天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Жауабыңызда грамматикалық қателер бар және сөйлемдер табиғи емес. Мысалы, "convenient with conditions" деген тіркес дұрыс емес. Сұраққа нақты және қысқа жауап беріп, қосымша мәліметтерді байланыстыру үшін логикалық сөздерді қолданыңыз.

示例: The weather in my country is generally pleasant with many sunny days. However, we occasionally experience strong winds and thunderstorms, but these are rare.

建议: Жауабыңыз ұзақ және кейбір сөйлемдер қайталанады. Сөйлемдерді қысқартып, нақты және табиғи етіп айтыңыз. Қосымша ақпаратты байланыстыру үшін "because" сияқты сөздерді қолданыңыз.

示例: I prefer hot weather because it allows me to stay outdoors longer without worrying about being cold or what to wear.

建议: Жауабыңызда қайталау және грамматикалық қателер бар. "get get watered" деген тіркес дұрыс емес. Сөйлемдерді қысқартып, нақты және табиғи етіп айтыңыз. Қосымша ақпаратты байланыстыру үшін "because" және "for example" сияқты сөздерді қолданыңыз.

示例: I prefer dry weather because wet weather makes me uncomfortable; for example, my clothes often get soaked, which is unpleasant.

建议: Жауабыңыз жақсы, бірақ кейбір сөйлемдер ұзақ және қайталанады. Сөйлемдерді қысқартып, табиғи етіп айтыңыз. Қосымша ақпаратты байланыстыру үшін "because" және "so" сияқты сөздерді қолданыңыз.

示例: Yes, I always check the weather forecast before going to bed because I need to decide what clothes to wear the next day.

建议: Жауабыңызда грамматикалық қателер бар және сөйлемдер түсініксіз. Мысалы, "it's higher is temperature higher" деген тіркес дұрыс емес. Сөйлемдерді қысқартып, нақты және табиғи етіп айтыңыз. Қосымша ақпаратты байланыстыру үшін "for example" және "because" сияқты сөздерді қолданыңыз.

示例: I think climate change has made summers hotter than before, making it harder to enjoy outdoor activities during holidays.

建议: Жауабыңызда кейбір сөздердің қолданылуы дұрыс емес, мысалы, "Atlantic" деген ел емес. Сөйлемдерді қысқартып, нақты және табиғи етіп айтыңыз. Қосымша ақпаратты байланыстыру үшін "because" және "for example" сияқты сөздерді қолданыңыз.

示例: Yes, I would like to visit countries like the USA and South Korea because they have different climates, and I want to experience those differences.

× Actually, my country has really good and convenient with conditions and we also have sunny days really often.

✓ Actually, my country has really good and convenient conditions and we also have sunny days quite often.

The phrase 'convenient with conditions' is incorrect; 'convenient conditions' is the correct adjective-noun combination. Also, 'really often' is better expressed as 'quite often' to sound more natural.

× And of course sometimes we have some bad winds and thunderstorms, but it's not a usual thing.

✓ And of course, sometimes we have strong winds and thunderstorms, but it's not a usual thing.

The quantifier 'some' is unnecessary here; 'strong winds' is a more appropriate collocation than 'bad winds'.

× because you can stay as long as you can at in outdoors and it's great.

✓ because you can stay as long as you can outdoors and it's great.

The phrase 'at in outdoors' is incorrect; the correct preposition is omitted here, so 'outdoors' alone suffices.

× I personally prefer dry weather over a wet weather because I think that it's better than wet weather.

✓ I personally prefer dry weather over wet weather because I think that it's better than wet weather.

The article 'a' before 'wet weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is an uncountable noun and does not require an article here.

× In wet weather, you live in uncomfortable conditions and all of your clothes get get watered and you'll be too.

✓ In wet weather, you live in uncomfortable conditions and all of your clothes get wet and so will you.

The phrase 'get watered' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'get wet'. Also, 'you'll be too' is awkward; 'so will you' is clearer.

× So I always check what's the weather will be tomorrow and how to dress properly for this kind of weather.

✓ So I always check what the weather will be tomorrow and how to dress properly for this kind of weather.

The word order in 'what's the weather will be' is incorrect; it should be 'what the weather will be'.

× I think one of the most noticeable change in our climate change is that summers got hotter and it's higher is temperature higher than it used to be, and it's more difficult to go outdoors in summers and enjoy your holidays.

✓ I think one of the most noticeable changes in our climate is that summers have gotten hotter and the temperature is higher than it used to be, making it more difficult to go outdoors in summer and enjoy your holidays.

'Change' should be plural 'changes' to agree with 'one of the most noticeable'. 'Climate change' is repeated unnecessarily. 'Summers got hotter' should be 'summers have gotten hotter' for present perfect tense. 'It's higher is temperature higher' is incorrect; corrected to 'the temperature is higher'. 'In summers' is better as 'in summer'.

× Yes, I really would like to visit such countries like Atlantic, USA and the Korea because all of these three countries have different climates than in my country.

✓ Yes, I really would like to visit countries like Atlanta, USA and Korea because all of these three countries have different climates than my country.

'Such countries like' is redundant; 'countries like' is sufficient. 'Atlantic' is likely a mistake for 'Atlanta'. 'The Korea' is incorrect; 'Korea' does not take an article. 'Different climates than in my country' should be 'different climates than my country'.