零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够自然，且有重复。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并注意时态一致。

示例: I usually eat snacks during summer holidays when I stay at home alone. Since I feel lazy to cook, I prefer to have snacks whenever I feel hungry.

建议: 回答表达了观点，但语法错误影响理解，如“don't need me to wash plants or bowl”。建议使用正确的表达方式，并丰富细节。

示例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy, but I find them delicious and convenient because I don't need to wash any dishes after eating.

建议: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，并注意语法和句子结构。

示例: Actually, I didn't like eating snacks when I was young because my parents always told me they were unhealthy.

建议: 回答中表达不够自然，且有语法和用词错误，如“move my mind”和“make me. Pleasure”。建议使用更地道的表达方式。

示例: I have a sweet tooth, so I usually prefer eating sweet snacks like cookies or candies. They always cheer me up and make my day better.

× In holiday in the summer vacation I stay alone in a whole day and I'm lazy to make a dishes, so I prefer to eat some snacks when I was hungry when I'm hungry.

✓ In holidays during the summer vacation, I stay alone the whole day and I'm lazy to make dishes, so I prefer to eat some snacks when I'm hungry.

holiday 应该用复数形式 holidays，因为这里指的是假期的多个日子；a dishes 中 dishes 是复数，前面不应该加不定冠词 a。

× In holiday in the summer vacation I stay alone in a whole day and I'm lazy to make a dishes, so I prefer to eat some snacks when I was hungry when I'm hungry.

✓ In holidays during the summer vacation, I stay alone the whole day and I'm lazy to make dishes, so I prefer to eat some snacks when I'm hungry.

句中出现了时态混用，was hungry 应改为现在时态，因为描述的是习惯性动作。

× Definitely not, but I can't help myself eating snacks. It is delicious and convenient to eat because it don't need me to wash plants or bowl.

✓ Definitely not, but I can't help eating snacks. It is delicious and convenient to eat because it doesn't need me to wash plates or bowls.

can't help 后面应接动词-ing 形式；don't 应改为 doesn't，因为主语 it 是第三人称单数；plants 应为 plates，bowl 应为复数 bowls。

× Definitely not, but I can't help myself eating snacks. It is delicious and convenient to eat because it don't need me to wash plants or bowl.

✓ Definitely not, but I can't help eating snacks. It is delicious and convenient to eat because it doesn't need me to wash plates or bowls.

plants 应为 plates，bowl 应为复数 bowls。

× Actually, I didn't like eat snacks when I I didn't like eating snacks when I was young and my parents, umm, always avoided me to touch snacks.

✓ Actually, I didn't like eating snacks when I was young and my parents always avoided me touching snacks.

didn't like 后应接动词-ing 形式；avoided me to touch 应改为 avoided me touching，避免不正确的动词搭配。

× Actually, I didn't like eat snacks when I I didn't like eating snacks when I was young and my parents, umm, always avoided me to touch snacks.

✓ Actually, I didn't like eating snacks when I was young and my parents always avoided me touching snacks.

avoid 后面应接动名词形式，不能用 to + 动词原形。

× They think they think it was unhealthy.

✓ They think it was unhealthy.

重复使用 they think，造成冗余，应删除重复部分。

× I am a sweet person, I always prefer to eat something sweet like sugar or some cookie.

✓ I am a sweet person; I always prefer to eat something sweet like sugar or some cookies.

cookie 应用复数 cookies，因为指的是一些饼干。

× It will move my mind and make me. Pleasure a whole day.

✓ It will lift my mood and make me feel pleasure the whole day.

原句结构混乱，pleasure 用法错误，应改为 make me feel pleasure 或表达情绪提升的短语。