写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be direct with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (tense and subject-verb agreement), avoid fillers, and give one brief supporting detail. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

示例: I used to write a lot when I was at university because professors assigned long reports of around ten thousand words. Nowadays I write much less, maybe only a few short pieces each month.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence saying what you write, use natural phrasing (keep a journal), correct grammar (reflexive phrases, and word choice), and add one specific reason with linking words like because or so that.

示例: I like to keep a journal because it helps me reflect on my progress. For example, by writing weekly entries I can track improvements and decide which skills I should focus on next.

建议: Give a direct answer, avoid vague metaphors unless brief, and provide a specific reason or example of how writing may change. Reduce hesitations and correct grammar (it changes).

示例: Yes, I think what I write will change because my priorities and interests evolve over time. For instance, in the past I wrote mostly academic reports, but in the future I might focus more on travel stories or creative essays.

建议: Answer directly (I prefer typing), correct vocabulary and expressions (familiar with the keyboard, holding a pen), and give one clear reason with a comparison. Remove fillers and finish the sentence clearly.

示例: I prefer typing because I'm more familiar with the keyboard and I can type much faster than I can write by hand. Also, it's more convenient for editing and storing documents.

建议: Give a concise frequency statement first (e.g., once a month), then add a specific reason using linking words (so/ because). Correct phrase (keep a diary) and avoid hesitation.

示例: I don't keep a diary very often — usually about once a month. I do this to record important events and to reflect on what I've learned.

建议: Start with a clear topic sentence (I use my phone camera), correct grammar (when traveling, special moments), and give one specific detail about how you use photos or videos. Avoid redundancy and clean up phrasing (memories, not countless memory).

示例: I usually use my phone camera to record trips and special moments. I take photos and short videos so I can look back on those memories whenever I want.

× Uh, I used to write a lot back, back when I were in universities seeing my professor assigning a lot of projects that I need to write a report with like 10,000 word.

✓ Uh, I used to write a lot back when I was at university because my professors assigned a lot of projects and I needed to write reports of around 10,000 words.

The sentence has multiple past-tense problems and word-form issues. 'were' should be 'was' for singular first-person past ('I was at university'); 'in universities' is odd here, use 'at university' or 'at university' for general past education; 'seeing my professor assigning' should be recast to past simple 'because my professors assigned'; 'I need' should be past 'I needed'; 'a report with like 10,000 word' needs plural 'words' and clearer phrasing 'reports of around 10,000 words'. Suggestion: Keep consistent past tense (used to/were/assigned/needed) and correct noun plurals and prepositions.

× So I think in the past I write a lot, but now, uh, it's 10.

✓ So I think in the past I wrote a lot, but now I write much less.

Mixes past and present forms incorrectly: 'in the past I write' should be past 'wrote'. The phrase 'it's 10' is unclear and ungrammatical here; replace with clear comparative phrase 'write much less'. Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits and a clear expression for current frequency.

× Actually, recently I tend to foster my habit in writing a journal.

✓ Actually, recently I have been trying to develop the habit of keeping a journal.

'Tend to foster my habit in writing a journal' is awkward and uses incorrect preposition and verb forms. Use present perfect continuous 'have been trying' to indicate a recent ongoing tendency; 'develop the habit of keeping a journal' is idiomatic. Suggestion: Use 'develop the habit of + -ing' or 'keep a journal' for natural expression.

× I want to do myself reflect so I can see how far I have been and also what I already improve myself and how should I straighten my strength more.

✓ I want to reflect on myself so I can see how far I have come, what I have already improved, and how I should strengthen my strengths further.

Several issues: 'do myself reflect' is incorrect; use 'reflect on myself' or 'reflect'. 'How far I have been' should be 'how far I have come'. 'What I already improve myself' should be past perfect/ present perfect 'what I have already improved'. 'How should I straighten my strength more' has incorrect word choice and word order; use 'how I should strengthen my strengths further' or better 'how I can build on my strengths'. Suggestion: Use correct reflexive and verb forms and natural collocations like 'reflect on myself', 'have come', 'have improved', 'strengthen my strengths'.

× Yes, I believe so because, umm, we cannot predict for the future sometime when we write on our paper that we want to do this or to do that, but in the future, it's like a plot twist.

✓ Yes, I believe so because we cannot predict the future; sometimes when we write on paper that we want to do this or that, later the future can be like a plot twist.

Problems with tense and word order: 'predict for the future' should be 'predict the future'; 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'; 'when we write on our paper that we want to do this or to do that' is awkward—'when we write on paper that we want to do this or that' is clearer. Maintain present simple when stating general truths. Suggestion: Use 'cannot predict the future' and 'sometimes' and simplify clauses.

× It change like, uh, 180°.

✓ It changes completely, like a 180-degree turn.

Subject-verb agreement and form: 'It change' should be 'It changes' in present simple. Also '180°' is better expressed as 'a 180-degree turn' or 'by 180 degrees'. Suggestion: Use correct present tense 'changes' and natural noun phrase.

× Uh, recently I prefer typing.

✓ Recently I have preferred typing.

'Prefer' as a stative verb is normally used in present perfect to indicate a recent change: 'I have preferred' or simply 'I prefer typing' for habitual present. Because speaker says 'recently', present perfect 'have preferred' is more appropriate. Suggestion: Use present perfect to indicate change over recent time.

× It's more convenient with me because I family with the keyboard compared then when I holding the pants and writing on the paper and I can see my speed writing on umm, computer or keyboard, it's uh, faster than.

✓ It's more convenient for me because I'm familiar with the keyboard compared to holding a pen and writing on paper, and I can write faster on a computer or keyboard.

Many preposition and word choice errors: 'with me' should be 'for me'; 'I family with the keyboard' should be 'I'm familiar with the keyboard'; 'compared then' should be 'compared to'; 'when I holding the pants' has wrong form and word choice—should be 'holding a pen'; 'writing on the paper' -> 'writing on paper'; 'I can see my speed writing on computer or keyboard, it's uh, faster than' is incomplete—correct to 'I can write faster on a computer or keyboard.' Suggestion: Use correct prepositions ('for me', 'compared to') and correct verb forms and collocations.

× I would say not often that I keep my diary, uh, only like once per month, so I can write what I have been through and also reflect about myself.

✓ I would say I don't keep a diary often; only about once a month, so I can write about what I have been through and reflect on myself.

Use of 'not often that I keep my diary' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'I don't keep a diary often'. 'Reflect about myself' should be 'reflect on myself'. 'Like once per month' -> 'about once a month'. Suggestion: Use negative contraction and correct preposition 'reflect on'.

× I typically use a camera from my phone, my phone camera in order to record myself when I traveling to other places or in the, uh, special moment.

✓ I typically use my phone camera to record myself when I travel to other places or during special moments.

Preposition and verb form errors: 'use a camera from my phone, my phone camera' is repetitive—use 'my phone camera'. 'in order to' is acceptable but 'to' is simpler. 'when I traveling' should be 'when I travel'. 'in the special moment' -> 'during special moments'. Suggestion: Use infinitive 'to record', correct verb form 'travel', and 'during' for time expressions.

× So it can keep this as the countless memory and I can keep it forever and I can watch what whenever I want.

✓ So it can preserve countless memories, and I can keep them forever and view them whenever I want.

'the countless memory' is incorrect: use 'countless memories' (plural) and 'preserve' or 'keep' is better. 'I can watch what whenever I want' is ungrammatical—use 'view them whenever I want'. Suggestion: Use correct quantifier pluralization and referents ('memories' and 'them').