零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy such as "in the evening time" and "between my lunch and dinner meals" which convey similar meaning. Also, you can use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I usually eat snacks in the evening, between lunch and dinner, because I feel hungry after returning from my gym workout.

建议: Your answer addresses the question well, but avoid starting with a question back to the examiner. Also, try to use linking words like 'however' or 'on the other hand' to contrast ideas more clearly. Try to complete your last sentence for clarity.

示例: Whether snacks are healthy depends on the type I choose. If I eat snacks rich in fiber and protein, they serve as a good post-workout meal; however, snacks high in fat and carbs are less healthy.

建议: Your answer is natural and informative. To improve, try to use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your reasoning clearer and avoid long sentences by splitting them for better clarity.

示例: When I was young, I used to eat a lot of snacks guilt-free because I didn't worry about health issues. However, as I grew older, I realized that unhealthy snacks are not a good choice.

建议: Your answer is detailed and well-structured. To enhance coherence, use linking words such as 'although' or 'despite' to introduce contrasting opinions smoothly.

示例: I prefer ragi snacks these days because they are rich in protein and fiber. Although some people think ragi snacks are monotonous, I find them very flavourful. Therefore, I enjoy a variety of ragi snacks like chips and makhanas.

× I usually eat snacks in the evening time between my lunch and dinner meals.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening between my lunch and dinner meals.

The phrase 'in the evening time' is redundant; 'in the evening' is sufficient and more natural. Also, 'between my lunch and dinner meals' correctly uses the preposition 'between' to indicate the time period separating two events.

× This is because it is a time where I'm usually hungry and I'm back from my workout from the gym.

✓ This is because it is a time when I'm usually hungry and have just returned from my workout at the gym.

The relative pronoun 'where' is incorrectly used to refer to 'time'; 'when' is the correct relative pronoun for time. Also, 'back from my workout from the gym' is awkward; 'have just returned from my workout at the gym' is clearer and uses the correct preposition 'at' for locations.

× Is it healthy or not? I think that totally depends on the choice of snack that I'm eating.

✓ Is it healthy or not? I think that totally depends on the choice of snack I eat.

The phrase 'that I'm eating' is unnecessarily in the present continuous tense; the simple present 'I eat' is more appropriate when talking about habitual actions or general truths.

× If I choose a snack that is full of fiber and protein then it would obviously be a plus point after my workout and become a post workout meal.

✓ If I choose a snack that is full of fiber and protein, then it would obviously be a plus point after my workout and become a post-workout meal.

A comma is needed after the conditional clause for clarity. Also, 'post workout' should be hyphenated as 'post-workout' when used as a compound adjective before a noun.

× But if I'm choosing a snack full of fat and carbs, then maybe.

✓ But if I choose a snack full of fat and carbs, then maybe.

The present continuous 'I'm choosing' is incorrect here; the simple present 'I choose' is appropriate for habitual or general statements.

× When I was young I used to eat a lot of snacks and that too guilt free because when we are young we do not care about our health problems because of course we have parents to look after that.

✓ When I was young, I used to eat a lot of snacks, and that too guilt-free because when we are young, we do not care about our health problems since, of course, we have parents to look after that.

Commas are added for clarity and to separate clauses. 'Guilt free' should be hyphenated as 'guilt-free' when used as an adjective. The sentence structure is improved for readability.

× But as we tend to get older we realize that unhealthy snacks are not really a good option.

✓ But as we tend to get older, we realize that unhealthy snacks are not really a good option.

A comma is needed after the introductory clause 'as we tend to get older' to separate it from the main clause.

× I prefer ragi snacks these days because they are full of protein and fiber.

✓ I prefer ragi snacks these days because they are full of protein and fibre.

The sentence is grammatically correct. However, 'fiber' is the American English spelling; 'fibre' is the British English spelling commonly used in India. Both are acceptable, but consistency is important.

× Some people have assumptions that ragi snacks are monotonous and boring in their taste, but it is not true.

✓ Some people assume that ragi snacks are monotonous and boring in taste, but that is not true.

'Have assumptions' is awkward; 'assume' is the correct verb. 'In their taste' is incorrect; 'in taste' or 'in their taste' is better replaced by 'in taste'. Also, 'it is not true' should refer to the plural subject 'ragi snacks' or the idea, so 'that is not true' is clearer.

× So I eat a variety of ragi snacks like chips, makhanas etcetera.

✓ So, I eat a variety of ragi snacks like chips, makhanas, etcetera.

A comma is needed after 'So' as an introductory word. Also, a comma is needed before 'etcetera' to separate it from the list. 'Etcetera' is often abbreviated as 'etc.' but spelling it out is acceptable.