写作— Part 1 评分报告

建议: Be concise, correct grammar and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct adverbs (often, not oftenly), fix plural/singular forms (activities), and avoid repeated words (‘resource resourceful’). Limit to 2–4 sentences and add one specific example. Use linking words like 'for example' or 'also' to connect ideas.

示例: Yes, I write quite often for both personal and work reasons. For example, I keep a daily journal and draft important emails or documents, which helps me plan tasks and organize my taxes efficiently.

建议: Open with a direct topic sentence and reduce fillers (‘uh, so basically’). Use correct verbs and clearer linking: state what you write, then give reasons with specific details. Avoid wordy phrases like 'write down everything' — be specific about examples (tasks, goals, reflections).

示例: I usually write a morning journal and a digital to‑do list. The journal helps me reflect on what I did yesterday, while the digital list reminds me of tasks and deadlines throughout the day.

建议: Give a clearer, more compact answer: state your opinion, then give a specific example of how content changed. Avoid vague phrases like 'flexible resources' and correct grammar (I grew up, I became more interested in vocabulary). Use linking words 'because' or 'for example'.

示例: Yes, I think they have changed. As a child I wrote stories and essays, but now I focus more on practical writing — notes, work lists and vocabulary I need for my job.

建议: State preference first, then give two specific reasons using concise, correct language. Remove fillers and small grammar errors ('more easier' → 'easier'). Mention concrete benefits (speed, editing, syncing).

示例: I prefer typing because it is faster and easier to edit. For example, I can check emails and sync my to‑do lists across devices, which makes planning more efficient.

建议: Answer frequency clearly (daily/weekly) with a topic sentence. Explain reasons concisely and give a specific example of what you record. Fix incomplete sentence at the end and avoid vague claims like 'feel more'.

示例: I keep a diary almost every day. I use it to record my feelings and plan my week, for example noting three key tasks for each day so I can track my progress.

建议: Begin with a direct overview, then list 2–3 specific methods with brief reasons and examples. Remove redundant phrases and correct unclear parts ('when I'm walking or cooking when I enter' unclear).

示例: I mainly use a digital journal app, take photos and short videos, and record voice memos. For instance, I record quick voice notes while walking and save photos of receipts or events to jog my memory later.

× Yes, I do write quite oftenly for both my personal and work purposes.

✓ Yes, I write quite often for both my personal and work purposes.

The adverb 'oftenly' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'often'. Also 'do write' is unnecessary for simple present affirmative. Use 'I write quite often' for natural English.

× I like to journal every activities that I'm going to do like writing emails or drafting some resource resourceful things that are going to be necessary for me in the upcoming future.

✓ I like to journal every activity I'm going to do, such as writing emails or drafting useful resources that will be necessary for me in the near future.

Use singular 'every activity' not 'every activities'. 'Resource resourceful things' is awkward and repetitive; use 'useful resources'. 'Upcoming future' is redundant; use 'near future'. Also replace 'that are going to be' with 'that will be' for conciseness.

× It also helps me to organize my tax effectively and.

✓ It also helps me organize my tasks effectively.

The original ends with 'and' leaving a fragment. Likely 'tax' was a typo for 'tasks'; correct that and remove 'to' after 'helps me' for natural structure: 'helps me organize'.

× in the morning, I usually start my day with writing journals and I acknowledge the specific things that I have done and write down everything.

✓ In the morning, I usually start my day by writing in my journal; I note the specific things I have done and write down everything.

Use 'by' + gerund to express the method: 'start my day by writing'. 'Journals' should be singular 'journal' when referring to keeping a single journal. 'Acknowledge' is awkward; use 'note'. Also improve sentence flow with punctuation.

× And secondly, I also prioritize my schedule and write the list on the digitalized app that makes me remind and do my work.

✓ I also prioritize my schedule and write the list in a digital app that reminds me and helps me do my work.

Use 'a digital app' rather than 'the digitalized app'. 'Makes me remind' is incorrect; use 'reminds me'. 'Helps me do my work' is clearer than 'and do my work'.

× Yes, I think the things that I write would probably change with the time, because in my childhood I used to write stories and essays, but when I grew up I am more keen to learn about different vocabularies and flexible resources and list of my work.

✓ Yes, I think the things I write will probably change over time, because in my childhood I used to write stories and essays, but as I grew up I became more interested in learning different vocabulary, useful resources, and lists for my work.

Use 'will probably' rather than 'would probably' for future expectation. 'With the time' should be 'over time'. 'When I grew up I am' mixes tenses—use past 'as I grew up I became'. 'Vocabularies' is uncountable in this sense; use 'vocabulary'. Clarify 'flexible resources and list of my work' to 'useful resources and lists for my work'.

× So basically I prefer typing because it is more easier and accessible to any sorts of people.

✓ I prefer typing because it is easier and more accessible to all kinds of people.

Do not use 'more easier' (double comparative); use 'easier'. 'Any sorts of people' is unnatural; use 'all kinds of people' or 'many people'.

× For example, uh, I can easily, uh, access the emails, uh, from my work, uh, due to my smartphones and I can check the work to do lists as well as make the process more efficient and it is very convenient.

✓ For example, I can easily access my work emails on my smartphone, and I can check my to-do lists, which makes the process more efficient and convenient.

Simplify and correct noun phrases: 'the emails from my work' -> 'my work emails'; 'due to my smartphones' -> 'on my smartphone'. 'Work to do lists' -> 'to-do lists'. Combine clauses for clarity.

× So basically I am very fond of Diaries because I can easily write my feelings and the activities that I have to do in the coming week or upcoming future.

✓ I am very fond of diaries because I can easily write about my feelings and the activities I have to do in the coming week.

Do not capitalize 'Diaries'. 'Write my feelings' should be 'write about my feelings'. 'Coming week or upcoming future' is redundant; 'coming week' is sufficient.

× It helps me to keep updated and I can easily track the list of to do activities in the coming days or in the work.

✓ It helps me stay organized, and I can easily track my to-do activities for the coming days or at work.

'Keep updated' is awkward; use 'stay organized' or 'keep updated on tasks'. 'List of to do activities' -> 'to-do activities' or 'to-do list'. Clarify 'in the work' to 'at work'.

× I personally believe writing helps me to feel more.

✓ I personally believe writing helps me feel better.

The original is incomplete: 'feel more' needs an adjective like 'better'. Use 'helps me feel better' to complete the thought.

× So generally, I often keep a digital journal on my phone and use note apps to record my daily activities and events.

✓ Generally, I keep a digital journal on my phone and use note apps to record my daily activities and events.

'So generally, I often' is redundant; simplify to 'Generally, I keep'. 'Note apps' is acceptable but 'note-taking apps' is more natural; however change kept minimal per instructions.

× This is more convenient and easy to access.

✓ This is more convenient and easier to access.

Use parallel comparative forms: 'more convenient and easier' rather than mixing 'convenient and easy'.

× I often take photos and videos that I can easily capture and visually see.

✓ I often take photos and videos so I can easily capture and view them.

'That I can easily capture and visually see' is redundant. Use 'so I can easily capture and view them' for clarity. 'View' is better than 'visually see'.

× I create voice memos when I'm walking or cooking when I enter.

✓ I create voice memos when I'm walking or cooking, or whenever an idea comes to me.

The phrase 'when I enter' is unclear and incomplete. Replace with 'or whenever an idea comes to me' to convey intent. Ensure sentence has a clear verb and object.