天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more concise and avoid repeating the same idea. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say: "The weather in Qatar is very hot and humid because it is located near the equator and mostly desert. Moreover, since it is summer, the temperature is even higher."

示例: The weather in Qatar is very hot and humid because it is located near the equator and mostly desert. Moreover, since it is summer, the temperature is even higher.

建议: Your answer is good but try to organize it better by using linking words and avoid informal phrases like "at first". For example, start with your preference, then explain reasons clearly and logically.

示例: I prefer cold weather because I tend to sweat a lot and get irritable when it's hot. However, hot weather has its benefits too, such as helping me sweat more during workouts, which is good for my health.

建议: Try to use correct expressions and avoid vague phrases. Instead of "I prepare dry weathers," say "I prefer dry weather." Also, provide clearer reasons and use linking words to connect ideas.

示例: I prefer dry weather because it allows me to enjoy outdoor activities like basketball and tennis without any interruptions from rain.

建议: Avoid repeating the same idea and improve sentence structure. Be clear and concise. For example, say: "I don't usually check the weather forecast because I'm not very interested in it."

示例: I don't usually check the weather forecast because I'm not very interested in it.

建议: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and provide specific effects of climate change. For example, mention rising temperatures and difficulties people face.

示例: Climate change has caused temperatures to rise significantly, making life harder for many people. I believe we should organize activities to raise awareness and help improve the environment.

建议: Avoid repeating phrases and contradictory statements. Be clear about your preference and reasons. For example, say: "Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates to explore new environments."

示例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates to explore new environments and experience different cultures.

× The weather here is super hot and super humid because the weather here in Qatar is in the middle of the equator and it is mostly desert.

✓ The weather here is super hot and super humid because Qatar is near the equator and it is mostly desert.

The phrase 'in the middle of the equator' is incorrect. We say 'near the equator' or 'close to the equator' to indicate location. Also, repeating 'the weather here' is redundant. Simplifying improves clarity.

× I prepare dry weathers because I can go out and do all the things that I want outdoors, like the sports that I'm doing like basketball, tennis and all those other teams.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I can go out and do all the things that I want outdoors, like sports such as basketball, tennis, and other team games.

The word 'prepare' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'prefer'. Also, 'dry weathers' is incorrect; 'weather' is uncountable and should not be pluralized. The phrase 'like the sports that I'm doing like' is redundant and awkward; it is better to say 'like sports such as'.

× Checking the weather forecast is not really my thing, so I don't usually check the weather forecast because it's not really the things I'm interested in and I want to check like I don't check it often.

✓ Checking the weather forecast is not really my thing, so I don't usually check it because it's not something I'm interested in and I don't check it often.

The phrase 'it's not really the things I'm interested in' is incorrect; 'things' should be singular 'something' to match the singular subject. Also, 'I want to check like I don't check it often' is confusing and redundant; simplifying to 'I don't check it often' improves clarity.

× It's been so horrible because it's been so hot and all those people are having a hard time because of this weather, and I prefer to have a culmination activity where the environment should improve their climate change.

✓ It's been horrible because it's been so hot and many people are having a hard time because of this weather, and I hope for a collective effort to improve the environment and address climate change.

The phrase 'so horrible' is acceptable but 'so hot' is repetitive; 'horrible' alone suffices. 'All those people' is better expressed as 'many people'. The phrase 'culmination activity' is unclear and incorrect; 'collective effort' or 'initiative' is more appropriate. Also, 'the environment should improve their climate change' is incorrect; climate change is a global issue, and people should work to improve the environment to combat it.

× Absolutely. But for sure it is the same weather as the cities I'm living in right now. However, I would like to get a chance to go go there because I would like to explore. I would like to explore.

✓ Absolutely. But for sure, it will be different weather from the cities I live in right now. However, I would like to get a chance to go there because I would like to explore.

The phrase 'it is the same weather as the cities I'm living in' is incorrect; it should be 'it will be different weather from the cities I live in' to express contrast and future possibility. Also, 'go go there' is a repetition error. Repeating 'I would like to explore' twice is redundant.