零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: คำตอบของคุณควรชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น โดยควรตอบตรงคำถามและหลีกเลี่ยงการพูดซ้ำหรือไม่สมบูรณ์ เช่น คำว่า 'like strums' ไม่ชัดเจน และประโยคสุดท้ายไม่สมบูรณ์ ควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้เนื้อหาลื่นไหลและมีความหมายครบถ้วน

示例: I usually eat snacks when I'm tired or stressed, especially during exam periods. For example, when I feel overwhelmed, I tend to eat a lot of snacks to help me relax. However, my mother often advises me not to overeat because it can be unhealthy.

建议: คำตอบควรมีโครงสร้างที่ชัดเจนและใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิด เช่น 'although' หรือ 'however' และควรอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน คำว่า 'heal some parts of myself' ไม่เหมาะสมและควรใช้คำที่ถูกต้องและเหมาะสมกว่า

示例: Although eating snacks is not very healthy because they lack nutrients, I still eat them sometimes. However, they help me feel refreshed and reduce my stress after a long day.

建议: ควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้องและประโยคที่สมบูรณ์ เช่น 'I often ate snacks when I was young' และหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้ประโยคที่ไม่สมบูรณ์หรือผิดไวยากรณ์ นอกจากนี้ควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อเชื่อมโยงความคิดและอธิบายเหตุผลอย่างชัดเจน

示例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but I don't do it anymore because it's unhealthy. As a woman in my twenties, I feel I need to be responsible for my health and lifestyle choices.

建议: ควรใช้ไวยากรณ์ที่ถูกต้อง เช่น 'My favorite snack is cheese' และใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อให้ประโยคลื่นไหล นอกจากนี้ควรหลีกเลี่ยงการใช้คำซ้ำและใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสม เช่น 'customer' แทน 'customers' ในบริบทนี้

示例: My favorite snack is cheese, which I usually buy from a mini mart at MBK Center. They often have discounts of around 50% because I am a loyal customer. Since I buy it frequently, the staff sometimes gives me special discounts.

× I usually eat snacks when I'm tired and I want something to cope with.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I'm tired and want something to cope with.

The verb 'want' should be in the base form after 'and' because the subject 'I' is shared and the auxiliary 'do' is omitted. Using 'I want' again is redundant here.

× For example when I have to pass the exams I will get stressed and after I get stressed I will eat a lot like strums.

✓ For example, when I have to pass exams, I get stressed, and after that, I eat a lot, like sweets.

The sentence is run-on and unclear. 'Will' is unnecessary because the situation is habitual. 'Strums' is likely a typo or incorrect word; 'sweets' fits better. Commas improve clarity.

× So my mom always told me don't eat a lot I'm just stressed because it makes.

✓ So my mom always told me, 'Don't eat a lot just because you're stressed,' because it affects your health.

The sentence lacks proper punctuation and clarity. Quotation marks indicate direct speech. The phrase 'because it makes' is incomplete and unclear; it needs completion for meaning.

× No I don't think it's healthy for me since it's doesn't carry a lot of nutrients but I do it.

✓ No, I don't think it's healthy for me since it doesn't contain a lot of nutrients, but I still do it.

'It's doesn't' is incorrect; 'it doesn't' is correct. 'Carry' is better replaced with 'contain' when referring to nutrients. 'But I do it' is vague; 'still do it' clarifies the meaning.

× Sometimes even it's bad because it can heal some parts of myself and make me feel refreshed and less stressed.

✓ Sometimes, even though it's bad, it can help me heal and make me feel refreshed and less stressed.

'Heal some parts of myself' is awkward; 'help me heal' is clearer. The sentence structure is improved by adding 'even though' to connect ideas properly.

× Yes, I often eat snack when I was young but I haven't do it anymore because it's not good for my health and as a woman's who in her 20s, she has to be responsible with her life and try not to do anything.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but I haven't done it anymore because it's not good for my health. As a woman in her 20s, I have to be responsible for my life and try not to do such things.

'Eat' should be past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was young.' 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks.' 'Haven't do' is incorrect; it should be 'haven't done.' 'Woman's who in her 20s' is incorrect; corrected to 'woman in her 20s.' Pronouns adjusted for clarity.

× My favorite snacks is cheese.

✓ My favorite snack is cheese.

'Snacks' is plural but 'is' is singular; the subject and verb must agree. Since 'favorite' is singular, 'snack' should be singular.

× I usually buy it from a mini Mart at at MBK centers.

✓ I usually buy it from a mini mart at MBK Center.

'At at' is a repetition error; only one 'at' is needed. 'MBK centers' should be singular 'MBK Center' if referring to a specific place.

× It's often have discounts to around 50% because I'm a loyal customers.

✓ It often has discounts of around 50% because I'm a loyal customer.

'It's' (it is) should be 'it' as the subject. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular subject 'it.' 'Customers' should be singular 'customer' to agree with 'I'm.' 'Discounts to' is better as 'discounts of.'

× I buy it a lot so the waitress gave me a discount.

✓ I buy it a lot, so the waitress gives me a discount.

The sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'gives' is appropriate instead of past 'gave.' The comma improves sentence clarity.