天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer provides relevant information but is somewhat disorganized and incomplete. Try to give a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add specific details using linking words to improve coherence. Avoid incomplete sentences and redundancy.

示例: I live in Tehran, Iran, where the weather is continental. We experience all four seasons, with hot summers and cold, snowy winters. The climate varies depending on the city, but Tehran is generally temperate throughout the year.

建议: Your answer is creative but a bit unclear and informal. Use clearer expressions and avoid slang or inappropriate phrases. Start with a direct answer, then explain your preference with logical reasons and linking words.

示例: I prefer cold weather over hot weather because I can wear warm clothes like gloves to stay comfortable. However, I generally prefer moderate temperatures since extreme heat or cold can be uncomfortable for me.

建议: Your answer is clear and provides specific reasons, which is good. To improve, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and correct minor grammar mistakes. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary.

示例: I definitely prefer wet weather because it helps my skin stay moisturized; in dry weather, my skin becomes itchy and cracked. Additionally, I enjoy the soothing sound of rain and the sight of cloudy skies.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Make sure to finish your sentences and organize your ideas logically. Start with a clear topic sentence, then explain when and why you check the weather forecast, using linking words for coherence.

示例: Yes, I have been checking the weather forecast regularly since my college days. I used to check it daily to decide whether to wear warm or light clothes. Nowadays, I still check it often to choose appropriate outfits for my business meetings.

建议: Your answer shows understanding but is unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Avoid informal phrases and incomplete thoughts. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples using linking words.

示例: Climate change has had significant effects in recent years. For example, it has caused the melting of polar ice caps and disrupted animal ecosystems. Additionally, it may lead to more frequent droughts in some regions.

建议: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more structured. Start with a direct response, then explain your reasons with linking words. Avoid vague phrases like 'the other things' and be more specific.

示例: I would prefer not to visit cities with very different climates because I like to stay in comfortable, room-temperature conditions. However, if I had to, I would choose cloudy, humid, and temperate cities where I can enjoy full cloud cover and mild weather.

× Indeed, the country I live, which is Iran, has a continental weather.

✓ Indeed, the country I live in, which is Iran, has continental weather.

The phrase 'the country I live' is missing the preposition 'in' to correctly indicate location. Also, 'continental weather' does not need the article 'a' because 'weather' is an uncountable noun here. The correct order is 'the country I live in' and 'continental weather' without 'a'.

× We experience all Four Seasons and it depends on where city you live.

✓ We experience all four seasons and it depends on which city you live in.

The phrase 'where city you live' is incorrect. It should be 'which city you live in' to correctly refer to the city. Also, 'Four Seasons' should not be capitalized unless referring to a proper noun. The preposition 'in' is necessary after 'live' to indicate location.

× The province I live in, which is Tehran, used to be a very temperate city with hot summers and cold winters, snowy and rainy weather.

✓ The province I live in, which is Tehran, used to be a very temperate city with hot summers, cold winters, snowy and rainy weather.

The sentence is mostly correct but needs commas to separate the list of weather conditions for clarity. Also, 'province' and 'city' are mixed; Tehran is a city, not a province, but this may be a factual issue rather than grammatical.

× But.

✓ But.

The sentence 'But.' is incomplete and lacks a main clause. It should be connected to the previous or following sentence to form a complete thought.

× I prefer none of them because I'm like the cold blooded animals and I should be on the room temperatures conditions so I always avoid hot or cold weather.

✓ I prefer neither of them because I'm like a cold-blooded animal and I should be in room temperature conditions, so I always avoid hot or cold weather.

'None of them' is better replaced with 'neither of them' when referring to two options. 'Cold blooded animals' should be singular 'a cold-blooded animal' to match the comparison. 'On the room temperatures conditions' is incorrect; it should be 'in room temperature conditions'.

× But I prefer cold weather because I can put on my clothes and gloves.

✓ But I prefer cold weather because I can put on my clothes and gloves.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no correction needed.

× But in hot weather you cannot RIP off your skin.

✓ But in hot weather, you cannot rip off your skin.

The word 'RIP' should be lowercase 'rip' as it is not a proper noun. Also, a comma after 'hot weather' improves readability.

× Absolutely, I prefer the wet weather.

✓ Absolutely, I prefer wet weather.

'Weather' is an uncountable noun and generally does not take the definite article 'the' unless referring to specific weather previously mentioned.

× First reason is my skin condition because in the hot weather my skin got very itchy and very cracky.

✓ The first reason is my skin condition because in hot weather my skin gets very itchy and very cracked.

'First reason' should be 'The first reason' to specify. 'In the hot weather' should be 'in hot weather' as a general condition. 'Got' should be present tense 'gets' to match the habitual condition. 'Cracky' is not a correct adjective; 'cracked' is appropriate.

× Another reason is that I really prefer the sound of drizzles and rains and I really love the cloud covers.

✓ Another reason is that I really prefer the sound of drizzle and rain, and I really love cloud cover.

'Drizzles' and 'rains' are uncountable in this context and should be singular 'drizzle' and 'rain'. 'Cloud covers' should be 'cloud cover' as it is an uncountable noun. Commas improve sentence clarity.

× Yes, I am it goes back to my college days I used to check the weather every day because I wanted to know if I should warm clothes or light clothes But nowadays it's more important for me to choose the right dress and for my business meetings because if I choose a bad one, it.

✓ Yes, I am. It goes back to my college days. I used to check the weather every day because I wanted to know if I should wear warm clothes or light clothes. But nowadays, it's more important for me to choose the right dress for my business meetings because if I choose a bad one, it affects me.

The original sentence is a run-on and lacks punctuation. 'I should warm clothes' is missing the verb 'wear'. The sentence ends abruptly and needs completion. Breaking into multiple sentences improves clarity.

× It's kind of a sophisticated question, and I should put that man together, but it's obvious that the climate change significantly affected the environmental conditions like melting the ice caps in the polar, the ecosystem of animals.

✓ It's kind of a sophisticated question, and I should put that matter together, but it's obvious that climate change has significantly affected environmental conditions like melting the ice caps in the polar regions and the animal ecosystem.

'Put that man together' is incorrect; likely meant 'put that matter together'. 'The climate change' should be 'climate change' without 'the'. 'In the polar' should be 'in the polar regions'. 'The ecosystem of animals' is better as 'the animal ecosystem'.

× Maybe it should cause a drought.

✓ Maybe it will cause a drought.

'Should' is not appropriate here to express possibility; 'will' or 'may' is better. 'Maybe it will cause a drought' expresses future possibility more clearly.

× No, I don't like it because as I told you, I prefer to stay at room temperature.

✓ No, I don't like it because, as I told you, I prefer to stay at room temperature.

A comma after 'because' improves readability. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× But if I should, I prefer to go to cloudy and humid and temperate cities which I can experience a full cloud cover spectrum and the other things.

✓ But if I should, I prefer to go to cloudy, humid, and temperate cities where I can experience a full cloud cover spectrum and other things.

Use commas to separate adjectives in a list. 'Which' should be 'where' to refer to cities. 'The other things' should be 'other things' without 'the'.