零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Apni answer e boro bhabe clear korte paren je apni kakhon ar kothay snacks khan, ar ki dhoroner snacks khan. Apnar answer e kichu grammar error ache, ar sentence gulo natural na. Apni chesta korun simple ar clear sentence use korte, ar kichu linking word add korte jate answer ta coherent hoy.

示例: I usually eat snacks during my study breaks or while working. I prefer simple snacks like bread or juice because they are easy to eat and give me energy.

建议: Apnar uttor e kichu grammar ar word choice error ache, ar kichu sentence bujhte oshubidha hoy. Apni chesta korun clear ar simple bhabe bolte je snacks keno healthy, ar kibhabe eta apnar kaj e help kore. Linking words use korun jate answer ta logical hoy.

示例: Yes, I think eating snacks is healthy because it gives me energy. When I eat snacks, I can focus better on my work and finish my tasks efficiently.

建议: Apnar uttor e grammar ar sentence structure improve kora dorkar. Apni chesta korun simple ar clear sentence use korte, ar kichu specific example dite. Linking words use korun jate answer ta bhalo flow kore.

示例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. During school breaks, I usually ate fruits, juice, or snacks from my Tiffin box like noodles.

建议: Apnar uttor e kichu grammar ar sentence structure error ache. Apni chesta korun clear ar natural sentence use korte, ar kichu linking word add korte jate answer ta coherent hoy. Specific details dite paren keno apni fruits ar juice pochondo koren.

示例: I especially like to eat fruits and drink juice as snacks. When I take breaks from studying or working, these snacks help me stay focused and refreshed.

× I usually eat snacks in back of my study or my job hold.

✓ I usually eat snacks at the back of my study or my workplace.

The preposition 'in' is incorrectly used here. The correct preposition to indicate location is 'at' or 'in the back of'. Also, 'my job hold' is incorrect; 'my workplace' is more appropriate.

× I eat snacks like foods or normal food like breads or juice.

✓ I eat snacks like food or normal foods like bread or juice.

'Foods' is generally uncountable when referring to types of food, so 'food' is preferred. 'Breads' is incorrect as 'bread' is uncountable in this context.

× Yeah, obviously it is a healthy for our IT snacks.

✓ Yeah, obviously it is healthy for us to eat snacks.

'A healthy' is incorrect because 'healthy' is an adjective and does not need an article here. Also, 'our IT snacks' is unclear; it should be 'for us to eat snacks'.

× When we eat snacks, it provides some energy or or energy for my body and it's also focused.

✓ When we eat snacks, they provide some energy for my body and help me stay focused.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'snacks' is plural, so 'they' should be used. Also, 'it's also focused' is unclear; it should be 'help me stay focused'.

× It helps to forecast our work and jobs.

✓ It helps to focus on our work and jobs.

'Forecast' is incorrect here; the intended meaning is 'focus'. Also, 'our work and jobs' is acceptable but 'our work' alone is sufficient.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young, when I was younger, I go to I went to school in break time, I eat I eat snacks like fruits or juice or my Tiffin boxes snacks likes noodles or etcetera is.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. When I was younger, I went to school during break time and ate snacks like fruits, juice, or snacks from my Tiffin box like noodles, etc.

The verbs 'eat' and 'go' should be in past tense 'ate' and 'went' to match the past time frame. Also, sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× This next I like especially I like fruits or juice.

✓ The snacks I like especially are fruits and juice.

'This next' is incorrect; it should be 'The snacks'. Also, 'I like fruits or juice' is better expressed as 'are fruits and juice'.

× When I break in my study or work, I eat the fruits or juice.

✓ During breaks in my study or work, I eat fruits or drink juice.

'When I break in my study or work' is incorrect; 'During breaks' is better. Also, 'eat the fruits or juice' is corrected to 'eat fruits or drink juice'.

× It's focused. It has to focus my work or studying.

✓ It helps me focus on my work or studying.

'It's focused' is incorrect; the intended meaning is that the snack helps the person focus. Also, 'It has to focus my work' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me focus on my work'.