零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be clearer and more grammatically correct. Try to directly answer the question with a simple topic sentence, then add specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and redundancy.

示例: I usually eat snacks every hour during the day because they make me happy and help relieve my stress while working.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Please give a direct opinion first, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Use simple and correct vocabulary related to health.

示例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because it can cause coughs. However, snacks help me reduce stress, so they have some benefits.

建议: Your answer should be more coherent and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and improve sentence structure.

示例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. However, my parents were worried about my health because I had weak immunity and might catch a cold.

建议: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Give a clear topic sentence naming your favorite snacks, then explain why you like them with specific reasons and linking words.

示例: My favorite snacks are candy and chocolate because they contain a lot of sugar, which makes me feel relaxed and happy.

× I almost it snacks for every hour in each day because snacks profiled may the sands of hapiness an they can relieve my pressure during my working hour.

✓ I almost eat snacks every hour each day because snacks provide me the sands of happiness and they can relieve my pressure during my working hours.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing verbs, causing confusion. 'Almost it snacks' is incorrect; it should be 'almost eat snacks'. 'Profiled may the sands of hapiness' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; corrected to 'provide me the sands of happiness'. Also, 'an' should be 'and'. 'Working hour' should be plural 'working hours' to indicate the time period. Improving sentence structure and word choice clarifies meaning.

× I almost it snacks for every hour in each day because snacks profiled may the sands of hapiness an they can relieve my pressure during my working hour.

✓ I almost eat snacks every hour each day because snacks provide me the sands of happiness and they can relieve my pressure during my working hours.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used after 'almost'. The correct verb 'eat' should be used instead. Also, 'they' correctly refers to 'snacks' later in the sentence.

× I almost it snacks for every hour in each day because snacks profiled may the sands of hapiness an they can relieve my pressure during my working hour.

✓ I almost eat snacks every hour each day because snacks provide me the sands of happiness and they can relieve my pressure during my working hours.

The phrase 'may the sands of hapiness' is incorrect and unclear. It seems to be a mispronunciation or misuse of words. Correcting to 'provide me the sands of happiness' uses appropriate adjectives and nouns to convey the intended meaning.

× In the perspective of physical healthiness, next might not be a good stuff because there are always possibilities of getting cough after things next.

✓ From the perspective of physical health, snacks might not be good because there is always a possibility of getting a cough after eating snacks.

The phrase 'In the perspective of physical healthiness' is incorrect; 'From the perspective of physical health' is correct. 'Next' is likely a mishearing of 'snacks'. 'Might not be a good stuff' is incorrect; 'might not be good' is correct. 'There are always possibilities' should be 'there is always a possibility' to agree with singular 'possibility'. 'Getting cough' should be 'getting a cough'. 'After things next' should be 'after eating snacks'.

× In the perspective of physical healthiness, next might not be a good stuff because there are always possibilities of getting cough after things next.

✓ From the perspective of physical health, snacks might not be good because there is always a possibility of getting a cough after eating snacks.

The pronoun 'next' is incorrectly used instead of 'snacks'. Also, 'things next' is incorrect; it should be 'eating snacks' to clarify the meaning.

× However, the perspective of man's are helping us.

✓ However, the mental perspective helps us.

'The perspective of man's are helping us' is grammatically incorrect and unclear. It likely intends to say 'the mental perspective helps us' or 'the psychological aspect helps us'. 'Man's' is possessive and does not fit here; 'mental' or 'psychological' is more appropriate.

× I really think it's next benefit because I I really really from my pressure.

✓ I really think it's beneficial because it really helps relieve my pressure.

The sentence is incomplete and contains repeated words 'I I really really'. 'Next benefit' is incorrect; 'beneficial' or 'a benefit' is correct. The phrase 'from my pressure' is incomplete; it should be 'helps relieve my pressure' to convey the intended meaning.

× I really ate snacks during my childhood.

✓ I really ate snacks during my childhood.

This sentence is grammatically correct in past tense and needs no correction.

× My parents did not always pro fight me with this.

✓ My parents did not always prohibit me from this.

'Pro fight me with this' is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'prohibit me from this'. 'Pro fight' is not a correct phrase; 'prohibit' is the correct verb here.

× Next, they always struggle with my health due to my poor immunity.

✓ However, they were always concerned about my health due to my poor immunity.

'Next' is incorrectly used as a transition; 'However' is more appropriate. 'Struggle with my health' is incorrect; 'concerned about my health' is correct. The sentence structure is improved for clarity.

× They always afraid that I will catch from cold after consuming them.

✓ They were always afraid that I would catch a cold after consuming them.

'They always afraid' is missing the verb 'are' or 'were'. 'Catch from cold' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'catch a cold'. The tense is adjusted to past to match context.

× For my favorite snacks they always candy and chocolate do to their highest proportion of carbohydrates such as dodge amount or snacks the high sugar level.

✓ My favorite snacks are always candy and chocolate because of their high proportion of carbohydrates and high sugar levels.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear phrases like 'do to their highest proportion' and 'such as dodge amount or snacks the high sugar level'. Correcting to a clear sentence with proper subject-verb agreement and word order improves understanding.

× For my favorite snacks they always candy and chocolate do to their highest proportion of carbohydrates such as dodge amount or snacks the high sugar level.

✓ My favorite snacks are always candy and chocolate because of their high proportion of carbohydrates and high sugar levels.

'They always candy and chocolate' is incorrect; 'My favorite snacks are always candy and chocolate' is correct. Pronoun usage is corrected to properly refer to the subject.

× Makes me feel relaxed an glad.

✓ They make me feel relaxed and glad.

The original sentence is a fragment missing a subject. Adding 'They' as subject and correcting 'an' to 'and' completes the sentence and corrects adjective usage.