天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally good but avoid redundancy and minor errors. For example, the phrase 'You live.' at the start is unnecessary and confusing. Also, try to use linking words like 'Moreover' or 'Furthermore' to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: The weather where I live is generally mild and pleasant. Summers are warm but not too hot, which makes outdoor activities enjoyable. Moreover, we have moderate rainfall throughout the year, keeping the environment green and fresh.

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas logically. Also, be more specific about why cold weather is preferable.

示例: I prefer cold weather because it is more comfortable for travelling. Hot weather causes sweating and strong UV rays, which make travelling unpleasant. Therefore, cold weather allows me to roam freely and enjoy my trips.

建议: Avoid filler words like 'umm' and improve grammar, for example, 'I don't like getting wet'. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to make your answer coherent. Also, try to be concise and avoid repetition.

示例: I prefer dry weather because I feel uncomfortable when I get wet in the rain. Moreover, as a university student, dry weather helps me attend my classes without any inconvenience.

建议: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence flow by using linking words like 'because' and 'so that'. Also, correct minor errors such as 'forec forecast' and 'carry my umbrella easy' to 'carry my umbrella easily'.

示例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day because I commute from my house to university by private vehicle. This helps me prepare accordingly; for example, I carry an umbrella if it's raining or sunscreen if it's sunny.

建议: Avoid phrases like 'according to me' which are unnecessary. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'therefore' to connect ideas. Also, be more specific about the effects of climate change rather than just causes.

示例: Climate change in recent years is mainly caused by excessive use of vehicles and industrialization. These lead to air and noise pollution, which harm the environment and contribute to global warming.

建议: Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to make your answer clearer. Also, correct grammar mistakes such as 'these kind' to 'these kinds' or 'such places'.

示例: Yes, I would love to visit cities or countries with different climates because I want to experience various types of weather. For example, if I get a chance to visit a country with a different climate, I will definitely take it.

× You live.

✓ Where I live.

The sentence 'You live.' is incomplete and does not answer the question. The student likely intended to say 'The weather where I live is generally quite mild and pleasant.' The phrase 'You live.' is irrelevant and should be removed or corrected to 'Where I live.' to make sense in context.

× I don't like to getting wet in rain or in any kind of season because umm I just feel very uncomfortable at that time.

✓ I don't like getting wet in the rain or in any kind of season because I just feel very uncomfortable at that time.

The phrase 'I don't like to getting wet' is incorrect because 'like' can be followed by either the infinitive ('to get') or the gerund ('getting'), but not both together. The correct form is 'I don't like getting wet'. Also, 'in rain' should be 'in the rain' to use the definite article properly.

× I prefer dry weather because I don't like to getting wet in rain or in any kind of season because umm I just feel very uncomfortable at that time.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I don't like getting wet in the rain or in any kind of season because I just feel very uncomfortable at that time.

The noun 'rain' here requires the definite article 'the' when referring to rain in general. So, 'in rain' should be corrected to 'in the rain'.

× ...because I'm a academic student so I have to attend my university every day and my classes are really important for me so that why I prefer dry weather.

✓ ...because I'm an academic student so I have to attend my university every day and my classes are really important for me so that's why I prefer dry weather.

The article 'a' should be 'an' before a word starting with a vowel sound like 'academic'. Also, 'so that why' is incorrect; it should be 'so that's why'.

× Yes I prefer to check weather forec forecast each and every day because as I have to commute every day from my house to my university so as also I have to travel from private vehicle.

✓ Yes, I prefer to check the weather forecast every day because I have to commute daily from my house to my university, and I also travel by private vehicle.

The original sentence is awkward and contains redundancy and incorrect phrasing. 'Weather forec forecast' is a typo and should be 'weather forecast'. The phrase 'so as also I have to travel from private vehicle' is incorrect; it should be 'and I also travel by private vehicle'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correctness.

× So it is better for me if I check the weather before getting out so that if it's raining then I can carry my umbrella easy and if it's sunny then I can come carry my sunscreen.

✓ So it is better for me if I check the weather before going out so that if it's raining, I can carry my umbrella easily, and if it's sunny, I can carry my sunscreen.

The phrase 'before getting out' is better expressed as 'before going out'. 'Carry my umbrella easy' should be 'carry my umbrella easily' because 'easily' is the adverb modifying 'carry'. Also, 'I can come carry my sunscreen' is incorrect; 'come' should be removed.

× Well, according to me, the climate change in recent years is caused by excessive use of vehicles and also the establishment of industrialization in each and every area as lot of vehicles are running on roads nowadays which cause air pollution, noise pollution and many more things.

✓ Well, according to me, climate change in recent years has been caused by the excessive use of vehicles and the establishment of industrialization in every area, as a lot of vehicles are running on roads nowadays, which causes air pollution, noise pollution, and many other problems.

The phrase 'the climate change' should be 'climate change' without 'the'. 'Is caused' should be 'has been caused' to reflect recent years. 'Lot of vehicles' should be 'a lot of vehicles'. 'Cause' should be 'causes' to agree with singular 'a lot of vehicles'. 'Many more things' is vague; 'many other problems' is clearer.

× Yes, I love to visit these kind.

✓ Yes, I love to visit these kinds of places.

The phrase 'these kind' is incorrect; it should be 'these kinds' or 'this kind'. Also, 'these kinds' should be followed by a noun like 'places' or 'cities' to complete the phrase.

× I would love to visit these kind of cities or countries because I really want to experience different kind of weathers in my life.

✓ I would love to visit these kinds of cities or countries because I really want to experience different kinds of weather in my life.

'These kind' should be 'these kinds' because 'cities or countries' is plural. 'Different kind of weathers' should be 'different kinds of weather' because 'weather' is uncountable and 'kinds' should be plural to match 'different'.

× Like to exemplify, if I get a chance to visit any kind of different country with weather different, I will definitely going to grab it.

✓ For example, if I get a chance to visit any kind of different country with different weather, I will definitely grab it.

'Like to exemplify' is awkward; 'For example' is better. 'With weather different' should be 'with different weather'. 'I will definitely going to grab it' is incorrect; it should be 'I will definitely grab it' or 'I am definitely going to grab it' but not both 'will' and 'going to' together.