零食— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more clear and concise by avoiding repetition and grammatical errors. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and provide specific details about the snacks and times you eat them.

示例: I usually eat snacks in the evening when I have free time. I enjoy having a cup of tea with my family while eating my favourite snacks, such as biscuits or nuts.

建议: Focus on clear pronunciation and correct word choice. Use linking words to explain your opinion logically and provide specific examples of healthy snacks you prefer.

示例: I believe eating too many snacks, especially deep-fried ones, is unhealthy because they can cause obesity. Therefore, I prefer traditional snacks that are cooked without oil, like steamed dumplings.

建议: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Avoid repetition and improve grammar for better clarity.

示例: Yes, I have always enjoyed eating snacks since I was a child. However, I know that eating too many snacks is unhealthy, so recently I have been trying to reduce the amount I eat.

建议: Work on pronunciation and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Provide specific names of snacks and explain why you like them, using linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I enjoy Indian traditional snacks, especially samosas and pakoras. Since childhood, my mother used to prepare these snacks for me, and they always make me happy.

× Whenever I get free time, I like to have snacks with the a cup of tea.

✓ Whenever I get free time, I like to have snacks with a cup of tea.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'a cup of tea'. Since 'a' is an indefinite article, 'the' should be removed to correct the sentence.

× Usually I have a I'm I'm getting three time on evening.

✓ Usually, I have snacks three times in the evening.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. It lacks proper sentence structure and contains repeated words. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the structure.

× I like to spend that time together with my family members with a hurt coffee and some favorite engine snacks.

✓ I like to spend that time together with my family members with a hot coffee and some favorite snacks.

The phrase 'a hurt coffee' is incorrect; it should be 'a hot coffee'. Also, 'engine snacks' seems to be a mishearing or typo; it is corrected to 'snacks'. The preposition 'with' is correctly used here.

× I'm pretty sure that eating too much of snacks is not good for our health.

✓ I'm pretty sure that eating too many snacks is not good for our health.

'Snacks' is a countable noun, so 'too many' should be used instead of 'too much' which is for uncountable nouns.

× And deep fries nexar may mostly the reason for over fat and obesity like that.

✓ And deep-fried snacks may mostly be the reason for overweight and obesity.

'Deep fries nexar' is corrected to 'deep-fried snacks'. 'Over fat' is incorrect; the correct term is 'overweight'. The sentence structure is also improved for clarity.

× That's why I like to prefer snacks without oil.

✓ That's why I prefer snacks without oil.

The phrase 'like to prefer' is redundant. 'Prefer' alone suffices. The preposition 'without' is correctly used.

× There is some traditional careless stacks which cook cooking.

✓ There are some traditional snacks which are cooked traditionally.

The original sentence is unclear and contains errors. 'Careless stacks' is likely a mishearing of 'careless snacks' or 'traditional snacks'. The verb form is corrected to passive voice to indicate how the snacks are prepared.

× Even from my childhood's.

✓ Even from my childhood.

'Childhood's' is possessive and incorrect here. The correct phrase is 'from my childhood' without the possessive form.

× It's my habit of having lot of snacks.

✓ It's my habit of having a lot of snacks.

The quantifier 'lot' requires the article 'a' before it when used in this context.

× But I am aware of that are eating too much of snacks is good, not good for our health.

✓ But I am aware that eating too many snacks is not good for our health.

The phrase 'aware of that are eating' is incorrect. It should be 'aware that eating'. Also, 'too much of snacks' should be 'too many snacks' because 'snacks' is countable.

× But I can stop this habit.

✓ But I cannot stop this habit.

Based on context, the student means they are unable to stop the habit, so 'cannot' is appropriate instead of 'can'.

× But uh, nowadays I reduce the amount of snacks I'm eating regularly.

✓ But nowadays, I have reduced the amount of snacks I eat regularly.

The phrase 'reduce the amount of snacks I'm eating' is awkward. 'Have reduced' fits better to indicate a recent change. Also, 'amount' is better replaced with 'number' for countable nouns like 'snacks' but 'amount' is acceptable in casual speech.

× Mostly I like to eat Indian traditional style snacks, especially care, love and cook.

✓ Mostly, I like to eat Indian traditional-style snacks, especially 'khari', 'ladoo', and 'kook'.

The phrase 'care, love and cook' seems to be misheard or misspelled names of snacks. Corrected to likely intended snack names. Also, 'traditional style' should be hyphenated as 'traditional-style' when used as an adjective.

× Bye bye mother.

✓ By my mother.

'Bye bye mother' is incorrect and unclear. Likely intended 'by my mother' to indicate who cooks the snacks.

× Even from my childhood, I have a great attraction towards the snacks cook bye bye mom.

✓ Even from my childhood, I have had a great attraction towards the snacks cooked by my mom.

Corrected 'cook bye bye mom' to 'cooked by my mom' to properly use the past participle and preposition.

× Whenever I go to my home turn my mother cooked at one especially for me.

✓ Whenever I go home, my mother cooks one especially for me.

Corrected sentence structure and verb tense for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It will make me happy but I can avoid that snacks but even.

✓ It makes me happy, but I cannot avoid those snacks even now.

Corrected sentence structure, verb tense, and pronoun usage for clarity and correctness.