天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it can be improved by avoiding redundancy and making the response more concise. For example, instead of repeating 'humid' twice, you can combine the ideas. Also, try to use linking words to make the answer flow better.

示例: I live in Mumbai, India, which is a coastal city, so the weather is mostly humid. We experience hot and humid summers as well as monsoons, but the winters are quite pleasant and comfortable.

建议: Your answer is a bit confusing and lacks clarity. Avoid contradictory statements like 'prefer cold or hot weather anyway'. Also, try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Avoid unnecessary phrases like 'lots of flavors of sunscreen'.

示例: I prefer cold weather because you can layer up and comfortably enjoy outdoor activities. In contrast, hot weather often forces you to stay indoors or take extra precautions like applying sunscreen to protect yourself from the sun.

建议: Your answer has grammatical errors and unclear phrasing which affect clarity. Try to use correct sentence structures and avoid repetition. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: From my experience, I prefer wet weather during hot summers because it cools the sun's harsh rays. However, in winter, I enjoy dry weather as it feels more comfortable and pleasant.

建议: Your answer is relevant and detailed, but it can be improved by breaking it into shorter sentences and using linking words for better coherence. Also, avoid redundancy like 'only then do I check' and 'if the rains are bad or if there is any sort of alert' which can be combined.

示例: I don't check the weather forecast regularly. However, during Mumbai's heavy monsoon season, I check it before leaving home or office to avoid travel delays, especially since I use public transport which can get stuck in the rain.

建议: Your answer addresses the question but has grammatical mistakes and lacks coherence. Avoid repetition like 'more hotter' and 'hotter and hotter'. Also, use linking words to connect your points logically and provide a clearer conclusion.

示例: In recent years, climate change has caused summers to become hotter gradually. For instance, this year the monsoon arrived a month earlier than usual, which indicates the effects of global warming.

建议: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to make it more coherent. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'decent for me to step out' and try to be more specific.

示例: I enjoy visiting cities with colder climates than Mumbai because I prefer cooler weather. However, I don't like extremely cold places; I prefer moderate temperatures that are comfortable for outdoor activities.

× I would prefer cold weather or hot weather anyway because during the cold weather you can still layer up and go outside and enjoy, but then during the hot weather you have no other option but to stay indoors or protect yourself from the sun using lots of flavors of sunscreen.

✓ I would prefer cold weather or hot weather anyway because during the cold weather you can still layer up and go outside and enjoy, but then during the hot weather you have no other option but to stay indoors or protect yourself from the sun using lots of flavours of sunscreen.

The word 'flavors' is the American English spelling. Since the context is India, the British English spelling 'flavours' is more appropriate. This is a spelling convention rather than a grammar error, but it is important for regional correctness.

× Is I've experienced a lot of beathers and from experience what I know is during the summers, that is during the weather is hot, I would prefer it to be wet so that the sun rays do not feel like they're attacking on my skin.

✓ I have experienced a lot of weathers and from experience what I know is during the summers, that is when the weather is hot, I would prefer it to be wet so that the sun rays do not feel like they're attacking my skin.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'Is I've' is incorrect; it should be 'I have'. 'Beathers' is a misspelling of 'weathers'. The phrase 'during the weather is hot' is ungrammatical; it should be 'when the weather is hot'. Also, 'attacking on my skin' is incorrect; 'attacking my skin' is correct. These corrections improve clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I have experienced a lot of weathers and from experience what I know is during the summers, that is when the weather is hot, I would prefer it to be wet so that the sun rays do not feel like they're attacking on my skin.

✓ I have experienced a lot of weathers and from experience what I know is during the summers, that is when the weather is hot, I would prefer it to be wet so that the sun rays do not feel like they're attacking my skin.

The preposition 'on' after 'attacking' is unnecessary and incorrect. The verb 'attack' is transitive and does not require a preposition before the object. Removing 'on' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× There are a lot of effects of climate change in the recent years and from what we can see is that the summers are more hotter and it's getting hotter and hotter by the day.

✓ There are a lot of effects of climate change in recent years and from what we can see is that the summers are hotter and it's getting hotter and hotter by the day.

The phrase 'more hotter' is incorrect because 'hotter' is already the comparative form of 'hot'. Using 'more' with a comparative adjective is redundant. The correct form is simply 'hotter'.

× And this year we also saw monsoon arrive a month earlier than what U it usually does.

✓ And this year we also saw monsoon arrive a month earlier than it usually does.

The phrase 'than what U it usually does' contains an unnecessary and incorrect pronoun 'U' and redundant 'what'. The correct comparative structure is 'earlier than it usually does'.