写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: ปรับประโยคให้เป็นธรรมชาติและชัดเจนขึ้น โดยตอบตรงคำถามก่อน แล้วเสริมรายละเอียดที่เป็นระบบ ใช้คำเชื่อมเมื่อจำเป็น และหลีกเลี่ยงข้อผิดพลาดด้านไวยากรณ์ (เช่น because of, sometime, informations) เช่น อธิบายหน้าที่การเขียนและตัวอย่างงานที่เขียนโดยใช้ประโยคสั้น ๆ ไม่เกิน 4-5 ประโยค

示例: Yes, I write quite a lot because my job involves data analysis. I often record findings from field surveys and write detailed reports. For example, I note observations about locations, tasks and any important incidents. This helps my team understand the results clearly.

建议: อธิบายให้ชัดว่าเขียนอะไรและเพราะอะไร เน้นโครงสร้าง (หัวข้อแล้วตามด้วยเหตุผลและตัวอย่าง) และแก้การใช้ไวยากรณ์ผิด เช่น because of, unclear time phrases และคำศัพท์ไม่เหมาะสม ให้ใช้ linking words เช่น because, so, therefore

示例: It depends on the situation, but at the moment I prefer writing notes for my documentaries on an iPad with an Apple Pencil. I like this method because it lets me capture ideas quickly and organize clips and timestamps. As a result, I can review and recall specific moments whenever I need them.

建议: ชี้แจงเหตุผลการเปลี่ยนแปลงอย่างเป็นระบบและใช้คำเชื่อม เช่น in the past / now / because / so แก้คำผิด (oven, was young) และเติมรายละเอียดเฉพาะเกี่ยวกับข้อดีของการใช้ดิจิทัล

示例: Yes, they have changed a lot. In the past I used pens and paper, but now I write mainly on digital devices like an iPad with an Apple Pencil because it is more convenient and easier to edit. This change has made my notes neater and searchable.

建议: ตอบให้ชัดว่าชอบอะไรและให้เหตุผลสั้น ๆ พร้อมตัวอย่าง ใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง แทน ‘because of’ ให้ใช้ because/so และหลีกเลี่ยงคำผิด เช่น 'spend more time' ควรเป็น 'takes more time'

示例: I prefer handwriting because I find it faster and more natural for me. Typing often slows me down and I make more mistakes on digital devices. For instance, when brainstorming, I can write ideas quickly on paper and then type them up later.

建议: ชี้ให้เห็นความไม่ชัดเจนและความผิดไวยากรณ์ (riot, because of) ควรตอบตรงคำถามด้วยความถี่ เช่น never / sometimes และอธิบายเหตุผลหรือสถานการณ์ที่อาจทำให้เริ่มเขียนเป็นบันทึก เพิ่มรายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนและเชื่อมโยง

示例: I do not keep a diary regularly. My notes are mainly schedules and to-do lists, so they are not personal entries. Occasionally I write a diary when something unusual happens or I want to reflect on a trip.

建议: ตอบให้กระชับและมีตัวอย่างชัดเจน อธิบายวิธีการและแพลตฟอร์มที่ใช้ ใช้ linking words เช่น for example, then, and แล้วให้รายละเอียดว่าทำไมวิธีนั้นมีประโยชน์

示例: I usually take photos to record my life and save them on digital platforms like Instagram. For example, I photograph scenery, events and people, then tag and organize the images so I can easily find memories later. This is convenient and quick.

× Yes, because of my work is about analysis and sometime I have a colleague some informations by survey in the field trip and then I usually write the details, orders, scenery or some.

✓ Yes, because my work involves analysis, and sometimes I work with colleagues to collect information through surveys during field trips, and then I usually write details about orders, scenery, and so on.

The sentence has multiple structure problems: unnecessary 'because of' followed by a clause (should use 'because' or rephrase), incorrect verbs ('is about analysis' -> 'involves analysis'), pluralization ('sometime' -> 'sometimes', 'informations' -> 'information'), missing prepositions and articles, and unclear phrases. Suggestion: break into smaller clauses, use correct verb forms and uncountable noun 'information', and join related ideas with conjunctions.

× It depends on the situations, but now I prefer iPad and Apple Pencil to write a note about my documentary because of is can since 5:00 to another catches and then I can recall them when I want.

✓ It depends on the situation, but now I prefer my iPad and Apple Pencil to write notes for my documentary because I can record things quickly and then recall them whenever I want.

Problems include incorrect plural 'situations' (use singular 'situation' in this context), missing possessive pronoun before 'iPad', improper use of 'because of' with clause (use 'because'), confusing phrase 'is can since 5:00 to another catches' (unclear and grammatically incorrect). Also 'note' should be plural 'notes' and 'them' must refer to 'notes'. Suggestion: use clear subject+verb structures, possessive pronouns, and standard timing expressions.

× Absolutely, because of oven and was young I usually use the pens and pencils to write on the paper, but now I change my device to a digital device such as iPad and Apple Pencil to write in the.

✓ Absolutely. When I was younger I usually used pens and pencils to write on paper, but now I have switched to digital devices such as an iPad and Apple Pencil to write on.

Errors: misuse of 'because of' with clause, incorrect word 'oven' likely meant 'when', incorrect tense ('was young' needs 'when I was younger'), inconsistent tense (use past 'used' for past habit), unnecessary repetition 'device' and missing article before 'iPad', and incomplete ending 'to write in the.' Suggestion: use 'when I was younger' for past habitual actions, maintain consistent past tense for past habits, and complete prepositional phrase ('write on [paper/device]').

× Of course, I prefer handwriting when I am writing because of I am quite a good on the writings more than typing because typing is a spend more time for me.

✓ Of course, I prefer handwriting when I write because I am better at writing by hand than typing, and typing takes more time for me.

Issues: awkward 'because of I am' (incorrect use of 'because of' with clause), misuse of adjective/adverb 'a good on the writings' (should be 'better at writing'), unnecessary article 'a', and 'is a spend more time' is ungrammatical (should be 'takes more time'). Suggestion: use comparative form 'better at', avoid 'because of' before a clause, and use 'takes more time' for time-consuming activities.

× I am not a friend in a typing on the digital gadgets and it's hard to switch.

✓ I am not good at typing on digital devices, and it's hard for me to switch.

Problems: 'not a friend in a typing' is incorrect idiom; use 'not good at typing'. 'On the digital gadgets' should be 'on digital devices' or 'on my digital devices'. 'It's hard to switch' needs an object ('for me to switch' or 'to switch between them'). Suggestion: use standard collocations 'good at typing' and 'digital devices', and include the agent with 'for me to...'.

× Even I riot writing a lot, but I never keep Diaries by writing because of I think my routine.

✓ Even though I write a lot, I never keep diaries because of my routine.

Errors: 'Even I riot writing' contains misspelling 'riot' for 'write' and wrong structure; use 'Even though I write a lot'. 'Diaries' should be lowercase 'diaries' and 'by writing' is redundant. 'because of I think my routine' is ungrammatical; use 'because of my routine' or 'because of my schedule'. Suggestion: use 'Even though' to introduce contrast and omit redundant phrasing.

× It's just like a schedule, so schedule and so simply. But then I feel keep diary when I have a.

✓ It's just like a schedule, simple and routine. But then I feel like keeping a diary when I have something to record.

Problems: repetitive and awkward phrasing 'so schedule and so simply', missing verb forms 'I feel keep diary', and incomplete ending 'when I have a.' Suggestion: use 'feel like keeping a diary' to express desire and complete the clause with 'something to record' or similar.

× I usually use a, a taking photo to record my life, such as, uh, sometime I take a photo on the bracket screen or scenery or the people, and then I just, uh, so keep memory in a digital platform such as Instagram.

✓ I usually take photos to record my life. Sometimes I take photos of the landscape, the people, or screenshots, and then I keep those memories on digital platforms such as Instagram.

Errors: unnecessary 'a, a taking photo', incorrect verb 'use a taking photo' (use 'take photos'), 'sometime' -> 'sometimes', incorrect preposition 'on the bracket screen' (likely 'screenshots' or 'on the screen'), and article misuse 'in a digital platform' (use 'on digital platforms' or 'on a digital platform'). Suggestion: use plural 'photos', correct prepositions ('of' for subjects), and 'on' for platforms; be specific ('screenshots').