天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Your answer is generally relevant but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your response concise and avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas. Also, ensure your sentences are complete and clear.

示例: I live in Mumbai, India, where it is currently the rainy season. People enjoy this time because it brings relief from the usual heat and humidity. The frequent showers make the weather cool and refreshing.

建议: Your answer has good ideas but lacks clarity and has incomplete sentences. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

示例: I prefer cold weather because hot weather in India can be very tiring. For example, when the temperature reaches 35°C, it becomes exhausting to work or stay outside. In contrast, even a gentle breeze during cold weather can improve my mood.

建议: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains repetition. Try to express your ideas more clearly and avoid repeating phrases. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

示例: I prefer dry weather for travelling because wet weather during the rainy season can cause many inconveniences. For instance, if you go out for a movie or to work, sudden heavy showers can ruin your clothes and plans.

建议: Your answer is incomplete and lacks coherence. Try to complete your sentences and organise your ideas logically using linking words. Also, avoid unnecessary repetition.

示例: No, I don't usually check the weather forecast because I find it unreliable. For example, sometimes the forecast predicts heavy rain and closures, but the day turns out to be sunny. Therefore, I don't rely on it much.

建议: Your answer addresses the question well but could be improved by using more precise vocabulary and linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid filler words and incomplete phrases.

示例: In recent years, climate change has caused global warming to increase significantly. For instance, temperatures in Mumbai now reach 40°C, which was uncommon before. This extreme heat makes it exhausting and almost unbearable to go outside.

建议: Your answer has some grammatical errors and incomplete sentences. Try to use correct sentence structures and provide clear comparisons using linking words. Avoid vague phrases and be specific.

示例: Yes, I have visited several cities with different climates. For example, some southern cities are hotter than Mumbai, with temperatures reaching 40 to 50°C, which is extremely uncomfortable. In contrast, northern cities have a more pleasant climate.

× Due to frequent showers and the cold and windy weather, it's often very refreshing and very.

✓ Due to frequent showers and the cold and windy weather, it's often very refreshing.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and very' which is incomplete and incorrect. Removing the extra 'and very' corrects the sentence and makes it grammatically complete.

× In 35°C it becomes really exhausting and on the other hand, when it is a cold season, it is really Even a small gentle breeze can help you get your mood better and it's better.

✓ At 35°C, it becomes really exhausting, and on the other hand, when it is the cold season, it is really pleasant. Even a small gentle breeze can help improve your mood, and it's better.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks proper punctuation and structure. 'In 35°C' should be 'At 35°C'. The phrase 'it is really Even a small gentle breeze...' is incomplete and needs to be split into two sentences for clarity and correctness.

× I prefer to travel there over a wet weather because rainy season often causes a lot of inconvenience for us.

✓ I prefer to travel there during dry weather because the rainy season often causes a lot of inconvenience for us.

The phrase 'over a wet weather' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'during' and 'wet weather' should not have an article 'a'. Also, the meaning suggests preference for dry weather, so correction reflects that.

× Suppose you're going out for some movie or maybe outing with friends, or maybe to work.

✓ Suppose you're going out to watch a movie or maybe going out with friends, or maybe to work.

The phrase 'going out for some movie' is incorrect; it should be 'going out to watch a movie'. Also, 'outing with friends' is better expressed as 'going out with friends' for clarity and correctness.

× So you always dress up accordingly and it is often possible that you know you get you get a heavy shower and your clothes get ruined.

✓ So you always dress up accordingly, and it is often possible that you get a heavy shower and your clothes get ruined.

The phrase 'you know you get you get' is repetitive and incorrect. Removing the repeated words corrects the sentence.

× I have had whenever I have read another forecast and it shows that it's going to be very heavy rainfall today and things might get close and shut down.

✓ I have had experiences whenever I have read a forecast that shows it's going to be very heavy rainfall today and things might close and shut down.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'I have had whenever I have read' is incorrect. Rephrasing to 'I have had experiences whenever I have read' improves clarity and grammar. Also, 'things might get close' should be 'things might close'.

× But that's the cases opposite.

✓ But that's the opposite case.

The phrase 'that's the cases opposite' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'that's the opposite case'.

× And on that particular day that is very sunny outside. So I don't really.

✓ And on that particular day, it is very sunny outside. So I don't really trust the forecast.

The original sentence is incomplete and fragmented. Adding 'trust the forecast' completes the thought and corrects the sentence.

× The effect of climate change that I've seen in recent years are very shocking and we can see that the global warming is increasing day by day.

✓ The effects of climate change that I've seen in recent years are very shocking, and we can see that global warming is increasing day by day.

'Effect' should be plural 'effects' to agree with 'are'. Also, 'the global warming' should be 'global warming' without 'the'.

× The amount of heat that has been like increasing that it is reaching 40° now in Mumbai, which was never the case.

✓ The amount of heat has been increasing, and it is reaching 40° now in Mumbai, which was never the case before.

The phrase 'that has been like increasing that it is reaching' is awkward. Simplifying to 'has been increasing, and it is reaching' improves clarity. Adding 'before' at the end completes the comparison.

× You cannot just step a foot outside your house.

✓ You cannot just step a foot outside your house.

The phrase 'step a foot' is incorrect; it should be 'step foot'. Corrected sentence: 'You cannot just step foot outside your house.'

× Yes, I have already visited public cities that have different climates from where I live.

✓ Yes, I have already visited several cities that have different climates from where I live.

'Public cities' is incorrect; likely intended 'other cities' or 'several cities'. 'Public cities' is not a common phrase in this context.

× The some of the cities in the South that I have visited are more heated than a Mumbai.

✓ Some of the cities in the South that I have visited are hotter than Mumbai.

'The some of the cities' is incorrect; 'some of the cities' is correct. 'More heated' should be 'hotter' as 'hotter' is the comparative form of 'hot'. Also, 'a Mumbai' is incorrect; 'Mumbai' does not need an article.

× Currently they have a degrees ranging up to 40 to 50° which is unbearable and extremely hot whereas in the north it is quite pleasant so.

✓ Currently, they have temperatures ranging from 40 to 50°, which is unbearable and extremely hot, whereas in the north it is quite pleasant.

'They have a degrees' is incorrect; it should be 'they have temperatures'. Also, 'ranging up to 40 to 50°' is awkward; 'ranging from 40 to 50°' is correct. The sentence was incomplete and is corrected for clarity.