零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 你的回答表达了观点，但语法和用词不够准确，且句子结构较复杂，建议简化句子并注意语法，如“sugars and calorie”应为“sugar and calories”，并避免重复表达。

示例: I rarely eat snacks now because eating too much sugar and calories can lead to weight gain and obesity.

建议: 回答直接且表达了观点，但存在语法错误，如“snacks which contains”应为“snacks which contain”，且句子衔接不够流畅，建议使用连接词使表达更连贯。

示例: No, definitely not. Snacks usually contain a lot of sugar and carbohydrates, so if someone eats too many, it can harm their health.

建议: 回答中时态使用不当，如“can't”应为过去时“couldn't”，且表达不够自然，建议调整时态并简化表达，使句子更流畅。

示例: Yes, when I was in primary school, I often ate snacks because I couldn't resist the temptation, especially chocolates and crisps.

建议: 回答中存在多处语法和表达错误，如“crisps is”应为“crisps are”，“delicate without creeps”表达不清，建议使用简单明了的句子描述喜好，并避免重复和不准确的词汇。

示例: My favorite snacks are crisps because they are delicious and salty. I enjoy eating them when I want to relax.

× Well, I seldom eat snacks because I think if people ingested too much sugars and calorie, they would become fat and obesity.

✓ Well, I seldom eat snacks because I think if people ingest too much sugar and calories, they would become fat and obese.

这里'sugars'和'calorie'的单复数使用错误。'Sugar'通常不可数，表示糖的总量，'calorie'应使用复数形式'calories'表示热量。'Obesity'是名词，需用形容词'obese'来描述人变胖。

× Well, I seldom eat snacks because I think if people ingested too much sugars and calorie, they would become fat and obesity.

✓ Well, I seldom eat snacks because I think if people ingest too much sugar and calories, they would become fat and obese.

'Obesity'是名词，句中应使用形容词'obese'来描述人变胖的状态。

× No, definitely not. That's because snacks which contains a lot of sugar and carbohydrate.

✓ No, definitely not. That's because snacks contain a lot of sugar and carbohydrates.

'Snacks'是复数，谓语动词应使用复数形式'contain'。'Carbohydrate'应使用复数形式'carbohydrates'。

× No, definitely not. That's because snacks which contains a lot of sugar and carbohydrate.

✓ No, definitely not. That's because snacks contain a lot of sugar and carbohydrates.

'Snacks'为复数，谓语动词应为'contain'。'Carbohydrate'应为复数形式'carbohydrates'。

× If someone consumed too much snacks, he would become unhealthy.

✓ If someone consumed too many snacks, he would become unhealthy.

'Snacks'为可数名词，修饰词应使用'many'而非'much'。

× Yes, when I was at a period in my primary school, I usually ate snacks because I can't overcome the temptation of the snacks, especially the chocolates and the crisps.

✓ Yes, when I was in primary school, I usually ate snacks because I couldn't overcome the temptation of the snacks, especially the chocolates and the crisps.

过去时态中，'can't'应改为过去式'couldn't'。'At a period in my primary school'表达不自然，改为'in primary school'更合适。

× Crisps is my favorite snacks 'cause it 'cause it is very delicious and delicate without creeps.

✓ Crisps are my favorite snack because they are very delicious and delicate without crisps.

'Crisps'为复数，谓语动词应为'are'。'Favorite snacks'应为单数'snack'。句中'creeps'应为'crisps'。

× Crisps is my favorite snacks 'cause it 'cause it is very delicious and delicate without creeps.

✓ Crisps are my favorite snack because they are very delicious and delicate without crisps.

'Crisps'为复数，代词应使用'they'而非'it'。

× I couldn't imagine how to relax myself.

✓ I couldn't imagine how to relax.

'Relax'为不及物动词，后面不需要反身代词'myself'。

× That's a savory.

✓ That's savory.

'Savory'是形容词，不能单独作为名词使用。