零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答时语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱，建议简化句子，注意时态和主谓一致，避免重复。可以用连接词使表达更连贯。

示例: I usually eat snacks after finishing my classes in the afternoon. I like to eat chocolate and candies because they make me happy and help me continue studying.

建议: 表达不完整且语法错误较多，建议用完整句子表达观点，避免重复，使用连接词使句子更流畅。

示例: Actually, I think eating snacks is not very healthy, but I love sweet things. They make me happy and help me have a nice day.

建议: 回答不完整且有语法错误，建议完整表达原因，注意时态和句子结构，避免重复。

示例: Actually, I didn't often eat snacks when I was young because my parents thought snacks were not very healthy, so they didn't allow me to eat them.

建议: 回答中有词汇错误和语法问题，建议使用准确词汇，句子结构清晰，避免重复，使用连接词使表达更自然。

示例: I like to eat sweets such as chocolate, candy, and ice cream. They are very delicious, and I feel happy after eating them.

× I like to is some chocolate and some candies.

✓ I like to eat some chocolate and some candies.

这里's'用错了，应该用动词原形'eat'，因为前面有动词不定式'to'，后面应该接动词原形。

× But I think it make me happy and I can continue study after when I.

✓ But I think it makes me happy and I can continue studying after that.

主语是单数it，谓语动词应该用第三人称单数形式'makes'；'continue study'应改为'continue studying'，动词后接动名词。

× Actually I think is a not very healthy but I love to eat.

✓ Actually, I think it is not very healthy but I love to eat.

缺少主语'it'，且'a not very healthy'中'a'位置错误，应为'not very healthy'。

× I love too is sweet and sweet things.

✓ I love sweet and sweet things.

'too is'错误，应去掉，保持句子简洁。

× It make me happy and have a. And have a nice day.

✓ It makes me happy and helps me have a nice day.

句子结构不完整，缺少谓语动词，需补充完整表达。

× Actually, I didn't eat, I didn't often eat snacks when I was young 'cause my parents.

✓ Actually, I didn't often eat snacks when I was young because of my parents.

重复使用'didn't eat'冗余，且'cause'应改为完整形式'because'。

× And my parents thought snacks is not very healthy so they don't allow me to eat snacks.

✓ And my parents thought snacks were not very healthy so they didn't allow me to eat snacks.

时态应保持一致，过去时用'were'和'didn't allow'。

× I like to eat some sweets, snacks and such as chocolate, candy, ice cream and so on.

✓ I like to eat some sweets and snacks such as chocolate, candy, ice cream and so on.

'and such as'前不应有逗号，且'sweets, snacks and such as'结构不合理，需调整。

× I also like to eat some biz cute.

✓ I also like to eat some biscuits.

单词拼写错误，'biz cute'应为'biscuits'。

× Is very delicious in an after I eat snacks I feel very happy.

✓ They are very delicious and after I eat snacks, I feel very happy.

句子缺少主语和连词，需补充完整使句子通顺。