天气— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Try to make your answer more coherent and concise by avoiding repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas logically and keep your sentences clear and grammatically correct.

示例: In my hometown, the weather is very hot these days because it is summer. Compared to winter, the temperature rises sharply, making it difficult to go outside.

建议: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Express your preference directly and support it with specific reasons using linking words for coherence.

示例: I prefer cold weather because my skin is very sensitive. When it is warm, it affects my skin negatively, so I find it uncomfortable to go outside.

建议: Avoid unclear words and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to compare your preferences and provide specific reasons for your choice.

示例: I prefer dry weather because we can enjoy the fresh air outside. In contrast, wet weather limits outdoor activities since rain keeps us indoors.

建议: Try to avoid repetition and improve sentence flow by using linking words. Be more concise and clear when explaining your habits.

示例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast before going outside. For example, if I plan a trip or picnic with my family, I check the forecast to ensure good weather for our outing.

建议: Work on clarity and correct vocabulary usage. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically and provide specific effects of climate change.

示例: In my opinion, global warming is increasing every day, causing climate change. This leads to temperature changes and is a serious concern worldwide.

建议: Improve sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to explain your reasons clearly and provide specific examples.

示例: Yes, I enjoy visiting cities with different climates because exploring new places is interesting. For instance, I often go to nearby mountain areas like Shimla or Manali to escape the hot weather in my city and relax my mind.

× in my hometown there is lot of heat nowadays

✓ in my hometown there is a lot of heat nowadays

The phrase 'lot of' requires an article 'a' before it when used with singular or uncountable nouns. Here, 'heat' is uncountable, so 'a lot of' is correct.

× because as summer is going on sale so their their temperature is so warmer

✓ because as summer is going on sale so the temperature is so warm

The pronoun 'their' is incorrect here as it refers to people or things previously mentioned. 'The temperature' is singular and specific, so 'the' should be used. Also, 'warmer' is comparative and needs a comparison object; 'warm' is appropriate here.

× and as compared to winters an it is so difficult for us to go outside in the sharp sharp raises of some

✓ and as compared to winters, it is so difficult for us to go outside in the sharp rises of sun

The conjunction 'an' is incorrect; it should be 'and'. Also, 'sharp sharp raises of some' is unclear; 'sharp rises of sun' is a clearer phrase. Commas help separate clauses for clarity.

× Well, I like cold is a lot as compared to whole days because my second my skin is so sensitive sensitive that I can't able to go outside in the warm weather and it it.

✓ Well, I like cold a lot as compared to hot days because my skin is so sensitive that I can't go outside in warm weather.

The phrase 'cold is a lot' is incorrect; it should be 'like cold a lot'. 'Whole days' is unclear; 'hot days' fits context. 'My second my skin' is incorrect; 'my skin' suffices. 'Can't able to' is redundant; 'can't' alone is correct. Repetition of 'it it' is unnecessary.

× If it effects my skin and it is not good for me to go outside.

✓ It affects my skin and it is not good for me to go outside.

'Effects' is a noun; the verb form is 'affects'. The sentence needs a subject and verb; 'It affects' is correct.

× Well, I prefer both type of brothers, but most probably I like Dr. Weathersby 'cause I think indeed right drive either we can enjoy the outside air

✓ Well, I prefer both types of weather, but most probably I like dry weather because I think in dry weather we can enjoy the outside air

'Both type' should be 'both types' to agree in number. 'Brothers' is incorrect; 'weather' fits context. 'Dr. Weathersby' is a mishearing of 'dry weather'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammar.

× whereas in the wet weather we cannot go outside to enjoy our life in explore different kind of things.

✓ whereas in wet weather we cannot go outside to enjoy our life and explore different kinds of things.

The conjunction 'in' before 'explore' is incorrect; 'and' is appropriate to connect two actions. 'Kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types.

× Whenever there is a rain, we can't even move from our house.

✓ Whenever it rains, we can't even move out of our house.

'A rain' is incorrect; 'rain' is uncountable and does not take an article. 'Move from our house' is better expressed as 'move out of our house'.

× Yes, I have a habit of checking the weather forecast forecast whenever I have to go outside.

✓ Yes, I have a habit of checking the weather forecast whenever I have to go outside.

The word 'forecast' is repeated unnecessarily; removing the duplicate improves clarity.

× Like I've I plan to go for a trip or picnic with my family for tomorrow, so I'll check the weather for tomorrow so that there will be no problem for us to enjoy our picnic.

✓ Like if I plan to go for a trip or picnic with my family tomorrow, I'll check the weather so that there will be no problem for us to enjoy our picnic.

The phrase 'I've I plan' is incorrect; 'if I plan' is correct. 'For tomorrow' is better placed after 'picnic' or omitted for clarity.

× As per my opinion I would say that every person know that due to redo format for stration an global warming is rise arising day by day to do to which are temperature is dropping day by day.

✓ In my opinion, I would say that every person knows that due to deforestation and global warming rising day by day, our temperature is increasing day by day.

'As per my opinion' is better as 'In my opinion'. 'Every person know' should be 'every person knows' for subject-verb agreement. 'Redo format for stration' is a mishearing of 'deforestation'. 'Is rise arising' is incorrect; 'rising' suffices. 'Are temperature' should be 'our temperature'. 'Dropping' contradicts global warming; 'increasing' is appropriate.

× So it is the biggest concern for the climate change is nowadays.

✓ So it is the biggest concern nowadays regarding climate change.

The sentence structure is awkward; rephrasing improves clarity. 'For the climate change is nowadays' is incorrect.

× Yes, I like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live because I think that exploring new things is a good way manner.

✓ Yes, I like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live because I think that exploring new things is a good way.

The phrase 'good way manner' is incorrect; 'good way' suffices.

× Similarly, are usually go to nearby mountain mountain 80 areas like Shimla or Manali wherever there is a there is a hot weather in our city so that my mind get free.

✓ Similarly, I usually go to nearby mountain areas like Shimla or Manali where there is cool weather, unlike the hot weather in our city, so that my mind gets free.

'Are usually go' should be 'I usually go'. 'Mountain mountain 80 areas' is unclear; corrected to 'mountain areas'. 'Wherever there is a there is a hot weather' is incorrect; rephrased for clarity. 'My mind get free' should be 'my mind gets free' for subject-verb agreement.