天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，数字表达混乱，建议简化句子结构，准确表达天气状况，避免重复和无意义的数字。

示例: It's sunny and very hot today because it's summer. The temperature is around 33 degrees Celsius, which makes it uncomfortable to go outside.

建议: 回答中有语法错误和词汇使用不当，如'hot pool'应为'hot pot'，建议使用连贯的句子表达喜好，并具体说明原因。

示例: I prefer cold weather because in winter I can enjoy eating hot pot, especially Sichuan hot pot, which makes me feel happy and warm.

建议: 回答较为清晰，但存在语法错误，如'relax'应为'relaxed'，建议使用连接词使表达更连贯，并注意时态和词形变化。

示例: I prefer dry weather because I can go swimming, and after swimming, I feel very relaxed. Moreover, I drink a lot of water during hot weather.

建议: 回答基本完整，但句子结构可以更自然，建议调整语序，避免重复，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

示例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast almost every day before going out because I want to know what clothes to wear and whether I should bring an umbrella.

建议: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如'horizon'应为'sea level'，建议使用准确词汇并具体说明气候变化的影响。

示例: In recent years, the Earth has become warmer, and I think climate change will cause sea levels to rise, leading to many environmental problems.

建议: 回答表达不够自然，存在语法错误和词汇使用不当，如'snow mound'应为'snowman'，建议使用连贯句子表达愿望并具体说明原因。

示例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For example, I want to go to Harbin to see the snow and build a snowman, which is very different from the weather in Shenzhen.

× It is sunny today and now in summer it is very hot and I can barely the temperature.

✓ It is sunny today and now in summer it is very hot and I can barely bear the temperature.

句中缺少动词bear，导致句子不完整。应使用动词的原形或适当形式来表达“我几乎无法忍受温度”。

× It almost 1313 almost at 13 and it was too hot for me to come to go out of my home.

✓ It is almost 13 degrees and it was too hot for me to go out of my home.

数字“1313”应为“13”，且“come to go out”结构错误，应简化为“go out”。

× I prefer cold weather for the reason that in winter I can go out to eat the hot pool such as the Sichuan hot pole, which made me feel happy and the Sichuan hot pot is very delicious when I eat the hot pot.

✓ I prefer cold weather because in winter I can go out to eat hot pot such as Sichuan hot pot, which makes me feel happy and the Sichuan hot pot is very delicious when I eat it.

“for the reason that”表达不自然，改为“because”；“hot pool”应为“hot pot”；“Sichuan hot pole”拼写错误，应为“Sichuan hot pot”；“which made me feel happy”时态不一致，应为“makes”；“when I eat the hot pot”重复，改为“when I eat it”。

× I prefer the dry weather because I can go swimming at that time and after swimming I will feel very relax.

✓ I prefer dry weather because I can go swimming at that time and after swimming I will feel very relaxed.

“relax”是动词，形容词应为“relaxed”来描述感受。

× What's more, I will drink many water during the hot weather.

✓ What's more, I will drink a lot of water during the hot weather.

“water”是不可数名词，不能用“many”，应使用“a lot of”来修饰不可数名词。

× I will check it for the reason that I want to know what clothes should I wear and should I bring the umbrella today.

✓ I will check it because I want to know what clothes I should wear and whether I should bring an umbrella today.

宾语从句中疑问词顺序错误，应为陈述语序；“the umbrella”应为“an umbrella”，冠词使用错误。

× In recent years, the earth become warmer and warmer, and I think the climate change will make the horizon, will rise the horizon and cause many problems in the Earth.

✓ In recent years, the earth has become warmer and warmer, and I think climate change will raise the horizon and cause many problems on Earth.

“become”应使用现在完成时“has become”；“the climate change”中“climate change”前不加冠词；“will make the horizon, will rise the horizon”重复且表达不清，改为“will raise the horizon”；“in the Earth”应为“on Earth”。

× Yes, I would. You know, in Shenzhen there is always hot or very cold.

✓ Yes, I would. You know, in Shenzhen it is always hot or very cold.

“there is”用于存在句，但描述天气应使用“it is”；“there is always hot or very cold”结构错误。

× I would like to visit the city such as Harbin to build snow mound and see the snow.

✓ I would like to visit a city such as Harbin to build snow mounds and see the snow.

“the city”改为不定冠词“a city”更合适；“snow mound”应为复数“snow mounds”，表示多个雪堆。