零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to give a clear and direct answer to the question first, then add specific details. Avoid unclear phrases and redundancy. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. For example, mention the time you eat snacks and the type of snacks you prefer, explaining why.

示例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, especially during my lunch break. I prefer spicy snacks because I don't like sweet ones. For example, I often choose spicy chips or nuts instead of desserts.

建议: Provide a clear opinion first, then support it with reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Use linking words like 'however' or 'although' correctly to show contrast.

示例: Honestly, I don't think eating snacks is healthy for me. Although I enjoy them, my parents often advise me to avoid them because they can cause health problems. However, I still eat snacks occasionally during lunch.

建议: Answer directly and clearly. Use specific examples of snacks you liked before and compare them to your current preferences. Avoid unclear or incorrect words and ensure sentences are complete.

示例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. Back then, I liked different kinds of snacks, such as crackers and fruit candies. Now, I prefer simpler snacks like cookies.

建议: Give a clear answer naming specific snacks you enjoy. Avoid unclear or incorrect words. Use linking words if you add more details about when or why you like these snacks.

示例: I like to eat spicy snacks during lunch, such as spicy chips or nuts. Sometimes, I also enjoy making my own snacks at home, like baked chips.

× I do really love to eat snacks.

✓ I really do love to eat snacks.

The placement of the auxiliary verb 'do' is incorrect. In English, for emphasis, 'do' should come before the main verb without 'really' separating them. Correct placement improves sentence clarity.

× I eat next during my lunch time with a TI Really loves my spicy snacks.

✓ I eat snacks during my lunch time. I really love my spicy snacks.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Separating into two sentences clarifies meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× Actually. I don't have a sweet that's why. Usually avoids a sweet snacks or desserts.

✓ Actually, I don't have a sweet tooth; that's why I usually avoid sweet snacks or desserts.

The original sentences are fragmented and have incorrect pronoun use. 'I' is missing as the subject in 'Usually avoids'. Also, 'a sweet' is incorrect; the phrase 'a sweet tooth' is the correct idiom. Combining sentences improves flow.

× To be very honest, I think it is not at all how before me, although I I love to eat snacks all the time.

✓ To be very honest, I think it is not at all healthy for me, although I love to eat snacks all the time.

The phrase 'not at all how before me' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'not at all healthy for me'. Also, the repeated 'I' is a typo. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× However it is not healthy for me so some my parents usually suggest me to avoid eating it.

✓ However, it is not healthy for me, so my parents usually suggest that I avoid eating it.

The phrase 'some my parents' is incorrect; 'some' should be removed. Also, 'suggest me to avoid' is incorrect; the correct structure is 'suggest that I avoid'. Adding commas improves sentence flow.

× But I still love it and have it during during my lunch time with my.

✓ But I still love it and have it during my lunch time.

The sentence is incomplete and has repeated words ('during during'). Removing the repetition and incomplete phrase 'with my' corrects the sentence.

× Did you often eat snacks when you were young?

✓ Did you often eat snacks when you were young?

This sentence is correct as it is in past tense and properly structured.

× I have been eating Staten snack since my childhood.

✓ I have been eating snacks since my childhood.

'Staten snack' seems to be a typo or unclear phrase. Assuming 'snacks' is intended. The present perfect continuous tense is appropriate here.

× However, my taste has changed significantly at my in my childhood, I used to prefer different kind of snacks like a Corcuera church.

✓ However, my taste has changed significantly. In my childhood, I used to prefer different kinds of snacks like a Corcuera church.

The original sentence is confusing and contains unclear phrases ('at my in my childhood', 'Corcuera church'). Splitting into two sentences and correcting 'different kind' to 'different kinds' improves clarity. 'Corcuera church' may be a mishearing or typo; left as is due to lack of context.

× Right now I just prefer some basic snacks like cookies.

✓ Right now, I just prefer some basic snacks like cookies.

The sentence is correct; adding a comma after 'Right now' improves readability.

× I like to have spicy snacks with Mighty during my lunch time.

✓ I like to have spicy snacks with my meal during my lunch time.

'Mighty' seems to be a mishearing or typo. Assuming 'my meal' is intended. Correcting pronoun use clarifies meaning.

× I usually eat make some bilbrey or I usually do click.

✓ I usually make some bilberry or I usually do click.

The original sentence is unclear and likely contains misheard words ('bilbrey', 'do click'). Assuming 'make some bilberry' is intended, but 'do click' is unclear. Correcting sentence structure and removing redundancy improves clarity.