天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer needs to be more natural and clear. Avoid awkward phrases like 'we feel melts like butter' and use correct tense and word order. Also, try to give a direct answer first, then add details logically using linking words.

示例: These days, the weather in Iran is very hot because it is summer. In fact, I heard on the news yesterday that Iran is experiencing one of the highest temperatures in the world.

建议: Try to use correct grammar and sentence structure. Use linking words like 'because' properly and be specific about why you like cold weather. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

示例: I prefer cold weather, especially in autumn or spring, because there are many rainy days and you can enjoy the cool breezes.

建议: Your answer is unclear and has grammar mistakes. Avoid repeating words like 'actually' and be specific about why wet weather makes you happy. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

示例: I prefer wet weather because it lifts my mood. For example, I enjoy dancing and singing with my close friends when it rains.

建议: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and speak more fluently. Use correct pronouns and sentence structure. Give a clear and direct answer with supporting details using linking words.

示例: On weekdays, I always check the weather forecast in the morning before going to university because I want to know what clothes to wear.

建议: Your answer needs clearer structure and grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and be specific about effects of climate change. Avoid vague phrases like 'because of the driving' without explanation.

示例: In recent years, climate change has caused the planet to become warmer. As a result, many animals are losing their habitats and struggling to survive.

建议: Improve grammar and word choice. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly. Avoid awkward phrases like 'enjoyed in journaling' and be specific about your interests.

示例: Yes, of course. I enjoy traveling and visiting different cities, especially those with different climates. It is exciting to explore new places both in my country and abroad.

× These days, because of summer or season, we feel melts like butter in Iran.

✓ These days, because of the summer season, we feel like melting butter in Iran.

The phrase 'we feel melts like butter' is incorrect. 'Feel' should be followed by an adjective or a verb in the -ing form. Also, 'summer or season' is unclear; it should be 'the summer season'. The correct expression is 'we feel like melting butter', meaning very hot.

× Actually, last day international news says that we are the most hot.

✓ Actually, yesterday's international news said that we are the hottest.

'Last day' should be 'yesterday's' to indicate the previous day. 'International news' needs a possessive form here. 'The most hot' is incorrect; the superlative form is 'the hottest'. Also, tense consistency requires 'said' instead of 'says'.

× I like cold weather, for example autumn season or spring season because it's have many rainy day and you can feel breezes.

✓ I like cold weather, for example, the autumn or spring seasons because they have many rainy days and you can feel breezes.

'Autumn season or spring season' should be 'the autumn or spring seasons' to be plural and definite. 'It's have' is incorrect; it should be 'they have' to agree with plural subject. 'Many rainy day' should be 'many rainy days'.

× I'd like a wet weather because it makes me happy and interested.

✓ I'd like wet weather because it makes me happy and interested.

'Weather' is an uncountable noun and does not take the indefinite article 'a'. Therefore, 'a wet weather' is incorrect; it should be 'wet weather'.

× Actually I can dance, sing and singing with my friends, actually my close friends under.

✓ Actually, I can dance and sing with my friends, especially my close friends.

Mixing 'sing' and 'singing' in the same list is incorrect; use parallel forms 'dance and sing'. The phrase 'actually my close friends under' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'especially my close friends' is clearer.

× At weekdays, uh, because of my university, when I, uh, get up, I always check the weather, uh, because I want to know that, uh, what I should wear for her.

✓ On weekdays, because of my university, when I get up, I always check the weather because I want to know what I should wear.

'At weekdays' should be 'On weekdays'. The phrase 'what I should wear for her' is incorrect; it should be 'what I should wear'. The pronoun 'her' is unnecessary and confusing here.

× In general, as the news said that our planets going warmer, so in my opinion in the later years many animals can't live on the planet because of the weather, because of the driving.

✓ In general, as the news said, our planet is getting warmer, so in my opinion, in recent years many animals can't live on the planet because of the weather changes caused by global warming.

'Our planets going warmer' is incorrect; it should be 'our planet is getting warmer'. 'Later years' should be 'recent years'. 'Because of the driving' is unclear; likely intended to mean 'because of global warming' or 'climate change'.

× Yes, of course. To be honest I enjoyed in journaling for instance, going to another cities and actually go abroad and visit many places.

✓ Yes, of course. To be honest, I enjoy traveling, for instance, going to other cities and actually going abroad to visit many places.

'Enjoyed in journaling' is incorrect; 'enjoy' is followed by a gerund without 'in'. 'Another cities' should be 'other cities' (plural). 'Actually go abroad' should be 'actually going abroad' to maintain parallel structure.