✓ When I was just out and feeling depressed, I always took some takeaway and ordered some snacks to let us chill out.

这里的 'I feeling' 应该用现在分词形式 'feeling'，但前面多了主语 'I'，应去掉 'I' 只用 'feeling'。另外，句子描述过去的习惯动作，动词时态应使用过去式 'took' 和 'ordered'。

× When I was just out and I feeling depressed I always take some take away and order some snakes to let us chill out.

✓ When I was just out and feeling depressed, I always took some takeaway and ordered some snacks to let us chill out.

单词 'snakes' 是错误拼写，正确应为复数名词 'snacks'，表示零食。

× When I was just out and I feeling depressed I always take some take away and order some snakes to let us chill out.

✓ When I was just out and feeling depressed, I always took some takeaway and ordered some snacks to let us chill out.

句子描述过去的习惯动作，动词 'take' 和 'order' 应使用过去式 'took' 和 'ordered'。

× No, because the snacks are always high in oil or sugar. It's bad, it's bad for our health, but it can bring the feeling happy feelings for us.

✓ No, because snacks are always high in oil or sugar. It's bad, it's bad for our health, but it can bring happy feelings to us.

'the snacks' 中的定冠词 'the' 不必要，且 'the feeling happy feelings' 结构重复且错误，应改为 'happy feelings'。

× No, because the snacks are always high in oil or sugar. It's bad, it's bad for our health, but it can bring the feeling happy feelings for us.

✓ No, because snacks are always high in oil or sugar. It's bad, it's bad for our health, but it can bring happy feelings to us.

'the feeling happy feelings' 结构不正确，形容词 'happy' 应直接修饰名词 'feelings'，且不需要 'the feeling'。

× Yes, when I was a child I like to eat the child food and chips. This is my favorite food. I after I got the good schools my mother will award for me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked to eat child food and chips. This was my favorite food. After I got into a good school, my mother would reward me.

描述过去的事情，动词 'like' 应用过去式 'liked'，'is' 应用过去式 'was'，'will award' 应用过去将来时 'would reward'。

× Yes, when I was a child I like to eat the child food and chips. This is my favorite food. I after I got the good schools my mother will award for me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked to eat child food and chips. This was my favorite food. After I got into a good school, my mother would reward me.

'the child food' 中 'child' 应为形容词形式 'child'，且不需要定冠词 'the'。

× Yes, when I was a child I like to eat the child food and chips. This is my favorite food. I after I got the good schools my mother will award for me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked to eat child food and chips. This was my favorite food. After I got into a good school, my mother would reward me.

'got the good schools' 中应使用介词 'into' 表示进入学校，且 'schools' 应为单数 'school'。

× Yes, when I was a child I like to eat the child food and chips. This is my favorite food. I after I got the good schools my mother will award for me.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I liked to eat child food and chips. This was my favorite food. After I got into a good school, my mother would reward me.

'schools' 应为单数 'school'，因为通常指一所学校。

× I like to eat chocolates, chips and some high sugar food. The sweet taste will let me tear up from my depressed time.

✓ I like to eat chocolate, chips and some high-sugar foods. The sweet taste helps me tear up during my depressed times.

'chocolates' 应用不可数名词 'chocolate'，'high sugar food' 应为复数 'high-sugar foods'，且 'high-sugar' 需要连字符。

× I like to eat chocolates, chips and some high sugar food. The sweet taste will let me tear up from my depressed time.

✓ I like to eat chocolate, chips and some high-sugar foods. The sweet taste helps me tear up during my depressed times.

'tear up from my depressed time' 中 'from' 用法不当，应改为 'during' 表示在抑郁时期。