写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, umm) and use correct verb forms. Give one brief supporting detail and a linking word. For example, say whether you write often and why, using simple past/present forms correctly.

示例: Yes, I write quite often. I regularly take notes on things I read because it helps me remember important points and review them later.

建议: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific examples. Reduce hesitation and use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'articles,' 'course material'). Use a linking phrase to connect reason to activity.

示例: I like to write notes about recent articles and my course material because this helps me understand new developments and retain key concepts for my studies.

建议: Answer directly and give a clear example. Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use a linking word (e.g., 'for example') and explain how or why content might change over time.

示例: It depends on the topic. For example, notes about technology usually change because new discoveries update the information, while personal notes may stay the same.

建议: Give a clear preference and two concise reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'as'. Remove fillers and repeat words. Keep answer within 2–3 sentences.

示例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me stay focused and remember information better. Also, writing by hand feels more personal and motivates me to review my notes.

建议: Be direct and clear: say whether you keep a diary and briefly explain the reason with one specific example. Avoid negative or vague language; use correct grammar (e.g., 'I don't keep a diary because').

示例: I don't keep a diary. I prefer not to record personal experiences because some memories are too private or upsetting to write down.

建议: Answer directly and give specific details about the method and how you use it. Use one linking word to add a reason or result. Avoid repetition and fillers.

示例: I use a private Telegram channel to record my daily experiences. This allows me to quickly type entries, add photos, and review them whenever I want.

× Yes, most of the time I used to writing and take some notes about whatever I, uh, read or know, you know, it's umm help to umm, remember it.

✓ Yes, most of the time I write and take some notes about whatever I read or know; it helps me remember it.

The original uses 'used to writing' which incorrectly combines 'used to' with an -ing form. 'Used to' should precede a base verb to indicate a past habit (e.g., 'used to write'), but the speaker means a current habit, so the simple present 'write' is correct. Also 'it's umm help' should be 'it helps' (present tense third person singular). Suggest using clear present simple for habitual actions and correct verb agreement. Grammar problem type ID: 8

× I am into uh taking a notes about latest articles and about my major.

✓ I am into taking notes about the latest articles and about my major.

'taking a notes' is incorrect because 'notes' is plural and does not need 'a'. Also 'latest articles' requires the definite article 'the' to refer to specific recent articles. Remove the indefinite article before a plural noun and add 'the' before 'latest'. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I think it's gonna help to be more knowledgeable about my field of study and umm, writing uh the important uh items.

✓ I think it will help me become more knowledgeable about my field of study and to write down the important items.

'gonna' is colloquial and should be 'will' for future; 'help to be more knowledgeable' is awkward and missing an object—use 'help me become more knowledgeable'. Also 'writing the important items' is unclear; use 'to write down the important items' or 'to record the important points'. Ensure proper future form and clear infinitive structures. Grammar problem type ID: 7

× For instance, umm, I used to write uh, some authority called umm, knowledge or information and that definitely would change.

✓ For instance, I used to write about something authoritative, like knowledge or information, and that would definitely change.

'I used to write uh, some authority called umm, knowledge or information' is unclear and grammatically odd. 'Used to' indicates a past habit, so keep past tense but clarify the object: 'write about something authoritative' or 'write authoritative material'. 'That definitely would change' is acceptable but 'would definitely change' is more natural after clarifying the first clause. Correct word order and choice for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 5

× I prefer, uh, handwriting, uh, personally, it makes me uh, more focused, uh, uh, motivated, uh, and keep me, umm, focused on uh, the subject, umm, whenever I write something.

✓ I prefer handwriting; personally, it makes me more focused and motivated and keeps me focused on the subject whenever I write something.

The original has multiple issues: 'keep me' should be 'keeps me' to agree with singular subject 'it' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27), and the phrase 'focused on the subject' is correct but punctuation and repetition need smoothing. Main error addressed here is incorrect verb form after 'it' requiring third person singular. Also remove redundant commas and filler words for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× Uh, honestly, I don't, umm, I don't, I keep my, uh, Diaries because I think, uh, writing Diaries can be uh, really disappointment because uh, some experiences, uh, makes me very unpleasant.

✓ Honestly, I don't keep a diary because I think writing a diary can be really disappointing because some experiences make me feel very unpleasant.

'Diaries' as used is inconsistent: singular 'a diary' is more natural when speaking of the habit of keeping one. 'Writing Diaries can be really disappointment' is wrong: 'disappointment' is a noun; use the adjective 'disappointing'. 'Some experiences ... makes me' should be 'some experiences make me' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'feel very unpleasant' is the normal collocation. Correct article use and adjective form. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× Good to a question. I currently make make a telegram channel for my Diaries. I try to, uh, keep recording, uh, about my experience in Telegram.

✓ Good question. I recently made a Telegram channel for my diary. I try to keep recording my experiences on Telegram.

'Good to a question' is incorrect; use 'Good question'. 'I currently make make' has a repeated verb and wrong tense; if started recently, 'I recently made' or 'I have created' is better. 'a telegram channel' — capitalize 'Telegram' as a proper noun. 'my Diaries' should be 'my diary' (singular) or 'my diaries' without 'my' pluralized awkwardly. 'keep recording about my experience in Telegram' should be 'keep recording my experiences on Telegram'—use 'on' for platforms and plural 'experiences' if recording multiple events. Correct tense, remove repetition, and fix preposition. Grammar problem type ID: 26}]},